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9 years 5 months ago #1 by Domoviye
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    • Another one that's complete and I'll be looking at getting promoted as fanfiction. So once again hit me with your worst so I can improve it.
    9 years 5 months ago #2 by NeoMagus
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    • But I've already given you lots of feedback on most of your Whateley stuff. Now you want MORE? :blink: ;)
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    9 years 5 months ago - 9 years 5 months ago #3 by Domoviye
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    • Feed the beast!
    Actually this is mostly to get it a tiny but more polished and after the final bits of work are done on the forum I'll ask about having it upgraded to official fanfiction.
    And this time I'm asking people to be critical, even brutal.
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    9 years 5 months ago #4 by E M Pisek
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    • Oh great we now have to feed the Beast ;) more praise and ADULATION in his accomplishments as we turn the screws tighter to obtain more output for said furry of work.

    Guess that's what you get for working for peanut shells. (empty I might add).

    Now back to work slave else I shall retrieve said shells and feed them to the next bohemian rhapsody.

    Now on a serious note. I will go over them in the morn as I will give them a serious once over.
    What is - was. What was - is.
    9 years 5 months ago #5 by NeoMagus
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    • Yeah, that's what I figured was the case, I just wanted to give you a hard time about it. :P

    It's better to have multiple people look over it for that kind of purpose anyways. Different people will notice different things, so the chances that small things get missed are greatly reduced.
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    9 years 5 months ago #6 by Domoviye
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    • Ib12us wrote:
    Guess that's what you get for working for peanut shells. (empty I might add).

    I'm a writer, empty peanut shells make me happy. It's when I try to eat misty air for a week that start getting hungry.
    9 years 5 months ago #7 by Cryptic
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    • Domo, just got a question on your general timeline for this story; it seems like you got from November 07 through the end of that year then some how time jump back to November 07. What dates did you really want to use?
    I am a caffeine heathen; I prefer the waters of the mountain over the juice of the bean. Keep the Dews coming and no one will be hurt.
    9 years 5 months ago - 9 years 5 months ago #8 by Domoviye
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    • I don't see the problem.
    It stops on November 30th, 2007, the dates are all correct.
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    9 years 5 months ago #9 by Cryptic
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    • -frowns- Maybe it wasn't Never then. I may have been miss reading or transferring my issues with my DeVille story time line onto your story.
    I am a caffeine heathen; I prefer the waters of the mountain over the juice of the bean. Keep the Dews coming and no one will be hurt.
    9 years 5 months ago #10 by Domoviye
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    • You could be confusing the first one I posted on the old forum and this one. In the first one it starts in November and ends in 2008, the new version got pushed back half a year so that she and Rona could meet up.
    9 years 5 months ago #11 by Cryptic
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    • K, that might be it.
    I am a caffeine heathen; I prefer the waters of the mountain over the juice of the bean. Keep the Dews coming and no one will be hurt.
    9 years 4 months ago #12 by Malady
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    • Just read Shattered Glass on BigCloset. 'Cause I didn't know how to subscribe to a whole subforum here...

    Are Ruth's tattoos inspired by Skybolt's? I just realized they seem similar...
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    My Patreon. But, support the Crystal Hall 1st?
    9 years 4 months ago #13 by Domoviye
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    • Little bit. When I wrote this they hadn't described her tattoos very much, so I knew she had them, I just expanded on it. At first it was just going to be counting the dead, then it kind of expanded.
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