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Question Dorms of our Lives!!!
- Kettlekorn
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Regarding Jamie, the impression I got was that she's mentally ill, not an evil scumbag. Therefor she needs help, not an execution. Unfortunately, it seems that somebody is meddling with the system and thereby denying her the help she needs while simultaneously endangering her and everyone around her. That person is the one who should be riddled with lead, not Jamie.
- Katssun
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Saumer is starting to fit in better than Erica. Operation Snowflake might need some work.
Jimmy needs to watch his mouth a little more if he wants to achieve his goal. De-escalation is kind of important. I wonder if we'll see him apologize to Humorless. Maybe Taka and Donut can help Jimmy break the ice and apologize to him, since those two are in the same class.
Donut is getting to be almost as popular as Taka and Adam with the girls, especially Whitman. Is he the lovable and humble (instead of dense) version of Scott Emerson for Gen 2?
Tia's demeanor change is worrying. Is it a false front because of Jamie, or has she still not gotten her medication refilled and it is starting to show?
Is Vic going to come clean to the rest of the Mutant Mayhem Machine? Or at least Tanya?
- CrazyMinh
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- DanZilla
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CrazyMinh wrote: Someone forgot a read more break...
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- Rose Bunny
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- Anne
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What would be worse for Tia is if her body is beginning to adapt to her meds so they aren't effective any more.Rose Bunny wrote: in regards to Tia, I'm starting to wonder if Jamie isn't either somehow replacing her meds with placebos, or somehow slipping her a counter-agent.
I agree that Jamie is mentally ill, but as such she needs inpatient treatment not 'parole' especially since she seems to be the sort that won't take her meds. If she isn't stopped she is going to kill someone, and the fact that she doesn't intend to kill someone is moot. Also there is her fixation with Tia, very unhealthy!!

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Nowhereville discussion
- Katssun
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Dorms 4 is set September 30th, so they really haven't been at school this long. However, Tia can't get refills from Doyle, she needs to get them from Ibby's pharmacist.Anne wrote:
What would be worse for Tia is if her body is beginning to adapt to her meds so they aren't effective any more.Rose Bunny wrote: in regards to Tia, I'm starting to wonder if Jamie isn't either somehow replacing her meds with placebos, or somehow slipping her a counter-agent.
I agree that Jamie is mentally ill, but as such she needs inpatient treatment not 'parole' especially since she seems to be the sort that won't take her meds. If she isn't stopped she is going to kill someone, and the fact that she doesn't intend to kill someone is moot. Also there is her fixation with Tia, very unhealthy!!
I think the bigger development is that each of our protagonists are being isolated in various ways:
- Calliope has been lured to the Amazons because of the ODS attack, but Brita will react extremely poorly when she learns what the ODS learned from Fra.
- Erica is doing a great job at isolating herself and likely to make Operation Snowflake backfire, out of fear of failing at Operation Snowflake. Kirsten is also turning all the European students against her.
- Laura will probably be branded as a suck-up/teacher's pet.
- Bianca has been isolated as being outed as the White Lady, but also burned by the Seeds (possibly not permanent?)
- Morgana wants to lay low for good reasons, and is trying to do so. But she has also been kicked out of regular magic classes because her current lack of control is a danger and the Amazons hate her considerably, and are making their displeasure known (but not the reason why).
- Vic is disliked by the GSD students due to a misunderstanding, and also by the would-be heroes because of his past (even if his step-sister is willing to forgive him).
- Tanya looks crazy to everyone because she's supporting and hanging out with Sterling, is associated with Ratel who everyone knows is crazy, and now because she's still friendly with Vic, she may compromise getting into the Capes (which is okay because they are jerks).
- Jimmy is potentially disliked by the thugs and bullies because he is associated with the police, can be a bit of a busybody, and is definitely a nerd...but not on the tech track.
- Taka is getting isolated from the boys on the whole because the bigots think he's gay and he's attracting all the pretties.
- Hikaru because she's a pop star

- Bailey...?
- And last but not least, Tia is losing the war of public opinion against Jamie.
Jamie is backed by Evolution Rocks! (or possibly also Vanguard). Tia is being watched as a potential political asset by the MCO or maybe a group much much worse. But everyone knows about the two of them, especially in the mutant community, and it even made the international news. Jamie is running around campus telling everyone who Tia is associated with to stay away from her because she is a "slut-bunny" and that Tia deserved what happened to her. Jamie is a pro at this type of fighting, because she was one of the popular girls. Tia is new to this, and bungling it.
Tia's medication aside, she's inadvertedly backing up Jamie's claim, at least looking from the outside in:
- Tia is actually funded by Playboy, which no one should know about, except Ibby put it on her car.
- Tia has a bright pink supercar, so it looks like she has a sugar-daddy (but it is Ibby!).
- Tia's casual and exercise clothing is tight with bright colors, because Ibby supplied it, and Hikaru thinks it is funny, so she's not helping.
- Most people know the story from a purposefully edited interview that made Tia look guilty or at least hiding something.
- Tia's recent erratic behavior, fueled by issues with her medication or trying to put up a strong face in light of Jamie's presence (there was a restraining order!) and harassment makes her look like a bubbly ditz and really isn't helping her case.
On Tia's side:
- She insists it was all a misunderstanding...not a strong defense in the gossip circle.
- One interview where she was treated fairly that happened later after the breaking news exclusive.
Doesn't look so great for Tia's reputation.
- Astrodragon
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Morgana is still doing fine in regular magic classes, the problem is she cant do them in her dragonform.
The special extra classes are for a number of students who's powers cause issues, to help them sort them out.
I love watching their innocent little faces smiling happily as they trip gaily down the garden path, before finding the pit with the rusty spikes.
- Malady
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Totally somehow blanked that there's been four seasons. Like, I see the word "Season", but I didn't really think about it until now. *facepalm* *drag hand*
EDIT: Alright! Got all the JH kids, and Essemmelle isn't one. OK!
She just hangs out with them!
And presumably, JH kids don't room with older kids, as a rule.
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Natalie McMaster of Season 3 is Physique, and is supposed to be Natalie MacAuliffe?
- Wasamon
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Malady wrote:
Natalie McMaster of Season 3 is Physique, and is supposed to be Natalie MacAuliffe?
D'oh.
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- Valentine
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"There is this weird vigilante gang of large men that capture criminals and tie them up in pink ribbons with big bows. They've been active for years."
Don't Drick and Drive.
- jmhyp
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But that's not why I wanted to post. I've been trying to figure why I'm not enjoying this story. There's no particular element that is wrong. The writing is excellent. And then it dawned on me. The structure of this story mirrors that of a Soap Opera. You have 3-5 minutes scenes intercut from 12-15 flowing plot lines. And those scenes are spoon fed to the audience over the course of several episodes. It's not the story that's bothering me. It's the presentation. I don't like the pacing of soap operas. And this story has similar pacing. This isn't even an anthology style as anthologies just collect discrete works in collection. This is let's take a set of stories and re-edit them so they are interwoven.
I understand you have moved away from each character having POV stories. But I think I preferred that method to this striped style.
- Sir Lee
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jmhyp wrote: I haven't finished this but am wondering why they wouldn't be using someplace like Arena 99 for free-form combat. There are safe protocols there. There are procedures that security and Doyle practice there. Out here on hill in the grass you are further away from security and Doyle. It seems ill conceived.
But that's not why I wanted to post. I've been trying to figure why I'm not enjoying this story. There's no particular element that is wrong. The writing is excellent. And then it dawned on me. The structure of this story mirrors that of a Soap Opera. You have 3-5 minutes scenes intercut from 12-15 flowing plot lines. And those scenes are spoon fed to the audience over the course of several episodes. It's not the story that's bothering me. It's the presentation. I don't like the pacing of soap operas. And this story has similar pacing. This isn't even an anthology style as anthologies just collect discrete works in collection. This is let's take a set of stories and re-edit them so they are interwoven.
I understand you have moved away from each character having POV stories. But I think I preferred that method to this striped style.
I think that the title was a clue.
