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Question Charge of the Light Vignettes
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- Malady
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This was great, milking the reveal and the timing for all it was worth!
And that reveal was shocking!
- mhalpern
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Below is a stream of conscious commentary I type up as I read the story. There will be details from the story included in it. If you have not read the story yet and don't wish to have details of it spoiled, read no further.
Charge of the Light Vignettes comments
Adalie with her father, promising to take special care of something which belonged to her grandfather, interesting. Whoa, Addy went all out for security on this precious cargo, it would take superhuman abilities to steal it.1. Targets of Opportunity
Aww, how sweet to see him so concerned for his little girls.Adalie rolled her eyes as she sighed. "I know, Papa. She is a delicate little flower, and you don't want any barbaric ... American ...boys to try to pick that flower, right?"
"She is only thirteen," Papa Vitesse said, his voice soft and full of concern. "She is too young for affairs of the heart."
Ah, so Nicole is going to have a baby boy, this kid will have an interesting relationship with his sisters. And the wedding is tomorrow, please tell me bigotted idiots aren't going to attack because of Adalie and Amelie.
Yay, Addy and Alicia back together. A great year, I hope those words from Alicia aren't an omen of things to come, great doesn't always mean nice or good. Aww, poor Amelia having to hear tales of Whateley and now going there, I would be scared at first too. Melville on the freshman floor, please tell me Amelia is just being grumpy because of a long trip and a strange new place.Tuesday, August 28, 2007 - late-Afternoon
Train Depot, Dunwich
Hehe, Addy that well known by those at Whateley because of last year. Not even top 10, well, it was an exciting year.
Very reasonable guy, letting Addy accompany the package. *eyes bug out* Just what is in that container, the size and length suggest some sort of rifle due to the length, just a guess."I'm Fred O'Connell, from shipping and warehouse. How can I help you?"
Kane Hall, requires a secure locker and needing paperwork and arrangements with Mrs. Carson, the suspense of finding out what inside the container is eating at me. Forsythe says it is pretty rare, no hints still of what it is. Now that is a secure vault, guess at a place like Whateley it has to be or any student could simply swipe something. That is a lot of paperwork.
Alicia and Kayda at a table in Crystal Hall, but one of the girls from Melville came for Amelia, the old campus tour, she should find that interesting.
Finally someone states some common sense. All of them excited about what is in the container, you know how to build suspense for a reveal, Elrod."And you can't watch her twenty-four hours every day," Alicia chided her friend and roommate. "She's going to grow up sometime."
Madame Prudhomme, figures stories about their summer adventures are circulating at Whateley, you can't keep stuff like that secret for long. Hehe, wish there was a video of the museum incident, it would be popular at Whateley. Change one course and add another, guessing the one being added is firearms safety.Wednesday, August 29, 2007 - Mid-Morning
Kane Hall, Whateley Academy
From how Prudhomme is reacting I think my guess is right, Addy was such a pacifist last year and even got in trouble for it. Hehe, I think the person on the other end of the phone is Mrs. Carson or Hartford, shocked at the change to Addy's class schedule.
Ooo, Addy under the gaze of both Ms. Claire and Ms. Hartford, I'd be sweating bullets. And 2 minutes till she was called in to talk to Mrs. Carson, being a speedster sucks when having to wait, I can't even imagine what it must be like. And now in Mrs. Carson's office with her and Ms. Hartford, without knowing how upset either of them is that is torture. Mrs. Shugendo shows up and they think her class schedule is a prank, good grief.Administration Suite, Schuster Hall
Now that is needlessly cruel on her part, does she remember what being a teen is like, how words like that can hurt deep.Mrs. Shugendo rolled her eyes. "You expect us to believe that you really want to take these courses? What next? Joining the FSHA? Getting a job as a short-order cook in the cafeteria? Petitioning for American citizenship?"
Sound like grandpapa was a soldier in WWI or WWII if not both. Meeting with someone at security and all 3 are going with Addy to sort this out, this is going to be interesting to watch.Addy was fighting tears, not totally successfully. "Madame, I am very serious! After spending time with my friends this summer, and talking with Papa, and learning about his grandpapa, I really want to take these classes, if nothing else than to 'onor what 'e believed and stood for!"
At the Crystal Hall and Booker gets a text message which makes him not hungry anymore, oh boy. Ugh, better not be betting on Addy, and of course he is, even has a source in Security, wish Carson knew who it was. All those messages coming in, Bomber a regular customer, Booker got the info from Tweak, just great, can keep anything secret from that pest. Ugh, even getting Linda aka Tweak to go film and send the feed to his computer so he will have a pay-per-view he can sell, greedy little bugger. Memo knows it isn't a rumor but is going to let people make bets on if it is, now that is scumball behavior.
Beneath Kane Hall now, security officers carrying several large cases while Addy, Alicia, and Kayda lead, Carson, Hartford, and Shugendo somewhere, hhm. Oo, Bardue there, he is going to impressed with the firearm I think. Eep, having to pass Bardue's safety test and stand up to him, Addy has stronger nerves than me.
Betting going on back at the Crystal Hall, 6.5 to 1 on Headrush aka Alicia passing, just what is this test? 11 to 1 on Addy passing, now that is just mean and watching them like this.
Like the mafia is right, I just wonder how far Carson would let them go before putting her foot down. That smile from the freshman girl, just what does she know?Another upperclassman who was standing nearby, not participating in the frenzied mob of gamblers, chuckled to herself. "Around here, kids'll bet on anything!" she said with a snicker. "Oh, and if you decide to get in on it?" She'd read the newbie's expression. "Those who are regulars have established credit lines. Newbies like you? Pure cash basis until you show the bookies that you're trustworthy. And you don't ever want to stiff one of them. They have lots of friends who take care of welchers."
