Question Kitsune 2 Discussion

Again, I adore feedback! This section is the one that isn't done yet. Kitsune was finished on the old site, so it was simple enough to re-post my edited finished version here. This one... yeah. It's a work in progress, and I write real real slow. Like, glacially slow. I am first and foremost a husband and a father of three, and I work full time. So I write as fast as I can, but it's no where near as fast as I'd like.

I apologize for the inevitable glacial progress. I will endeavor to do better, but no promises :/

Anyway, discuss away!

So, we are looking at Kitty finding out about more of what being a Kitsune entails in terms of powers and attitudes. Good to see at least some new material being posted here, although I will admit that there are a lot of old fanfic stories that I will miss if they don't get reposted.

I'm definitely trying to expand and to begin to delve into things in this second story. The first was more of an introduction. Who are some of these major players, what are they about, what are their immediate/obvious personalities. What are some of the relationships among the family and their friends. More of a setting the stage and letting people get an impression of where we're starting from.

The intention now, is to begin to set up the problems and how things begin to adjust (or not) to the major change: Conner's transformation into Kitty. I mean there will be more characters of course, but the major players have all been written so now we can begin to examine what goes on and delving more into how Kitty has to react and adapt to a new, very different world from the one Conner grew up in.

The goal of course is for each new story to continue building upon the one before and examining what parts of life have to change and adjust, and what things actually stay the same throughout. As well as all the various plots and problems that occur along the way to keep things interesting

I finished writing the in progress parts of the first section and did a few minor phrasing edits, so there's parts there added as well as a whole second section.

I hated writing this part and it makes me sad just thinking about it.

How do you adequately describe someone who is really coming to the realization that they've lost their whole life? It hurts just trying to put myself there to even have a glimmer at trying to write it.

Poor Kitty

At least it gives her a good, if traumatic, reason for going to Whateley.

I got some (very very valid) feedback that the first scene was a little much in terms of not properly describing what was going on behind the scenes with Kitty. The intention is that (as a Kitsune) she has an ability from her spirit to convert Ki expenditure during sex from a partner into Essence. In a case like this where she has used up pretty much all her Essence reserves, her body is doing an unconscious need to gather Essence to fix the problem of not having any.

So I'm reworking the first portion a bit. I've added a paragraph to the before and to the after. I plan on putting in a scene with Kitty talking with Siona between the Troll scene and the kitchen-fire. I bumped the kitchen fire to the second post to allow for room for the upcoming scene which will be added to the first post when completed.

The one downside of works in progress, revisions! At least I can keep a record here so people are aware when something changes.

Send it to me when done. I'll edit it.

I inserted the two paragraphs already so far, the "new" section I haven't started yet. Debating between working on that, or going ahead and working on the actual Whateley part. Might just do the Whateley part and come back to the Siona scene because that scene will be harder and I've got nothing at the moment for it ;/

Finding all your knowledge gone has to be scary.....

Drinking is never the answer though! /end PSA

Alright, got the new section inserted as well as the couple of paragraphs trying to expand and more spell out what exactly was going on. Hopefully that makes it a bit more clear and better overall Now onto the new parts! Which hopefully will be up in the next few days.

Obviously "next few days" didn't happen I'm paused in the second story until I finish the one new section I want for the first one then finish "submitting" it. Then I'll come back to here. Working on both just didn't work out and life has been hellish this year so my time has been non-existent. Good news is I think we're getting a handle on things time-wise so hopefully I'll be back "in the saddle" relatively soon.

Look forward to it

Yay!

Ok.. Kitsune 2: A Second Tale of Two Tails (pt 1) is now officially written (I think) and open for comments and feedback before I make it "published."

Have at!

http://whateleyacademy.net/index.php/content_page/item/698-kitsune-2-a-second-tale-of-two-tails?preview=1

very good i look forward to more