- XaltatunOfAcheron
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jmhyp wrote:
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But that's not why I wanted to post. I've been trying to figure why I'm not enjoying this story. There's no particular element that is wrong. The writing is excellent. And then it dawned on me. The structure of this story mirrors that of a Soap Opera. You have 3-5 minutes scenes intercut from 12-15 flowing plot lines. And those scenes are spoon fed to the audience over the course of several episodes. It's not the story that's bothering me. It's the presentation. I don't like the pacing of soap operas. And this story has similar pacing. This isn't even an anthology style as anthologies just collect discrete works in collection. This is let's take a set of stories and re-edit them so they are interwoven.
I understand you have moved away from each character having POV stories. But I think I preferred that method to this striped style.
I have to agree. When there are too many character arcs and plot threads going on, I tend to lose interest. It simply takes more mental resources than I want to commit.
Well, you can't please everyone, and, from the author's viewpoint, that format has a number of advantages when the story lines intersect and interact as they do at Whateley.
- Mister D
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XaltatunOfAcheron wrote:
jmhyp wrote:
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But that's not why I wanted to post. I've been trying to figure why I'm not enjoying this story. There's no particular element that is wrong. The writing is excellent. And then it dawned on me. The structure of this story mirrors that of a Soap Opera. You have 3-5 minutes scenes intercut from 12-15 flowing plot lines. And those scenes are spoon fed to the audience over the course of several episodes. It's not the story that's bothering me. It's the presentation. I don't like the pacing of soap operas. And this story has similar pacing. This isn't even an anthology style as anthologies just collect discrete works in collection. This is let's take a set of stories and re-edit them so they are interwoven.
I understand you have moved away from each character having POV stories. But I think I preferred that method to this striped style.
I have to agree. When there are too many character arcs and plot threads going on, I tend to lose interest. It simply takes more mental resources than I want to commit.
Well, you can't please everyone, and, from the author's viewpoint, that format has a number of advantages when the story lines intersect and interact as they do at Whateley.
This is both one of the advantages, and one of the dis-advantages of working within a multi-author, multi-character setting.
When i first found the Whateley stories, there was only the Original Timeline stories. The 2nd Gen stories hadn't been written yet.
i had considerable problems reading some of the Team Kimba stories, as while each story stood up, in and of itself, they continually referred to events that had happened in one of the other stories, that i hadn't read yet.
I persevered with reading them, nonetheless, as the story-telling was great, and the world-building was very chewy.
It was only after one forum member created a time-line that showed where each character's story started and finished, in relation to the chronology of the school-year, as well as in relation to the other character's stories, that the overall narrative started to make sense.
This made re-reading them much more interesting as i could find nuances that i had missed.
I did save a copy of the time-line post in the forums for my own interest.
Then the 2nd crash happened, and Kristin had to re-build the site from scratch.
I did end up sending her a copy of the page with the time-line as i thought that it would be useful for other people.
It seems for the 2nd Gen stories, that the authors are trying to avoid some of the issues that arose from the style of writing that came from the Original Canon.
Yes, it means that it's more "soap-opera" style of story-telling, but that's just for this story arc.
The Gen 2 authors will probably be experimenting with other styles of storytelling, which will please some fans and annoy others.
Remember that Whateley is a Work-In-Progress. It's a living, breathing, ever-evolving tapestry.
If the current flow of narrative doesn't suit your palate right now, then be patient, as the authors will continue to experiment with other writing styles & techniques, so there'll be tales more to your taste in future.
Measure Twice
- DanZilla
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this caused him to shoehorn and shove a lot of people and plots into what was going to be a project that was much smaller in scope.
I think he did an excellent job of pulling off what he did and for that he has my thanks... there are still a few pieces of the story to go but it'll allow the rest of us to work on some future pieces that were waiting for some plot development to happen.
For those of you confused or overwhelmed... please understand that this wasn't any one persons fault and will not be the method for all future stories.
- null0trooper
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It's one of those things that's hard to notice until one starts scrolling, and scrolling, through the "Read Stories" listing.
Forum-posted ideas are freely adoptable.
WhatIF Stories: Buy the Book
Discussion Thread
- DanZilla
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null0trooper wrote: One technical comment: "Dorms of Our Lives, Season 4 (Part 3)" (as well as "All Hallows Ball Part Two" ) could use a <hr id="system-readmore" /> tag.
It's one of those things that's hard to notice until one starts scrolling, and scrolling, through the "Read Stories" listing.
Fixed them...
- Kristin Darken
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Fate guard you and grant you a Light to brighten your Way.
- null0trooper
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Kristin Darken wrote: Part of the problem there, I think, is that not everyone who posts stories or makes edits has the same authorization to implement code/script... it may be that the ReadMore tags are being placed... but are getting squashed out again when an author makes a tweak for typo or other cleanup fixes.
Depending on the editor mode, I can picture the tag being lost in editting: it just takes a couple of backspace deletes. For my WhatIF stories, the readmore hard return works reliably.
Kristin Darken wrote: It's one of those things that is in place to keep the site safe (the fewer people who can include anything resembling code into articles/stories, the fewer the means by which the site can be hacked. It's too bad I can't set the ReadMore tags to work automatically (it 'should' be possible, but it requires us to be using the site access controls differently than we are), but for now that's off the table. Maybe someday, when we do the big upgrade.
The need for javascript to not be stripped out in certain cases and not in others, flanked by the risks posed by One Upset Coworker, not only isn't a hill I want to die on but a valley I don't want to walk through.
Forum-posted ideas are freely adoptable.
WhatIF Stories: Buy the Book
Discussion Thread
- jmhyp
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Mister D wrote: i had considerable problems reading some of the Team Kimba stories, as while each story stood up, in and of itself, they continually referred to events that had happened in one of the other stories, that i hadn't read yet.
I actually found the overlap and "spoilers" a feature of the original releases. I rather have each episode be a signular readable unit, aka a story, and suffer with a little spoilage than have a soap opera. YMMV.
- Mister D
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jmhyp wrote:
Mister D wrote: i had considerable problems reading some of the Team Kimba stories, as while each story stood up, in and of itself, they continually referred to events that had happened in one of the other stories, that i hadn't read yet.
I actually found the overlap and "spoilers" a feature of the original releases. I rather have each episode be a singular readable unit, aka a story, and suffer with a little spoilage than have a soap opera. YMMV.
Like a number of sci-fi/fantasy/speculative-fiction stories, you'll find something mentioned in passing in one chapter, that is later explained as part of the background knowledge that most in-story-characters have as being part of that narrative universe.
The canon example that i first noticed was the "PPP" materials that are mentioned in Dune, as being an example of Nouveau-Riche spending habits.
This is a writing technique that i have come across in many tales, so i was not surprised to find it here.
I did think that it was going to be a little overdone in terms of it's use, but that was before i really understood the nature of the multi-author, shared-narrative, writing process.
I'm not saying that it's a good thing, or a bad thing. It's just a technique, same as the choppier, character-switching that's used in Dorms.
If you've read any of the Vampire: The Masquerade novels, there was one series that White Wolf published, called the Clan Novels Saga.
VtM is an RPG that's based around different factions of vampires controlling human society. Each of the different "bloodlines" has a specific viewpoint that is unique to that Clan.
The Clan Novels Saga, was a series of novels that was based around the same time-line of events, but each told from the viewpoint of a character who was from a different Clan. This gave the authors the opportunity to really flesh out what the personal experience of being a member of each Clan is like.
Initially published as 13 stand-alone novels, but they were later released as a 4 volume set, that split the events in the novels into directly chronological order.
This gave two very different flavours to reading the stories, as one form gave you the direct narrative viewpoints focussed on the characters, and the other form placed more emphasis on the time-line of events.
You can see the same here.
Yes, as Danzilla said, this was due to the real-world events affecting the authors, but it's also an opportunity for them to explore a different flavour of approach.
It's not better or worse, it's just a different style of story-telling.
As one jazz-head said to me after one jam session, "That was fun. We'll do it differently at the next jam, and the one after, and the one after that..."

Measure Twice
- Yolandria
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Mistress of the shelter for lost and redeemable Woobies!
- Dreamer
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Below is a stream of conscious commentary I type up as I read the story. There will be details from the story included in it. If you have not read the story yet and don't wish to have details of it spoiled, read no further.
