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Question A Changeling's Tale Discussion
- Cryptic
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I am a caffeine heathen; I prefer the waters of the mountain over the juice of the bean. Keep the Dews coming and no one will be hurt.
- Malady
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Especially since this is gonna go to Earth where some character from the colony is going to discover actual Five Fold philosophy...
OH! The distorted FiveFold is the culture of Di'ar!
Wait... Hmm... If Magical Traditions are based on those who still believe in them, Di'ar's gonna import her Tradition to Earth? ... Reminds me of 500 Kingdoms Traditions...
it's Sidhe > its Sidhe
where to close > were too close
collapsed(,) reality
where cut > were cut
For (a) time
Lead by (a) charismatic
Night-terror(,) the
where called back > were called back.
where forgotten > were forgotten
- Cryptic
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I'm kind of using the Shannara Chronicles, both the books and the show, as as well as Brook's other series Knights of the Word as sort of the basis of the Sundering and the effects on the worlds. I recommend the Shannara Chronicals show and the core Shannara books to the Sion series. The latest few Shannara books I haven't gotten to yet, and the the Knights... I had to struggle through as they depressed the hell out of me. I swear Domo wrote them.
I am a caffeine heathen; I prefer the waters of the mountain over the juice of the bean. Keep the Dews coming and no one will be hurt.
- Cryptic
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Thought the story needed a better name after I realized where I was going with things. And Di'ar's code name will likely be Changeling.
I am a caffeine heathen; I prefer the waters of the mountain over the juice of the bean. Keep the Dews coming and no one will be hurt.
- Malady
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We haven't seen Trakar yet... Hmm... I wonder if he's a Pure... Will he try and come to the rescue... Perhaps Ms. Zivyh to the rescue?
Outer Space Sidhe are gonna be news to Earth Sidhe... Use Yukinoko to meet them, perhaps... ... Wait, we don't know the time on Earth... could be Gen2, Gen1, Gen3(+)...
where of
de(s)cent
her step(,) she
where still
communities(,) the
mind(,) Di'ar
Morning(,) Ms(.)
begone > be gone
Sylla(-)descended [?]
off , and > off, and
skin tone > skintone [?]
shop keeper > shopkeeper
carry bag(.)
outer most > outer(-)most
it's like > its life
medium(-)weight [?]
where added
it's double > its double
mother craft > mothership [?]
grass(-)like
where hell
it's spring fed > its spring(-)fed [?]
bother her > both her
Instantly(,) Lilloway
You's is > Your's
I burn(,) unlike
over abundance > overabundance
to(o) badly
what ever > whatever
time(s)?
where not
where a record
where her due her actions > were due to her
no augmentation(,) so
where the size
terrain(,) Afterglow
- Cryptic
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Topic Author
And I like Lillow as well and am trying to work her in more. And Trakar is not pure Sidhe, his family is more Court of Water. -wrinkles nose- I think that's where they'd fit into the Courts any way...
And Malady, just remember what happens to most Changelings in the Old Fairy Tales...

I am a caffeine heathen; I prefer the waters of the mountain over the juice of the bean. Keep the Dews coming and no one will be hurt.
- Cryptic
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Topic Author
Got something for you all to think about; Should the Ponys, who I do have a better name for, be a species that naturally evolved on their world, where uplifted by sufficiently advanced being (example mad science or exiled Five Fold), or a bit of a mix?
I am a caffeine heathen; I prefer the waters of the mountain over the juice of the bean. Keep the Dews coming and no one will be hurt.
- Malady
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Cryptic wrote: Short update posted.
Got something for you all to think about; Should the Ponys, who I do have a better name for, be a species that naturally evolved on their world, where uplifted by sufficiently advanced being (example mad science or exiled Five Fold), or a bit of a mix?
Well... Does it matter? How does it play into how they interact with other species or something? Maybe don't bring it up until you need to? Or flip a coin or something??
magiced > magicked [?]
to(o) small
where brilliant gold
“I...” Trakar hesitated for a second, which was long enough for Di'ar to magic off his kilt. From the corner of her eye she saw Lillow's eyes go wide as the satyr girl took in Trakar's naked form. For his part Trakar gave Di'ar an 'I am not amused.' look before sliding into the water.
[Lolol]
[Wait... That sex-ed lesson might indicate the invaders end up thinking Trakar's a girl... Which affects things...]
actually where paying
As her and the other two's
[Something's wrong here? Something like "Me and her" or other error like that?]
Shenanigans the Dangerous and Extremely Competent
[My grammar senses were like 'What'. And then I got it when you said "self-granted title"! ... Hi Trixie! So, is she actually of similar rank to Afterglow, or not? ]
to(o) darn
eliminated > eliminating
- Cryptic
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And yes, Sex-Ed is very interesting for them.
