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Interlaced, official feedbacks n stuff thread

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9 months 4 days ago - 9 months 4 days ago #67490 by JulesMorrison
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This is for Interlaced , sequel to Parallels .

All feedback is welcome! I will also link parts as they are posted.
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9 months 4 days ago #67491 by JulesMorrison
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Part one , in which our heroine gets her head shrunk.
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9 months 4 days ago #67492 by JulesMorrison
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Part two , in which our heroine meets her adoptive grandpa.
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8 months 4 weeks ago #67550 by JulesMorrison
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Part three , in which she makes a map, and a friend.
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8 months 4 weeks ago #67558 by Mister D
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Gothmog nods. "The universe is immense, and you won't run out of things to learn. But also, I find it helps to accept the moments, rather than push them away. If you're looking towards what will happen, it can feel like nothing is happening now. But that's not true at all. In every moment, so many things are happening. If you allow yourself to experience and care about them, then time is never empty. The thing you are waiting for will come around in its proper time, and then your attention can turn towards it. But right now, my daughter has tentacles stroking your scalp. Right now, miss Cyberkitty has lovely blue eyes and a gentle look in them. See the moment, and it's full."


Very Taoist. :D


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8 months 4 weeks ago #67564 by JulesMorrison
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Part four , in which she learns of trouble, reassures a friend, and gets a lesson.

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8 months 4 weeks ago #67577 by JulesMorrison
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Part five , in which she has an enjoyable morning, gets scolded by Chou, and tells the school her plans.

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8 months 3 weeks ago #67598 by JulesMorrison
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Part six , in which there are two councils of war, plans are made, and she meets Foob.

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8 months 3 weeks ago #67615 by JulesMorrison
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Part seven , in which she gets new boots and learns to solder.

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8 months 3 weeks ago #67617 by Mister D
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The idea that Bugs had would be covered under the Workshop ban on working with nano-replicators.

Use a bird to make more eggs.

Goes to hide after the bio-devisors become inspired... :D


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