Dorms of Our Lives, Season 4, part 5 comments
Jack only staying long enough to cement his alibi, ugh, really want to see him taken down for good. Private lounge space, as if he isn't sneaky enough as it is.
Always knew the tunnel system was weird, but good grief. That bastard used his creation on Neff! All to gather information on what he didn't know on those who saved Cally. And getting her to lie to security, when he goes down it is going to be hard.Just walk five steps down from the tunnel marker I-09, turn to the righthand wall, and knock.
And now a dance where she strips for him, this scum deserves whatever karmic justice comes for him. And the Amazons have come for him, for once I'm glad they are there. And using an escape hatch while telling Neff to not let anyone move her from that spot, sickening.
Boring first sophomore match, so Erica goes looking for Cally, hope she finds her soon. Finally spots her and rushes in to hug, while Cally lies that everything is okay. Good grief, tell your friends already! At least Val seems to being nice, though with her projective empathy it is hard to tell when she is manipulating someone unless it is called out or they are acting completely out of character. Erica getting Cally back to their dorm room, how long will it be before Cally feels she is safe alone again?
Back to Ratel, 20 minutes after her fight with Claude and already looking for a new target, oh brother. Ms. Barnes only able to tell her Wilder already ran after her announcement, smart boy. And she doesn't want to find him for a fight, at least that isn't the main reason, keeping running, Wilder! Ratel wants him as a boyfriend and for fighting with, *groan* Ouch, emotionally fragile, what happened to Wilder in the past? And now Ratel is planning how to go about having a relationship with Wilder, that poor boy is going to jump when he hears her voice if she isn't careful.
Vic being pulled along by Tanya into the security office to make his report on the attack. At least Gwen has already been here and Cally, so Officer Pruitt knows why Vic has come. Smart move by Ping to video Vic while he was still under the influence of Jack's device. And Vic actually admits to the incident with Megaton, smart to tell first.
Sera waiting for them, bored, but Sterling is gone and forgotten by everyone but Tanya again, dang it.
Just what kind of dreams is Sera having?"Thanks," said the lavender girl. "Pleasant dreams."
"That would be nice for a change." The Nordic girl unfolded herself, stretching arms and legs that had begun growth spurts at different times and were still playing catch-up with one another. "See you around."
I hope the unfamiliar face which just passed Val's isn't Sterling, being manipulated by that bitch is the last thing Sterling needs. And called in to help out poor Neff after what Jack did to her, take her to the staff and tell them who did this to her already! And they can't even get her clothes back in order because of what Jack told Neff, arrggh! Sending LightSaber to get Ping, even if Brita would be upset by bringing in a changeling. Rats, having to make sure they can deal with Jack without the Order of the Worn Wrench coming after them.
Jack calling a meeting of the ODS, Gouyasse thinks they can survive if news of the attack gets out, arrogant fool. The new headmaster would hand them all over the MCO as criminals for attempted gang rape if he had proof they were involved. Only five of you involved in the attack, I'm sure there are any number of charges which the rest of the group can be charged with for having knowledge the attack would happen or helping to provide false alibis.
Darn, Contact High's effect metabolizes out of the system in under 10 minutes. And now Jack, High Gear, and Contact High are going to scheme even more, just keep digging that hole deeper. boys. And Jack using the device on Contact High to lie to security as well, idiot just blew it big time with this stunt.
Scarlyt not liking large parties or crowds, with her on that. Knock-Out took down her opponent fast in the Junior rounds, would hate to face her without knowing her powers and abilities. Sticking with the Bohemians only until she decides to leave Whateley, not sure I like the sound of that. Aww, poor Cookie scared of Scarlyt. And following Danny and Cookie at a distance, uh oh.
Wait, she can see Sterling, Scarlyt can retain her memories of Sterling, not sure if this is good or bad. Listening in on the conversation between Danny and Sterling, and now she wants Sterling's power on her side, very not good.
Cally woken from her nap by a phone call for Erica, who has been watching over her this whole time. Cally telling Tanya to go enjoy water-skiing with the rest of their friends, forgot that Tanya didn't know how to swim, heh. Hysterical giggling, poor Cally needs Neff right now, if only Neff was okay.
Calling Claudio to get help with this mess, I hope he can backtrace who has been searching Cally online. Claudio is coming to Whateley, not only to talk with some of the researchers about his work but to have words with Fra, prepare for the chewing out of a lifetime.
Tanya in an orange and white polka-dot bikini, poor Vic must be in heaven and hell at the same time. And Morgana was serious about Tanya pulling her along for water-skiing, fun and funny.
Poor Tanya subjected to those kind of images as a child. Hikaru, some of the Melville girls and Tia came along as well, just how many of them want to water-ski?The redhead burst out laughing. "What, you thought I was into some creepy weird shit or something? Well," she said with a wink. "I might be, but not today. Today, we water-ski! So ramp up those horsepower, Purple Pony!"
*facepalms* Morgana, you always need a signal for when to slow down. Morgana is a thrill junkie, isn't she. And ouch, talk about a wipeout from trying a tricky stunt in such shallow water. At least Morgana isn't hurt, even grinning about it, the big goofball.
And now we must see Morgana on roller-blades."You know, I'm not really sure dragons are cut out for water-skiing," Laura snarked.
The redhead grinned at the blue girl. "Sure we are. Just don't let us get on roller-blades, a dragon on roller-blades is always a disaster!"

Yikes, Vic having to get used to extended periods underwater sounds like nightmare material. Well, we now know Kenshin doesn't know how to water-ski, great reaction time by Vic to go and help out after Kenshin wiped out. And the Melville junior high boys actually think the wipeout was awesome, heh.
Matsu aka Michelle Brown going off and signalling Jamie Howe.
Keep questioning that, Jamie is too dangerouslly unstable. Introducing Jamie to Velvet, not good. And Jamie thinks she has never met a crazier girl than Matsu, great, two mentally unstable individuals working together.In her quest to collect them all for her private scientific research consorti-harem, she had encountered plenty of tsundere and coodere types, and eventually she knew she would win them over. Jamie was her first ever yandere, however, and it got her to questioning whether some types were better off not collected.
Jack going to meet up with a woman he only knows as Patience, new faculty liason to the Masterminds, *gulps*. A patsy set up, Contact High, and don't want security to dig any deeper, ugh. And lying about what they did, about how they were going to try and gang rape her and only because Vic and two of the Capes showed up were they driven off.
A deal with the Syndicate, giving them mind control tech in exchange for getting him off clean and clear, really want to cripple him right now.Patience tutted. "Either she is female or she is not, Mr. Thawne. Please make up your mind. As it is, I'm also referring to the apparent use of contraband mind control devises? Of a sort you were explicitly banned from making last year?"
"Yeah. That." He lifted his extra bag up onto the table. "That's my bargaining chip here. Miniaturized, immediate, reliable within reason. I worked it down most of the way to reproducibility. A Syndicate researcher could probably get a generic model working in six months."
She eyed the contents of the bag. "This is everything?"
"All prototypes, last remaining working model, hard copy notes, data on flash USB drives," he confirmed. "I've already purged my systems of all mention of it, and any online caches I may or may not possess will remain inaccessible till I graduate. I'm officially out of the mind control biz. If we have a deal."
And Patience agrees to the bargain and will cover for this infraction, no! He can't get off scott free after what he's done.
Ooo, sounds like if he or any of his buddies go after Cally again she might just make them disappear."But," she added tersely. "If you ever go after one of my girls in Dickinson again, for any reason, you will find that despite my code name, patience is not something I possess in great abundance." Her hand was on his wrist, gripping in tight. "Should I make myself clearer?"
Erica enjoying others embarassing themselves at the lakeside post-picnic, only staying in wading depth, aww.
Yikes, no wonder she is only wading. Erica staring at Chessa Barnes exotic scale pattern like that, hehe. The way Erica describes it she is molecularly dense for her size and thus heavy, that sucks.Her body stubbornly refused to be more than minimally buoyant, sinking back as fast she pushed up.
