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9 years 5 months ago #1 by Domoviye
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    • While the story is complete, some feedback would be appreciated. Let me know what you think. After the dust of the new website settles, and I've taken any problems into account, I'm going to ask that it be published as fanfic.
    So hit me with your best, I want it to shine.
    9 years 5 months ago #2 by Arcanist Lupus
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    • Well, like the Tink story, Never appears to be truncated at the end. I think you may need to break it into multiple posts.
    "Shared pain is lessened; shared joy, increased — thus do we refute entropy." - Spider Robinson
    9 years 5 months ago #3 by Domoviye
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    • Yeah, I just fixed that up. It would be nice if they aid that it was too long. Oh well.
    9 years 5 months ago #4 by NeoMagus
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    • At least it was easy enough to sort out where the story cut off so you could tack on what was left of it.
    ... . . -.- / .--- ..- ... - .. -.-. . .-.-.- / .-.. --- ...- . / -- . .-. -.-. -.-- .-.-.- / .-- .- .-.. -.- / .... ..- -- -... .-.. -.-- / .-- .. - .... / -.-- --- ..- .-. / --. --- -.. .-.-.-
    9 years 5 months ago #5 by Domoviye
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    • Yeah once I was told it took about 4 minutes, and most of that was editing the ending.
    9 years 4 months ago #6 by konzill
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    • So what ended up on Rona's MIS in the end?
    On the first reading I almost thought she was going
    to get a Wiz rating, then I realised that she was just high :(

    I love your Whateley characters, and I do mean all of them.
    OK Tink gets a bit grating in large doses but I suspect she was meant too.
    9 years 4 months ago #7 by Domoviye
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    • Tink is actually meant to grate like that. Just think what it must be like if she was real.
    In Shattered Glass, I'll eventually show her MID. It will be Warping 3 since she can turn herself and other things invisible and exemplar 2. Right now her MID ratings are just made up and less then useless.
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    • I was expecting at least a bit of regen. After all her hair grows back in about an hour. And she did do the whole overnight transition thing rather then it taking months.
    9 years 4 months ago #9 by Domoviye
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    • Her hair is a special case, it's the only thing that regenerates so fast. As for the fast transition, that was due to burnout. So she either had it and it disappeared, or it only looked like she had it from burnout symptoms.
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