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Question Interest Check: Dead Girl walking

8 years 11 months ago #1 by Wyverntamer
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  • A/N I wanted to see who would be interested in this story idea, so I thought I'd make a quick draft of the first chapter. I have not yet thought of a name, so any name used in this Topic will be a placeholder. ENJOY!
    (And I might not get to finishing this until way later than when I am writing this, since I am still catching up with the main timelines. I was afraid I would lose the idea, as I have done more than once)

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    I hope you enjoyed that, this was written in about half an hour, and is the first part of the first chapter.

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    Two, I really like watching thunderstorms from inside the house, reading, gaming and sleeping.
    8 years 11 months ago #2 by Wrayth
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  • Since this is an interest check, I will go ahead and reply... You have a good idea, this little teaser and the idea you presented caught my attention, so yeah, I am looking forward to see where you take this.

    Thanks for sharing, and may your muse continue to provide tales for you to share with us.

    Wrayth
    8 years 11 months ago #3 by Quorry
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  • I am also interested. This is a teaser written in a short amount of time so I will just assume the final product will be more polished, and a bit easier to follow. The POV confused me a little.
    But the idea itself, as far as it was expressed, makes me want to read more. :)
    8 years 11 months ago #4 by Wyverntamer
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  • Yeah, I found taht out too when I was rereading the other drafts I have not yet put up here (and probably never will, not satisfied with them), I know that when it is in first person, she is writing it down, but I just can't find a way to make that clear.

    Two things you need to know about me:
    One, I'm not my characters, no matter how much I may sometimes act like them;
    Two, I really like watching thunderstorms from inside the house, reading, gaming and sleeping.
    8 years 11 months ago #5 by Quorry
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  • You could try making it in italics or something, to differentiate it from the rest of the text.
    8 years 11 months ago #6 by Mister D
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  • Nice intro, chewy set of abilities, and a good set-up for potential routes for the back-story.

    As a short, it stands nicely.

    Depending on how the ability works, it would also give some lead-ins to some good scenes with Ito/combat classes, and/or the magic dept, and/or the psychic dept.

    Looking forward to further developements.


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    8 years 11 months ago #7 by Wyverntamer
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  • I have at least one scene planned that could mark a fued between Alexandria (I've decided on a name for the main character, though not on one for the story) and Ito, in the magic dept and psychic dept I am not quite sure.

    Two things you need to know about me:
    One, I'm not my characters, no matter how much I may sometimes act like them;
    Two, I really like watching thunderstorms from inside the house, reading, gaming and sleeping.
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