Hehehe, I like the kind of characters they are discussing, fun and weird.Oh, I already had my turn," said the dragon girl. "Just enjoying the water now. The blood lineage on my old character sheet was brass dragon, yanno?"
Erica nodded. "And brass dragons are amphibious."
Ping called in to help out Neff.
Very interesting. And ouch, going to be harder to help Neff than it was Vic, really hate Jack. Having to dial it up to 11 to break what Jack did to Neff, yikes.Through an anomalous lump on the back of her head, she mentally directed the computer to display what she desired.
Yes, make sure the authorities know you are justified in whomping the bastard first. And please let Ping find something actionable from the systems so his deal won't be enough."I'm sure you can." Les was equally sure that the junior had other things in mind. "But as I am the resident expert on what's happened to this girl -- pretty much by default -- you all are gonna need my sworn statement on this if you want to justify whomping that bastard later."
Noah tagged along to the swim party, with Glee encouraging him since they are Cally's friends. Eesh, Glee needs to learn not to push Noah about being a girl so much. Easier if he picked a name and stuck with it, can't understand the struggle he is going through, hard to take a change in your very identity to that level. Too bad he couldn't see Cally right now, at least he wishes to help when she is ready.
Reading Cookie's thoughts is always so fun, love that he calls Vic Water-smell boy, he definitely doesn't think like a human does and it shows.
Vic ending the day better than he started it, knowing Cally will tell the whole story to the others when she is ready. A kiss on the cheek from Tanya for walking her back to her dorm, how adorable. Lenape talking to what appears to be twin girls who talk at the same time in stereo, wonder if it is a duplicator or some form of twin telepathy. Maria-Isabela and Isabela-Maria, sounds like twins.
Very...interesting ladies to say the least."Oh, Darius, it's easy!" said the lady on the left.
"I'm whichever I wish to be," said the one on the right.
"Or whichever confounds others more," added the left.
"If I'm in the mood," chuckled the right.
Vic was scratching his head. "Um..."
"I'm disomatous," the two ladies said together, as if a word like that could be within a light-year of his usual vocabulary. "For the moment, at least. I can be more if I wish, but it gets confusing even for me."
Back with Erica and finding Cally asleep, glad there is a faint smile on Cally's face. Gathered various girls, the RAs Panoptikon and Paint Oracle, Natalie 'Nana' Bosch, Hannah, and Essemmelle, all upset at what Erica is able to tell them she has learned happened to Cally.
Milena aka Sister Secret has something going on that evening, I wonder what."When I find out who did it," the midget growled, "they're gonna wish I'd used a plain old ugly word on them. Milena got me a thesaurus, and I know how to feckin' use it!"
And that strange mystery card still has 30 minutes to go with its countdown. Wonder what game she is playing on her 3DS, the description doesn't sound familiar, unless it is something Metroid related. A map to somewhere in the tunnels, interesting way to make an invitation. And she goes prepared for trouble just in case, smart. A secret door to a hidden room, and Esquire, Andrzei, Milena, and Twitch, oh no, don't tell me the Bad Seeds are inviting Erica to join because of her grandfather.
Hammer is being an ass of course, and Erica detailing what her great-grandfather, Baron Dämmerung, did. There is a reason some would reject Erica for her ancestor still. And Erica rejects the offer to join, good for her. Esquire, if it weren't for what he did to Bianca, despite his ego I could like him for helping out Erica and Cally that one time. Andrzei is codenamed Inkblood, now what kind of power could he have with a codename like that?
Twitch is just too adorable, I pity anyone who tries to mess with her, I'm sure even Hammer would beat up anyone who messed with a little girl like Twitch. Good to see Milena explaining what happened with Bianca thanks to Esquire to Erica.
Just don't jinx it and say no day can be crazier than this one was."Got it." She sighed. "Is high school always like this? Pointless drama, mostly caused by our own issues?"
Milena grimaced and shrugged. "That's, like, life. Just gotta keep going and hope the next day's better than the one you just had."
"It'd better be," said Erica. "Cuz today was crazy enough all on its own."
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And Patience agrees to the bargain and will cover for this infraction, no! He can't get off scott free after what he's done.
Ooo, sounds like if he or any of his buddies go after Cally again she might just make them disappear.
Don't despair yet, Dreamer, I'm spotting a nice bit of rules-lawyering allowing to crush him, let the new administration flex its muscles and show the ship is still run thight without Carson (and allow to keep exclusivity on his tech):
Little fucktard just had to double down on Nefertiti. Now, clearly the deal was concerning the incident with Calliope, that much is obvious. But would you look at that, Miss Copeland, from Dickinson, is also showing signs from his typical brand of brainwashing, as someone knowing him can testify for (bonus points for not being an Attack Bitch), in a way and place seemingly not connected to the incident. I mean, the position she was found in, clearly the perpetrator was going for enjoying himself in a really sick way rather than silencing her for Security... Sounds like a breach of agreement here, unless of course he explains he got carried after explaining he only brainwashed her to silence her. Whoops... And he forgot to include that episode with Nefertiti in his plea, only speaking about the one with Calliope... Whoops again.
Edit: She even explicitly told that she would only cover the incident with Calliope. For the rest, he'son his own. More Schadenfreude in your cup?
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It's like that first third of a novel that kinda-sorta felt like a slog...looking at you The Traitor Baru Cormorant

At this point, I'm really wondering how the relationship between MMM and the Amazons is going to work now. The Poesie portion hates loathes them, and Brita is leading the Amazons down the opposite side, even if they're not unified in that stance. Erica seems pretty neutral for the most part, and Callie will be sympathetic. The Poesies have largely kept what happened to Morgana to themselves. Is part of that related to keeping the Poe secret?
Neff...who can tell. Between all her interactions with Callie and pals, she definitely doesn't seem like the type who would embrace the "justice" that the Amazon's promise, and Callie doesn't seem to want to go that far. I think between her older brother and Erica, Callie will let the system take care of it from Security's side of things. Or will she? Callie is pretty hotheaded, and once she finds out what the ODS did to Neff, she may lose it. Depends on the timing I guess. What happened to Neff was so much worse of a violation than what they did to Callie, so maybe even Neff will side with the Amazon way of life. Too soon to say!
I think my next question would be the Bohemians. Who will end up in their attention? Will it be Scarlyt dragging in Tanya and Vic because of Sterling? Erica because of her friendship with Donut, and Donut's friendliness with Whitman girls, who in turn might be targets for Glam's blackmail? Morgana, Callie? Hikaru met them at the Melville mixer, and that interaction seemed polite, if cold. It's hard to get a read on them so far, other than they seem to fall somewhere between the old Alphas (less sadistic than Freya, more competent than The Don) and the Golden Kids. Brita hates them, but that could be good or bad.
I also like the theme of forgiveness that's come up. The majority of the Bad Seeds want to have Bianca forgive them, and even asked Erica to act as a go-between. Bianca and Morgana definitely don't want to forgive them for what Esquire did, and what Hammer is up to. Even if Raccoon and Twitch are on the good side of things. I think it is premature to gauge Sister Secret, to be honest. On the flip side is Vic and Gwen. The two are willing to reconcile, while Gwen's boyfriend wants to nail Vic to the wall for pretty much anything. Will Tanya get caught in the middle of that and compromise her relationship with the Capes? Will Megaton's behavior cause Tanya to have a crisis in faith about the Capes?
Can't wait to find out!
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Val was hurrying one way when an unfamiliar face passed the other. The girl's expression was such a masterpiece of annoyance and resentment, with a roiling mess of emotions underlying it all, that the Amazon was forced to take note. There was someone to look into at a later date, she decided. Unfortunately, she was too busy at the moment. A distress call from Kammie had confirmed her worst fears of a sister in need.
Scarlyt? Doesn't seem like it, since the Amazons and Bohemians hate each other and neither are freshmen. Is this referring to Sera from the previous segment, right after leaving Tanya and Vic?
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Katssun wrote: I really like the way that this has started to shape up. The interplay between factions and the various members of MMM is getting beautifully nuanced and complex. The social politics of 2016 are getting really, really messy. It didn't seem like a lot was going on in this arc because the time-frame has been relatively short, but now that various plans have settled, blown up, or succeeded, it's really started to click. The degree of insight that has been provided to the readers about the environment our protagonists are in is now...pretty comprehensive.
