Question A Light in the Dark Discussion

Not completed yet, but pretty close.
Let me know what you think.

Love this story so far. I'm hoping Caroline gets to meet Jerico befor it comes to a conclusion.

This arc will end before she reaches Whateley. I've some ideas for what she'll be doing at Whateley, but she'll mostly be a side character, showing up in other stories and featuring prominently in Glitch's story In The Lions Den. So she may meet Jericho on page or not.
It realy won't matter much though, she can't see his clothes and they don't really have any common interests besides wanting to heal people.

That would actually be the point, as while most people would be gagging at his clothes, she would be reacting to his beautiful soul.

That could be interesting.
The bit I've written about her first day, has her calling Fubar beautiful, so stranger things could happen.

Isodecan wrote: That would actually be the point, as while most people would be gagging at his clothes, she would be reacting to his beautiful soul.

Good point. I never really thought about that with Insight.

NeoMagus wrote:

Isodecan wrote: That would actually be the point, as while most people would be gagging at his clothes, she would be reacting to his beautiful soul.

Good point. I never really thought about that with Insight.

What is it they say? 'Beauty is only skin deep, its whats inside that counts' and many of us have to work at showing the world our inside while being viewed by our outside.

The last time I tried to show people what's inside of me, they panicked and called an ambulance, my doctors told me that I had misunderstood something, but I'm still not sure what.

Nice revision on an interesting story, only part way through the second post. Noted thing

"Also," Dr. Carson said, ignoring the threat, "you need to get your powers tested for the next part of your training. I have some literature for both of you to read. It's a private high school for mutants, called Whateley."

Dr. Chance is called Dr. Carson instead.

Dang, kept the brutal part with the attack by the creatures and leaving Caroline animalistic for days. And the brutal attack as they try to flee them. Those hit hard emotionally, especially since I suspect due to the various animal/human natures of them with the black ooze that they are Voodoowolves as Jade called them. Which is bad, really bad. Took a strong team of students to take out a large pack of them, just Dr. Chance, the guards and Caroline this time. Or are they something else?

Thanks I'll go fix them up.
And yes they were voodoo wolves. I kept it a small pack, and the body guards were using incendiary munitions. The reason Caroline went a little nuts was the first fight was she spread her soul out too far. She grabbed everything she could almost becoming it, and it took her mind a bit of time to recover and reconnect everything. Also she very briefly touched the things mind, which is not good for her sanity. If she didn't have the protective shields and crystals in place, she'd have never come back.

The reason Caroline went a little nuts was the first fight was she spread her soul out too far. She grabbed everything she could almost becoming it, and it took her mind a bit of time to recover and reconnect everything.

It would have been nice to see this from inside her head a little bit more. What did the world look like to her for thoughs few days?

Good idea, I'll do it when I prepare it for publishing.

Well someone is well on her way to b coming Whateley's answer to Daredevil.

Are we pretty much caught up to the point we were at before you decided to do the rewrite? You said you were planning her entry to campus as a diff arc, right?

Haven't had the chance to go over the latest chapter you posted, but will read it soon.


Also, figured you were one of the fan fic authors that applied to be added to canon, Dom. With all the stuff you churn out, you'd probably be a pretty good candidate.

konzill wrote: Well someone is well on her way to b coming Whateley's answer to Daredevil.

With psychic powers to let her change emotions and drain life when she's in astral form.
She's a little bit more powerful than Daredevil.

shadeofred wrote: Are we pretty much caught up to the point we were at before you decided to do the rewrite? You said you were planning her entry to campus as a diff arc, right?

Haven't had the chance to go over the latest chapter you posted, but will read it soon.

Also, figured you were one of the fan fic authors that applied to be added to canon, Dom. With all the stuff you churn out, you'd probably be a pretty good candidate.

The latest chapter is all new. The previous two are older ones with changes and editing.
And yes I have put one fanfic up to be published as fanfic, no spoilers or anything so I won't say which one it is. Once things are worked out properly, and I know what I'm doing I'll put more up. Most of them will be changed quite a bit, especially after the first chapter, so it's taking a bit of work to get it right.