Question Noa: Hard Being Pure - Discussion

Discussion, speculation, question and comment thread for Noa's origin story. Enjoy!

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Part 4

Bout damn time it's out. Your sig has been teasing me from day one! Shame on you! But it was a really good read so far. Even though i'm not a huge fan of " House" level medical drama. I have to admit it's really well written. And the level of drama concerning her condition is quite high. Can't wait to see what her final condition turns into.

It's only been about two months since I first opened the WhatIf for review, and I kept going back and forth on the editing as I wrote the other chapters. Give me some slack _(-ω-`_)

Thanks! Any guess so far? I cut away so much stuff that I'm not even sure I left enough hints to be able to take a reasonable guess anymore. Someone guessed it right from the get go on the WhatIf thread, but that was before I took the knife at the word count, so they had lot more details to go on. If you have any ideas, I'm interested in hearing them, as the contrast would give me some perspective on how blurry I made her condition in the end.

Congrats on getting your story up there. ;3

GrimGrendel wrote: Someone guessed it right from the get go on the WhatIf thread

Hi !

it's true the first few "drafts" were more explicit, I will have to read this last version soon (Maybe tonight).

First of all, congratulation. it's obvious that you have put a lot of effort into this story. I highly recommend it for those who would still be hesitating. The characters are charming (Dr. Evans !), the concepts are interesting and I think it is one of the (if not the) only story that I have read so far which put the accent so much on the processus itself of mutation.

And don't worry, it only gets better and better.

Part 2 is up. Enjoy!

(Yay !)

Part 3 is now ready. Have a nice read.

Last part is now available. Have a nice read.

Am I bumping this thread because I think this story deserves more attention and that it could be useful to read it before the release of an hypothetical sequel ? Maybe.

I think one of the greatest endorsement I could give it would be that if I had no prior knowledge of the existence of the Whateley Universe, this story would have definitely made me interested in knowing more about it. The same way Morpheus's stories made me come here.

Your characters are all really well fleshed out. You have no unidimensional character that I can really think of at the top of my head. sure, sometime it can seems that way or the reader might be somewhat disturbed by someone's behaviour but each time latter on it will be explained. Evans, Phobia and Noa are pretty much awesome. (and I have been a big fan of Evans since his introduction, every scene in which he appears instantly makes me eager to find out how other people will react)

You have also explored a lot of interesting concepts here (be it Noa's powers and their implication, or the nature itself of Dr. Evans among other things).

Regarding the last part (because the 4th part was the last one), I tend to be someone who easily loose track of what is happening in a story when a lot of people are involved and the action becomes a little messy. I also tend to forget about character's names. Here, it could easily have happened. It was a big showdown, with a lot of characters and some of them hadn't had a lot of screentime before. And yet I knew who was who, in which faction, where and what they were doing. Even thought we were pretty much jumping from PoV to Pov. so kudos to you.

And finally, the way you have tied up everything in the end to make sense of what had happened to Noa was great. the story had raised a lot of questions (ok, not here but behind the scene) and your answer was a great Pay Off.

I just finished reading this story; it had me hooked the whole night (7.42 AM here). The first two chapters were the best thing I ever read in the Whateley universe. There is so much satisfaction and reality in seeing common people trying to come to terms with mutations that they have no hope of doing anything about.

It got a little crazy for me after the bullies and the arm until the kidnapping, but the story recovered mostly (albeit with slightly less steam). The good parts were excellent; the bad parts were good. All-in-all I would say that it was a wonderful effort, and you are definitely one of the stars of this universe.

Now, to sleeeeeep.....

Oh, and I cannot wait to see the bipolar cat! What an idea!