It's like that first third of a novel that kinda-sorta felt like a slog...looking at you The Traitor Baru Cormorant...but then you realized was totally necessary because of the breakneck pace of the entire rest of the novel. The events would have left the reader lost unless they had the background to understand the significance. But once you have the understanding, the wake of every action has that much more effect on the surroundings.
I can't tell you how happy I am to read this

Check this out sometime!

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On second thought, this might even refer to Jamie!Katssun wrote: Who is Val referring to here?
Val was hurrying one way when an unfamiliar face passed the other. The girl's expression was such a masterpiece of annoyance and resentment, with a roiling mess of emotions underlying it all, that the Amazon was forced to take note. There was someone to look into at a later date, she decided. Unfortunately, she was too busy at the moment. A distress call from Kammie had confirmed her worst fears of a sister in need.
Scarlyt? Doesn't seem like it, since the Amazons and Bohemians hate each other and neither are freshmen. Is this referring to Sera from the previous segment, right after leaving Tanya and Vic?
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Katssun wrote: Who is Val referring to here?
Val was hurrying one way when an unfamiliar face passed the other. The girl's expression was such a masterpiece of annoyance and resentment, with a roiling mess of emotions underlying it all, that the Amazon was forced to take note. There was someone to look into at a later date, she decided. Unfortunately, she was too busy at the moment. A distress call from Kammie had confirmed her worst fears of a sister in need.
Scarlyt? Doesn't seem like it, since the Amazons and Bohemians hate each other and neither are freshmen. Is this referring to Sera from the previous segment, right after leaving Tanya and Vic?
Uhm, they were in the middle of rescuing Copacetic when she thought that, so I am guessing it was her. Considering the situation Nef was in at the time, she definitely qualified.
Out, damnéd Spot! Bad Doggy!
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*nods* Vindication is sweet!Wasamon wrote: I can't tell you how happy I am to read this

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OK, Pat did say 'mostly' full. And it is plausible that both are busy, or at least, that Nikki would find herself something to be busy at once she was sure that Hikaru was there (still waiting for that shoe - or maybe that bomb - to drop, so far as we know... I imagine Amaterasu will have some choice words for the Queen of the West, at least until she hears that Aunghadhail is gone). Still...
(N.B.: I am assuming that Fey is on campus at least part of the time, as it was mentioned in "Sunshine and Fury" that either she or Dr Chulkris should have overseen Hikaru's power testing instead of Ms. Ellison.)
Overall, however, the story was well done, and appropriately timed as well, with the New Year bringing something of a new era for the changelings at Whateley.
Out, damnéd Spot! Bad Doggy!
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Below is a stream of conscious commentary I type up as I read the story. There will be details from the story included in it. If you have not read the story yet and don't wish to have details of it spoiled, read no further.
Dorms of Our Lives, Season 4, part 6 comments
Ms. Plimsoll is very good at her job. Mrs. Sinclair doesn't even know this about Cally, huh. *facepalms* Praying that someone does not decide to do anything stupid, that is just tempting fate."In all honesty, no, except that certain people will make it as bad as they think it should be." The woman sighed. "Out with it, then: Ms. Persico was born male and apparently transitioned to female as part of her mutation. I have checked her records and no mention is made of it, but her brother was involved in the initial filing, so I don't doubt he buried it."
Finally, October 2nd and Erica takes a deep breath, with how chilly it gets in New England that just to sting. Physique and Erica talking about periods, heh. Poor Erica going through that, eep. Yeah, let Cally rest, after that incident she is going to need all the rest and help she can get. Cookie out for a run with Miss Avsel, her spirit inside her needs help socializing, hope she can learn to be better with people over time.
Peanut butter cookies, *drools* And even gives Physique one as well, Daniel is so nice.
I was wondering why his manifested goods made people feel good, very interesting. Aww, Cookie is still adorable as ever. Avsel's furtive expression, I wonder if it means her spirit really doesn't like hanging with people that much or if she likes Daniel and is too shy to do anything."Nope. Everything I make is in-dee-sting-wishabel from the real thing," Daniel said proudly. "All the researchers say so, or at least their tests do. They just haven't figgered out why the goods make people feel good, too. Got a Healin' ratin' stuck on my MID with a little star that means 'heck if we know'."
Fra wondering if he got any sleep or stayed up counting all the ways he screwed up in the past several weeks.
Fra actually convinced to go to church with his roommate, guess he is feeling very guilty.Garrett "Duster" Burke made a habit of getting out of the dorm room as early as possible every morning, while Fra preferred to take his time.
With Cookie you have to wonder, is he begging for help getting out of the bath or is he concerned for Fra because he can sense how upset he is? That many students there and one girl appears to be a panda, always love the interesting GSD at Whateley. Avoiding Tia because he doesn't know what Cally said to her about him, Fra has a long way to go to begin atoning."Nah, I"m good," Daniel said. "Had enough church to last me a lifetime. Just gonna live like a good person and hope for the best. Oh, thank you, Miss Avsel," he said to the girl in the headscarf who'd zoomed in with a fresh towel. "Gotta get pup cleaned up."
One doggy head turned soulful eyes towards Fra, whining pitifully.
Father Ignacio Verraco, nice to see a new face at the church, explains why more students aren't avoiding it. Ooo, I like his discussion on guardian angels.
Oh boy, Fra is going to be hit hard by this.Second Letter to Timothy, chapter one, verses six through eight.
Wish I could have heard more sermons like this when I went to church on a regular basis."Now, obviously St. Paul did not write this epistle with our modern world in mind. In truth, I doubt he would like much about our life and society at all, even before we bring in the special circumstances of Whateley." He nodded to the panda girl and the other obvious GSD kids in the chapel. "No, he would be mortified, and he would most certainly be wrong, but that does not mean we cannot take inspiration from his words. For you all have certainly received a gift in this life, yet it remains to you to put it to use, and how you shall do so. And just as no Christian should be ashamed of their faith and the way they live it, neither should any of you find shame in the way God has made and remade you. For God has given you power, love, and a sound mind. With those three gifts, anyone can be a guardian angel."
Fra wishes to do confession, he really does hate how he's hurt Cally.
Now that is a confessional you can trust. No wonder Fra hasn't been to confession in so long. Suggesting Fra make an appointment with one of the counselors and see Security if things have gone that far, I like him even more already. Our Father and Hail Mary but with instructions on what to think about while doing them, that is so different from any priest I've ever met. Yikes, skipping breakfast to do the rosary, he needs to see a counselor immediately."Don't worry," said the pastor. "One of the senior devisor students installed the best in anti-eavesdropping technology, and he comes by every week to ensure that no new bugs have been sneaked in."
Shawn Barker avoiding the ODS boys because he finds spending time with them appalling, he has turned around a lot. Going to sit at the Twain zone in the Crystal Hall, hope he can make better and true friends now. Nice callbacks to all those different characters. Crepescule, now there is an interesting codename. Sitting with Franklin and Arsi Khan, dang, you got me wanting to research the history of wrestling in Mongolia now. Shawn is a good man, going over to see if Fra is okay.
Just what Fra needed to hear right now, Shawn has learned much from simply watching and hanging out with Tenshi."Anything I might've learned this weekend stays between us, okay? I swear on a stack of Bibles. But if you need someone to talk stuff over with, I'm your man."
Wilder, quasi-adopted by the Barnes family, aww. Playing video games with Marcus and Time Bomb, now that sounds fun. Ack! Incoming Ratel, Pat's magic 8-ball seems interesting if it actually has power. And based on what he tells Wilder it does work.
Huh, Ratel is strangely insightful and has a good point. And she has Wilder considering dating her, she is good."Fuck no. Who's got time to be scared? Not me. Like it says on the back of my shirt, I don't give a shit. But you do, and that's okay, but not if you're gonna let it hold you back! That's the real reason you hang out with them, isn't it? You know that lady who's currently impersonating a teenager can take you down if she has to. Well, newsflash: So can I."