And I hadn't considered that for Trak. Thanks.

And yes, Shen is the same rank as Afterglow. I fiddled with the previous chapter to remove Glow's wings.
I am a caffeine heathen; I prefer the waters of the mountain over the juice of the bean. Keep the Dews coming and no one will be hurt.
- Cryptic
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Topic Author
I am a caffeine heathen; I prefer the waters of the mountain over the juice of the bean. Keep the Dews coming and no one will be hurt.
- Cryptic
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Topic Author
I am a caffeine heathen; I prefer the waters of the mountain over the juice of the bean. Keep the Dews coming and no one will be hurt.
- Malady
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Cryptic wrote: Nekked Ponies or clothed Ponies? Such tough choices....
Does their culture involve clothes? Do they have a need for clothes... Questions like that.
- Cryptic
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Topic Author
Malady wrote:
Cryptic wrote: Nekked Ponies or clothed Ponies? Such tough choices....
Does their culture involve clothes? Do they have a need for clothes... Questions like that.
That's exactly what I was mulling. I can see them with lesser body taboos then humans, but the mental image of antho-pony wing wang makes me thing the males need something to keep the mares from being distracted.
I am a caffeine heathen; I prefer the waters of the mountain over the juice of the bean. Keep the Dews coming and no one will be hurt.
- Malady
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Cryptic wrote:
Malady wrote:
Cryptic wrote: Nekked Ponies or clothed Ponies? Such tough choices....
Does their culture involve clothes? Do they have a need for clothes... Questions like that.
That's exactly what I was mulling. I can see them with lesser body taboos then humans, but the mental image of antho-pony wing wang makes me thing the males need something to keep the mares from being distracted.
Only guys wear pants or something, then?
- Cryptic
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Kilt?Malady wrote:
Cryptic wrote:
Malady wrote:
Cryptic wrote: Nekked Ponies or clothed Ponies? Such tough choices....
Does their culture involve clothes? Do they have a need for clothes... Questions like that.
That's exactly what I was mulling. I can see them with lesser body taboos then humans, but the mental image of antho-pony wing wang makes me thing the males need something to keep the mares from being distracted.
Only guys wear pants or something, then?
I am a caffeine heathen; I prefer the waters of the mountain over the juice of the bean. Keep the Dews coming and no one will be hurt.
- Malady
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Cryptic wrote:
Kilt?Malady wrote:
Cryptic wrote: I can see them with lesser body taboos then humans, but the mental image of antho-pony wing wang makes me thing the males need something to keep the mares from being distracted.
Only guys wear pants or something, then?
If they never invented pants, I guess?
Wikipedia on Trousers wrote: Invented in Asia and subsequently spreading worldwide, ... Made of wool, the trousers had straight legs and wide crotches, and were likely made for horseback riding.
I guess you could justify pants vs. kilt however you want. I think we're at the "reason is irrelevant" level of detail?
- Cryptic
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Honestly I feel bad for Di'ar. She could have been bad ass in this scene, but I wanted it to be more Afterglow and Shen.
Nest up, what is Lillow doing to help fend off the Ponies?
I am a caffeine heathen; I prefer the waters of the mountain over the juice of the bean. Keep the Dews coming and no one will be hurt.
- Malady
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Also nice note on magic notes. I wonder how the Ponies' use will affect the Tree, if it does...
And that's as far as I've got. Nevermind!
... Oh! You made MLP Changelings! Totally missed that as a meaning! And that Assimilate Traits spell, applied to those 'Changelings' make a Hermaphrodite Whateley Changey, and using it on a kid to take over lives is the Fairy Changet meaning!
Celestia always struck me as a weird name for a Diarch, as it encompasses the whole sky, but if you have a singke daughter, and don't think you'll have another, and want astrologically aligned names, I guess it makes a lot of sense!
Typos, on mobile, so not exhaustive. Important ones first:
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Pergusi
- Cryptic
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Haven't quite decided how the tree will react. I do know that time away from Earth had mutated it some, so it might just go all James Cameron's Avatar on the invaders.
The MLP Changelings and Flutter-Bat where kind of a spur of the moment addition. Not sure if Di'ar is going to be feeling any effects from this spell, but I do know she would get a "Modified" label added to an MID once Glow is done with her.
I am a caffeine heathen; I prefer the waters of the mountain over the juice of the bean. Keep the Dews coming and no one will be hurt.
- Cryptic
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Topic Author
I am a caffeine heathen; I prefer the waters of the mountain over the juice of the bean. Keep the Dews coming and no one will be hurt.