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Question Eire, my FIRST Whateley story.

6 years 6 months ago #201 by Malady
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  • Oh. Yeah. Yeah... ...

    Whelp, holding out hope for Essy getting happier, in any case! ... At least she's happy most of the time! ... I think.
    6 years 6 months ago #202 by Rose Bunny
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  • Malady wrote: Oh. Yeah. Yeah... ...

    Whelp, holding out hope for Essy getting happier, in any case! ... At least she's happy most of the time! ... I think.


    I don't know if it's happiness, or that kind of 5 year-old's wide-eyed innocence and wonder... in a 14 year old.
    ..which is an ironic thing, because after she became conscious, she enjoyed sex and probably is very good at it. Which goes very contrary to the entire innocence thing.

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    6 years 6 months ago #203 by null0trooper
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  • Rose Bunny wrote:

    Malady wrote: Oh. Yeah. Yeah... ...

    Whelp, holding out hope for Essy getting happier, in any case! ... At least she's happy most of the time! ... I think.


    I don't know if it's happiness, or that kind of 5 year-old's wide-eyed innocence and wonder... in a 14 year old.
    ..which is an ironic thing, because after she became conscious, she enjoyed sex and probably is very good at it. Which goes very contrary to the entire innocence thing.


    Maybe not, as her experience of sex was at a point when all she could understand was that it was something that made her and others feel good. She hasn't had to experience sex and/or romance used to manipulate or hurt her or others.

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    6 years 6 months ago #204 by Rose Bunny
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  • *fights through feeling sick to bring you part 36*

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    6 years 6 months ago #205 by Malady
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  • Starts off a bit sad, but then its so sweet! ... Dont tire yourself on our account! [ Click to expand ]
    6 years 6 months ago #206 by Rose Bunny
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  • I can't find that bbe that you listed in the typos. As far as the far-sightedness, hm... a far-sighted redhead ... sounds like me. *giggles*
    Tamarack may or may not be alive still... maybe. You caught on to The Pimp. That's who it is.
    Aaaand...
    As far as Essylt's song... Nikki is described as having a very melodious voice, so I thought that Essie would be similarly gifted.

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    6 years 6 months ago #207 by Malady
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  • Rose Bunny wrote: I can't find that bbe that you listed in the typos.


    "She would bbe surrounded by her supposed peers"

    Rose Bunny wrote: As far as the far-sightedness, hm... a far-sighted redhead ... sounds like me. *giggles*


    Ah.

    Rose Bunny wrote: As far as Essylt's song... Nikki is described as having a very melodious voice, so I thought that Essie would be similarly gifted.


    Mmm. ... Now I'm imagining an all-Sidhe band! Lol.
    6 years 6 months ago #208 by Rose Bunny
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  • working on the next part... all I'm going to say is Essylt as a kitty cat.

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    6 years 6 months ago #209 by Malady
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  • I'm confused, but intrigued, and wildly guessing that she gets transformed, but that's highly unlikely.

    Catgirl costume? ... Dunno... ... Halloween costume?? Given that Part 36 is "September 4th", that's a ~2 month skip? Hmm.
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  • Rose Bunny wrote: working on the next part... all I'm going to say is Essylt as a kitty cat.


    Doctor: "Surprise! You're the proud mother of triplets!"

    Essylt: *growls*

    Doctor: "Can't. breathe! Just a ... joke..."

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    6 years 6 months ago #211 by Rose Bunny
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  • Trick or treat, Part 37 is up.

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  • Part 37! [ Click to expand ]
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  • No, it's Jimmy. Putting down "Jeff" was a brain-fart. and yes, her eyes changed color. But maybe she just mutated. Eden Prairie is the rich, snooty suburb of the Twin Cities, akin to our version of Beverly Hills. Maybe we are seeing a new snotty girl that might go to Whateley and throw down with Essie...

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    6 years 5 months ago #214 by Rose Bunny
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  • 38 is up.

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  • Huh? What we doing at Whateley? ... Oh! Cool!

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    Setting up a nursery! Aww! ... This is a good, good day! :)

    ...

    Wait... Given that Whateley scene... New threats come?? Oh no.
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  • Happy Turkey Day. Did you know that Minnesota is the top-producing state, as far as turkey farming? It's true. so celebrate Turkey with Eire chapter 39!

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  • Happy Turkey Day to everyone!

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    6 years 5 months ago #218 by Rose Bunny
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  • All good things...

    Chapter 40 is up.

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    6 years 5 months ago - 6 years 5 months ago #219 by Malady
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  • So many good things!

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  • Rose: in case you miss my PM to you you have a problem here:
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  • Chapter 40, at least one bad typo remains Here:
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    and here:
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    Here too:
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    It's hard to see your story end...
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