Almost forgot since he is in Poe and isn't gay or aggressively bi, he must be a changeling, heh.Wilder groaned and collapsed against the tabletop. Who'da thought being a boy was so fuckin' crazy?
Back with Erica, having trouble getting Cally to the showers. I really want to see those ODS boys taught a harsh lesson for this, trauma is a serious thing. Mairead, Mouse, both interesting but how tiny is Mouse she can soak in a plastic bowl at the wash station? At least the other girls are leaving them alone with the dorm drama, I can imagine at least a few wonders if they could suffer such an attack themselves.
Just getting Cally to breakfast, until the boys who attacked her are charged and locked up she is going to be skittish around almost everyone it seems. Morgana happy and hopping, almost giddy, guessing her meeting with her girlfriend went well.
Bwahahaha."Morgana hasn't had her coffee yet, and she's cheerful! Bouncy! Happy! She's done everything but sing a bloody Disney tune on the way over here!"
Why is Hikaru so grumpy, don't tell me giddy Tia is because of something bad? Ouch, Cally just wishing to leave it behind her and not talk about it, I've seen what that does. Uh oh, I'm guessing no one has told Cally what happened to Neff, otherwise she would be less depressed and more plotting revenge. A smartphone as a gift from a Japanese company and Kurenai is jealous, hehehe. Hikaru gives it to Laura and even begs her to take it, man, when Kurenai gets jealous she has a mean streak. An All-Campus Alert, I hope it means some of the ODS is in trouble.
Contact High, following the brainwashing instructions of Jack, shot himself up with his own power, yikes. Even a program that deletes itself after its work is done, probably by Jack to seal the frame job on Contact High.
Jack, you are toast! You were excused for the brainwashing of Vic, what you have done to Neff, Contact High, and now using the emergency alert system to out Cally, not even the Syndicate will be able to dig you out of this one. And now trying to sneak away with a stealth suit on, good grief.
Please let that girl not be Neff, please. Ugh, Jane "Knock-Out" Chorley telling Karel about the email, the Bohemians know. Ah, so it wasn't Neff saw the email and said this makes things weird, good. The Amazons watching over Neff at Doyle, Valentine only thinking about manipulating Neff and then Cally, ugh.
Oh hell no, they are not manipulating Neff into breaking up with Cally."Get Copacetic out of here, let her recover at our base. And come up with a better story to tell her when she's ready to hear. We need to do damage control, schnell, before the fake-girls can get their nails back in her."
Fra pissed about the email, Shawn didn't know anything about this and says it just ain't right. Fra going to talk to Mac about the matter, Jack is going to regret this. Chessa having to drag Pat from the Poe common room, Pat playing Jenga and has a bet with Swerve, oh brother. Tree in a row getting a tower to 40 stories, dang. Bwahaha, I can't believe Chessa just flashed them all to break Pat's concentration.
Now with Cally, going to Dickinson for some peace and quiet in her dorm room. Futaba-Kun Change manga, dang, now I need to find that myself. Oh crud, girls confronting her with images from their smartpad, this is the worst possible situation.
Okay, before I wanted to kill Jack, now I want to make him suffer as long as possible.There was Calliope's picture, current as of the start of the school year. The word FAKE was super-imposed over it like a red ink stamp. Scrolling down, she was treated to a reverse chronology of the past eight months of her life in photographic format, with each image marked and annotated to point out the progression of her BIT's influence. She could wince at the spring pictures, from when she'd been so in denial of the truth that she refused to recognize her own face in the mirror.
Alvina calling her a freak and a boy, despite the changes she has undergone, narrow-minded idiot. Even bigger idiot than I thought, thinks Cally is still a boy despite proof otherwise. Allie, you caused Cally to have a panic attack and lash out with her powers in the process. Ms. Plimsoll shows up with a knockout gas canister, no one is spared, yikes.
Fra is on the warpath and pity any who stand in his way. Macarthur Price waiting for him with that grin, he is asking for it right now.
Fra has more self-restraint than I would, I would have left this creep crippled for life after he says that about my sister.Mac sneered. "No reason, huh." The boy snorted. "There was plenty of reason. She's a liar and a fraud, teasing us the way she did when there was nothing in it for us. So what, everyone knows what she is now? Good. Then everyone will know to avoid her lying little ass."
Darn it! Fra tries to deck him only for Mac's power to drain all the force out of his punch. PK 2, Energizer 3 and he is a kinetic force absorption and redistribution, dang it! Backlash is his codename, really hate him a lot more now, leaving Fra in that state and just walking off.
Ms. Plimsoll having to face the fallout of gassing an entire room full of children under care, having to explain herself to Mrs. Sinclair.
I actually think it is good she was prepared for this eventuality."I received the message on my phone and immediately went in search of Ms. Persico. I found her surrounded by confused young women, one of whom was openly belligerent and provocative. I stepped in when I saw that Ms. Persico's control was slipping, and her power was going wild." She met the other woman's eyes. "I have seen what happens when empathy runs amok, and have no interest in seeing it again. So I did what was needed to contain the situation."
And Contact High framed for sending the email by Jack, ugh. Cally resting in Doyle, Mac on the way, and assistant headmaster already making arrangements, good.Her head shook in disbelief. "Does this boy have any expertise in counter-electronics? I doubt it." She sighed and muttered the word 'patsy' under her breath. "But what of Ms. Persico?"
Cally still out, nervous exhaustion, I've experienced that myself and it hits hard. Erica watching over and Vickie "Power Stunt" Stone there as well, sounds like an interesting devisor. Erica hugging Cally and crying after she finally wakes up, this whole mess has been hard on a lot of people. And finally, Operation Snowflake and Erica being a changeling as well are told to Cally, about time. Cally understands after a moment, now if only they would tell their friends from Poe.
And Claudio figured out Erica back during the summer and never told Cally, so many secrets coming out. Claudio is at least understands why they are upset, hoping one of them would tell the others when they are both teens who went through a profound change is naive at best though. Nice dinner together, including Fra, at least Claudio is going to give Fra the chewing out of a lifetime. And Cally is shocked to find out about Fra being beaten up within an inch of his life, when she finds out why he was beaten up I think she might forgive him.
Only able to stare at the bed Fra is occupying, Cally still feels too betrayed to forgive yet I guess. Bryon, so his power is healing factor acceleration as long as he holds someone's hand, not regular healing which just requires him to hold someone's hand, interesting.
Byron needs lessons in tact with females.She rolled her eyes. "It would be weird for anyone, and not just because of... whatever. Please keep that in mind."
And Cally still doesn't wish to talk to Fra, oh boy. And not told anything about Neff, the Amazons are going to get in trouble if they try to keep them apart.
Exemplar-grade painkillers, sometimes I wish I had those. All those students have unpleasant or unhappy thoughts about her, ugh, with what some of these students have been through you would think they would know better than to be prejudiced towards others who are different."Well then, as far as I am concerned, that's all sorted out," the doctor said. "The research wonks will of course be ordering up more tests, because that's just what they do, but all I care is that the reality matches the information in your file. Anything you'd like to ask?"
Valentine manipulated Neff's emotions to get her to react this way to Cally, she is toast! They brainwashed her, that is one of the evilest things you can do. And brainwashed to hate changelings, calling Cally a tranny no less, ugh. Brainwashed into being an Amazon, Val having her arm around Neff is sickening. Please let Val get caught soon and proven what she has done to so many of these girls.
Back with Milena, Cally comes in weeping and sobbing, I really want to see Val hurt right now. Goes straight comforting the poor girl and even Erica is pulled into the hug.
And even Milena didn't know about Neff being in Doyle, I thought the dorm mothers/fathers are to be alerted if one of their charges is admitted to Doyle for any reason.The RA's eyes met all onlookers with a defiant challenge. No one dared interfere, though a few joined in for a moment of solidarity. The junior high foursome of Physique, Magique, Acolyte, and Tek Witch made it a rather large hug for several heartbeats.
Pay her former friend Kammie a visit in the near future, I hope Kammie can detect what Val has done to Neff or something to get the Amazons in deep trouble for this. Papi and Pat show up to help out Cally.
Huh, was wondering if there was such a group at Whateley, nice to know. Bwahaha, the response from Pat, just formed an hour ago and they are the only members, priceless."And I," said the other student with a faint accent, "am Paponthanai Sutasanachinda. Call me Papi. Everyone does." Their outfit could have been a Japanese-style school uniform, if it weren't also made out of the same sort of fabric as a traditional China dress. The swirls of gold thread on crimson stood out in the Dickinson foyer. "We are here on behalf of the Whateley Transgender Support Alliance."
The administration asked them to represent, so it was the assistant headmaster, great idea, the group has been needed a long time. The past history of Reach, Biohazard, Phase, Jobe, heh, and those are just the publically known ones. The administration wishes to talk to Cally, I hope they get the whole story and the ODS and especially Jack are prosecuted to the full extent of the law, deal or not in Jack's case. Mandatory floor meeting on the subject of Cally, hope they listen and finally understand.
Erica watching over Cally as she changes, Pat leading them to the admin building while avoiding some groups out on the quad. And into the office, waiting when Falcon shows up, trying to get Erica to leave and not realizing she is in on the fact about changelings and knows about Cally.
Ooo, she's good."I don't doubt he meant it as a joke, but enough people around here have apparently changed genders that one can actually make a ballpark estimate. One in a thousand should just about come to one incident every two or three years, for a school of this size... but that only counts the incidents at school that everyone might hear about. I'm willing to bet that the odds are a lot lower than that."
Heh, Erica slipping those 3 pages from her file over to Falcon, this is going to be good.
Okay, I'm either not remembering her origin story clearly or the mention of human chimerism being connected to her physical change wasn't brought up until now.Erica took a deep breath. It was now or never. "I was born Eric Schroeder, though all other details of my life other than name and original gender do match what's in my file. Have you heard of human chimerism? People born from merged clumps of embryonic cells, bearing two different sets of DNA? That was me. You can even see it in my old eyes, with the heterochromia. When I chugged my Opa's serum, it went to work optimizing all my genes, like it was designed to. It's just that one of my sets of DNA was a lot more optimized than the other, and it quickly overwrote the rest of me."
I wouldn't be surprised, just look at Gen 1 with Razorback and Diamondback alone.A moment was spared for an annoyed sigh. "Sometimes I think that if we just ended this whole charade, we'd suddenly find dozens more changelings who simply never realized that their situation was not unique."
"So I'm right in my conclusions?" Erica asked.
"Yes. You're giving us quite a headache now. We already had one emergency meeting this morning over Ms. Persico, and now..." His head cocked to the left, listening to a silent voice by means Erica couldn't even guess at. "Well, in for a penny, in for a pound, apparently. Let's start at the beginning."
Deadpan at the mention of Ratel, I would have facepalmed, her not being in Poe blows the 'crazy house' story out of the water."You're talking about Poe," Erica guessed. "I always thought the 'crazy house' story didn't hold water. We know too many Poesies who are saner than the general population."
"That's a bit of an exaggeration..."
"Ahem, I regularly spar with Ratel. Need I say more?" As expected, the assistant headmaster's face went deadpan at the mention of the honey badger girl.
Finally! Someone realizes the protections and methods used have let children like Erica and Cally slip through the cracks."Fortunately, times have changed, and the outside world has improved in regards to most such things. Unfortunately, changelings are still the most vulnerable of the groups. And... if I am to be honest, the protections and methods we have developed over the years may have done their job too well. Much effort was put into keeping the very existence of changelings a complete secret, so that no one could suspect and attack their fellow students over a perceived problem, but time and again that lack of public knowledge has meant that children such as yourselves fall into the cracks and never realize there's a place to turn to for help."
So only the one girl is pitching a fit about Cally and most of the rest of the girls are on Cally's side, this is very good. Oh, this is going to be good alright, the rest of MMM, except maybe Tanya, being there is going to be a shock for Cally and Erica I bet. Chessa has androgen insensitivity, huh, a real-world condition that too few realize exist.
This has been needed for way too long."I wasn't joking about the Whateley Transgender Support Alliance," Pat explained. The administration wants, or rather needs, a few of us in the open so anyone with hidden problems of that sort are able to find someone to reach out to."
Laura, Bailey, Morgana, and Bianca, group hug from friends who share a secret with.
Darn, no definitive answer one way or another about Tanya, you tease. =-P"Ah, I half-expected Tanya to be here as well."
"Near as we can tell, that one is exactly who she says she is," said one of the few adults in the room, a tall brunette in a serious looking suit. "And trust me, we did a quick but thorough check not so long ago."
"Find anything?" Falcon asked.
"A few oddities that may be leads, or may not." The woman shrugged, then patted the assistant headmaster on the cheek. "No fears, darling. We shall let you know before any more surprises erupt. Hopefully."
Boy, I've lost track of all the changelings at Whateley, almost seems like more than Gen 1.Morgana caught Erica by the hand and dragged her along. "Come on! There's people to meet! This here's Flower, and Peregrino, and..." There was a whirlwind tour around the room, as they were introduced or reintroduced to a significant portion of the Poe freshman floor, multiple RAs, the three sophomores who'd been in on Cally's rescue the day before, several upperclassmen, and even two teachers. The first, Tabby Cat, was actually Falcon's wife, much to their surprise. The other, Eldritch, lived up to her adjective with weird and unsettling tattoos that looked more etched than inked into her skin.
Cally finally gets to thank Celerity, Ping, and Star Sentry for their help, another round of hugs triggered by her emotions spilling out, a girl named Noah holding on the longest. Why do I feel that Cally might hook up with Noah, not knowing that Neff was brainwashed? Wilder, Mgana, and Satchel the boys present, Erica having sympathy for Wilder over Ratel wishing to date him. Tia chatting with Chessa and Decibelle, from the gestures it sounds like Brita they are joking about.
Cally and Erica both happy to finally be home, this Alliance was needed for years.
Now, this brought a tear to my eye, so happy for them.Looking around, finding two dozen or more people who really got it, who understood without having to ask uncomfortable questions, who simply were there for each other now... This was something she never would have imagined -- never in her wildest dreams. She'd asked Cally how she was doing, but Erica was the one feeling more than she could handle.
And when it all came together, when the sheer force of happiness overwhelmed her and knocked her into a comfortable chair with tears in her eyes, there were people who understood, who could hold her hand and be strong for her instead. There was no need to hold back, to hide. Operation Snowflake was put on hold.
Just as Cally had said: they were home.
So many things in this story stand out, all the friends the girls have made, and some they have lost. The ODS and Amazons actions, painting them both as the kind of creeps the Don and the Alphas while under his control were. Especially the ODS blaming their victim for their own actions and what the Amazons did to Neff. I love that Shawn turned around thanks to simply spending time watching Kenshin, how he has shown himself to be a good man. The creation of the Whateley Transgender Support Alliance has been a needed thing for a long time, glad it finally came about. Especially glad the changelings of MMM all know about each other now, always good to have more people to talk to. I'm glad this is just The Beginning, as I can't wait to read more.
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- Rose Bunny
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- Esar
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It was nice to explore so many characters Gen2 characters at the same time and where we were at the end should prove to be a great starting point for a future story.
- Katssun
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I loved the treatment of Ms. Plimsoll. I have a soft-spot for tough love kind of teachers, and not the cheesy "Inner City School" movie kind. The real world ones, who give you detention for not doing your homework. It's not because they're mean, it's because they care, and know that overt sympathy doesn't always work, sometimes the opposite does. When we first met her in the first part of Dorms of our Lives, she's incredibly harsh and honest. Blunt. She comes off as a hasty, last-minute, under-qualified replacement who comes from the Syndicate because Mazarin trust her, not because she's well suited for the job. Then she gets even worse, helping Jerk in the Box buy protection. It felt like she was putting Syndicate over Students.
Looking at it from a distance, part of that is the reader's bias. We like Callie. Neff was/is...was very likable (here's hoping Callie can win her back!). Jack is a scumbag of the highest order, even selling out his associates. So her decision to accept his deal makes her come off as cold, calculating and uncaring. Even with her adverse reaction. She didn't like making that deal with Jack at all. Even remotely. She openly threatened him and it cracked her professional facade. He noticed. But she did accept it, and I forgot how much she hated doing it. How close she came to wanting to kill him for what he'd been doing to girls around campus.
Now, we find out that she actually is a rather good fit for her job, and does worry if she's doing it right. She admitted in her introduction she was bad with children and didn't know how to deal with them so she'd treat them as adults. Turned out that wasn't so much of a warning and stern rebuke of children as it was her admitting a weakness. She was really worried the knock-out gas was going too far, when it was really a rather reasonable de-escalation of a situation that was getting pretty bad, very quickly. She just doesn't know that for Whateley, her action was in many ways, far more gentle than what's been done in the past. Especially to distraught, hormonal, teenage projective empaths.
Overall, I love the way that the Whateley authors as a whole have been fleshing out some of the staff more. They're people too, with issues and worries of their own. It makes the WU feel even more alive.
I do have some criticism of the story arc though: The Barnes family.
They're everywhere. They're a sympathetic ear when someone more appropriate isn't around. They're protective. The eldest has some secret reason to be in Poe while also being the English teacher. They run the changeling gamut. But right now, they're very underdeveloped. They come off as plot devices rather than people in some scenes. Providing a solution or guiding the characters to one. It's not exactly clear what their capabilities and limitations are in providing the degree of support that they have thus far.
That's not to say that other side characters don't have similar issues. The side characters of Laura's stories lean on Gen 1 character development. The Poesies get a whole pool of supporting characters from each others stories. But it is certainly more visible for Dickinson, Whitman, Melville, Emerson and Twain.
For the Barnes family, they're in a lot of scenes for other characters, and while they have had a few throwaway lines of development, they could honestly use their own side story to make them feel more like people, and less like plot expediters.
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- DanZilla
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--Officer Pruitt
Normally when working in security and law enforcement, one was grateful when the culprit was incompetent enough to give it all up willingly. Right now Officer Pruitt was sitting across from a young man who was looking not nearly as nervous as he should, considering there was a handwritten confession on the table with his personal John Hancock on it.
It should've been an open and shut case, a true slam dunk, if Pruitt's every instinct weren't telling him it was all a fraud. Unfortunately, his gut wasn't getting a vote on the matter.
- mhalpern
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- Katssun
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Brita softened just a little bit at Callie's situation, which is progress at least. I still want someone to prove to her that force isn't everything, and might does not equal right. Not sure if it will be Morgana, Erica, Tanya. Or maybe even Callie or Jimmy? There's a number of potentially amusing possibilities in Poe alone.
My suspicion is that Jack will find that the Syndicate protection absolves him of the one crime, and selling others out isn't viewed quite as kindly as he or Security thinks. Mazarin, Ms. Plimsoll, and Imp probably all think alike in how people ought to treat their business associates.
- Mister D
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Katssun wrote: And Security is sympathetic toward anything that Brita and Val might do, so long as it remains unseen.
Brita softened just a little bit at Callie's situation, which is progress at least. I still want someone to prove to her that force isn't everything, and might does not equal right. Not sure if it will be Morgana, Erica, Tanya. Or maybe even Callie or Jimmy? There's a number of potentially amusing possibilities in Poe alone.
My suspicion is that Jack will find that the Syndicate protection absolves him of the one crime, and selling others out isn't viewed quite as kindly as he or Security thinks. Mazarin, Ms. Plimsoll, and Imp probably all think alike in how people ought to treat their business associates.
A teenager choosing the short-term, convenient path, that ends up making the long-term path more difficult...
It's a life-lesson that we'll hope that he survives to regret.
It's also surprising that no-one has thought of pushing him towards studying medicine, psychiatry, or psychology, as his devices could have a lot of therapeutic potential, as well as having an excellent new set of techniques into understanding the theory of the mind.
Baloo should give him a poke.
Like i said, teenage, short-term decisions.
At least any future business partners will know exactly how far to trust him...
That's going to be the longer-term burn.
The last scenes are great.
Odds of 1000 to 1?
Looks like the Braeburn Report is starting to manifest.
And we see the instant support group from the other people who have been through similar changes.
Still waiting for the other shoe to drop though...
Measure Twice
- Wasamon
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Kristin Darken wrote:
*nods* Vindication is sweet!Wasamon wrote: I can't tell you how happy I am to read this
More like relief. I'm confident enough in my writing to accept that I got in a bit over my head with this one. Dorms 5 WILL BE SHORTER... *crosses fingers*
Thanks go to everyone else who's stuck around this long. Your reactions and feedback have been appreciated. Feel free to ask for any points of clarification.
Also, Kattsun, since you asked nicely-ish, I'll see about getting the Barnes family origin stories into the rotation. They're both about 50k words each, so I might be splitting them into halves.
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- Mister D
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Sir Lee wrote: As every Ankh-Morpork citizen knows, odds of 1000 to 1 happen nine times out of ten.
Isn't that odds of 1,000,000 to 1?
Measure Twice
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- null0trooper
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Mister D wrote: A teenager choosing the short-term, convenient path, that ends up making the long-term path more difficult...
He wouldn't be the first person to think the Syndicate places a high value on sociopathy and megalomania because they aren't The Good GuysTM, or worse, thinks he can game them like he always has gamed the kids around him.
The first taste is always free; the first deal is always the sweetest.
Mister D wrote: It's a life-lesson that we'll hope that he survives to regret.
That's one of the societal purposes of an organization like the Syndicate: to bleed the users and abusers dry while they're still productive, and restrain the damage.
I.e., Buddy-fuckers like this are charged top dollar for the lowest-grade services because they cannot be trusted with dependable or low-risk assets.
Mister D wrote: It's also surprising that no-one has thought of pushing him towards studying medicine, psychiatry, or psychology, as his devices could have a lot of therapeutic potential, as well as having an excellent new set of techniques into understanding the theory of the mind.
I suspect that once the shiny has worn off, the Syndicate will license out his devices to the public sector. Without him.
Mister D wrote: Baloo should give him a poke.
The Kodiak has no power over those who don't want to be cured. That's why Raven, Coyote, Anansi, Sun Wukong, and others never run out of business.
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- mhalpern
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On the mind control devices:null0trooper wrote:
Mister D wrote: A teenager choosing the short-term, convenient path, that ends up making the long-term path more difficult...
He wouldn't be the first person to think the Syndicate places a high value on sociopathy and megalomania because they aren't The Good GuysTM, or worse, thinks he can game them like he always has gamed the kids around him.
The first taste is always free; the first deal is always the sweetest.
Mister D wrote: It's a life-lesson that we'll hope that he survives to regret.
That's one of the societal purposes of an organization like the Syndicate: to bleed the users and abusers dry while they're still productive, and restrain the damage.
I.e., Buddy-fuckers like this are charged top dollar for the lowest-grade services because they cannot be trusted with dependable or low-risk assets.
Mister D wrote: It's also surprising that no-one has thought of pushing him towards studying medicine, psychiatry, or psychology, as his devices could have a lot of therapeutic potential, as well as having an excellent new set of techniques into understanding the theory of the mind.
I suspect that once the shiny has worn off, the Syndicate will license out his devices to the public sector. Without him.
Mister D wrote: Baloo should give him a poke.
The Kodiak has no power over those who don't want to be cured. That's why Raven, Coyote, Anansi, Sun Wukong, and others never run out of business.
Maybe, but if they are too good, or have specific quirks, they can be pretty bad for business, its a hypnotic device, not a direct interface meaning it wont be effective on people naturally resistant to hypnotism, and it cant be used as a component for anything other than hypnotism.
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- Malady
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Or did they already think of that?
- null0trooper
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Malady wrote: I wonder if Donut's donuts making people happy, is actually due to Cookie, and the docs can't tell 'cause Cookie is with Donut all the time?
Or did they already think of that?
They probably thought of that, because "PUPPIEZ!!!" is a super-power.
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- jmhyp
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Mister D wrote: It's not better or worse, it's just a different style of story-telling.
Sorry, objectively it may not be better or worse, but subjectively, I find it worse. This is why I ended my post with YMMV. I want to enjoy the story more and this style impedes that. My opinion. YMMV. I hope explaining why I didn't like it was constructive for the authors.
- Wasamon
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