And they passed, yay!
Now that is a rifle, impressive. A Hi-Power pistol as well, wish her grandpa could have lived and known his grandkids.Bardue's eyes widened. "Is that a MAS-36?" he asked almost reverently.
And a Glock pistol as well, nice firearms for both girls. A 1903A3 for Kayda's rifle, whoa. Love how Gunny just examines their firearms like they are artifacts.The Cajun girl shrugged. "It's just a Remington seven-hundred in three-oh-eight."
Final best back at the Crystal Hall, nearly everyone bet against the girls passing, now that is just mean. Wonder if they learned their lesson or don't think the girls can handle the firearms.
I knew they could do it, but dang that highly impressive. ROTC marksmanship program, I should have known Gunny was up to something! At least all of Addy's class changes are approved. Addy a shooting enthusiast, I definitely wouldn't have seen that coming when she was first introduced."Charge and Headrush aced the safety class. Their muzzle discipline was perfect. Their procedures on the range were nearly flawless. And their marksmanship ...," he held up one target with five small clusters of five shots each, one group per bulls-eye on the paper. Each group was very compact. "Judge for yourself."
I should have known, always trying to get the Grunts to do better. A reloading lab for custom ammo, dang, Addy is the most changed out of the girls and I like it.Gunny chuckled. "Alicia is a damned good shot. She seems to be a natural. For having started just this summer, Adalie is better than average. And Kayda is pretty good, too." A wicked grin crept onto his features. "It's less for them and more for the Grunts. Some of them are piss-poor shots, and I want them to be ... inspired ... to try harder!"
Booker giving a cash payout to a freshman girl who had the same information he did, of course Amelia bet on her sister and friends. Plotting to figure out who she is and encourage her to use other bookies, I think Booker is going to be ruined by the end of the school year thanks to Amelia or I can hope so.
If I couldn't stand either of them I would think Booker and Tweak were a cute couple, just get on my nerves for some reason."Armadillo bet pretty heavily against Charge. He paid with two spots in Le Bistro tomorrow night. Interested?"
"Always. Now, since you've got dinner tomorrow night, how about I buy you lunch?" she asked with a smile. It was becoming a running gag between them - lunch was included in their fees, so 'buying lunch' was another way of saying 'cheap date.'
Great story, nice bit of suspense with the package and learning what was inside it. After their summer trip, it was easy to guess Addy was going to be taking a class on using combat rifles, she really loved it when they were at Alicia's home. Man, betting against Addy is one thing but against Alicia who is from the Louisiana Bayou, that was just foolish. Fun story, Elrod and glad to see more of your writing again. Can't wait to read more in the future.
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- elrodw
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My personal impressions?
It's a bit of a brute, but nothing an exemplar couldn't handle.... recoil is useful to relocate the shoulder that was dislocated by the previous shot.
Do I think it's reasonable for 15-year-old girls to use them? Yes, with proper instruction, especially for exemplars. And yes, I had to work to string along the reveal until I did - and I found a giveaway and had to make a change at 6:55 pm (Central time) last evening to remove it (it was in a paragraph with Booker.).
Never give up, Never surrender! Captain Peter Quincy Taggert
- Katssun
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As for the title...should we expect an intra-GhostWalkers sim skirmish with a miscommunication resulting in Charge dashing directly at RPG?
edit: Oops. It will probably be Harrier instead.
- elrodw
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Katssun wrote: As for the title...should we expect an intra-GhostWalkers sim skirmish with a miscommunication resulting in Charge dashing directly at RPG?
edit: Oops. It will probably be Harrier instead.
Warning: Spoiler! [ Click to expand ] [ Click to hide ]I am confident that I am more likely to be knocked on my keister by a 12 gauge than a Mosin, but that's just me.
a) there are at least 2 more "Charge of the Light Vignettes" planned
2) you've never shot a Mosin with mil-surp ammo. I was at the range with a friend who's a shooting enthusiast; I loaded 5-rounds from a stripper-clip for him to shoot. After 2 shots, he put the rifle down and said "that's enough of that".
Never give up, Never surrender! Captain Peter Quincy Taggert
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After firing things like that in real life, I have particular skepticism for the depiction of firearms in movies. I don't know what kind of a blank loads they play with these days (when it isn't outright CG), but it pulls me out of the movie a little bit. Bad grips, bad stance, not fully shouldering big firearms, firing from the hip...
At least the WU has enhanced physical strength fully established within the canon.
If the MAS-36 is a bolt action with stripper clips, how embarrassed will the Grunts be with Addy and Alicia both achieving greater rates of fire or with better accuracy? I'm kind of guessing that Alicia already has plenty of practice with her Remington. I'm looking forward to that scene.
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Well if I am not mistaken, with rifles of that era, while intended to be loaded via stripper clips, they CAN be magazine loaded, you just didn't because magazines are heavy, expensive and the machining at the time wasn't super consistent, that said, especially with custom rounds on the table, RoF isn't as important as accuracy and being able to acquire a new target quickly.Anne wrote: I can't wait to see what the grunts think when the girls get out there and are out shooting them for accuracy. They all expect Dead Eye to make all of his shots... But Kayda? Addy? Alicia? Okay if they know where Kayda and Alicia are from then they would know that there is a better than average chance that they are more than a bit familiar with rifles!
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mhalpern wrote:
Well if I am not mistaken, with rifles of that era, while intended to be loaded via stripper clips, they CAN be magazine loaded, you just didn't because magazines are heavy, expensive and the machining at the time wasn't super consistent, that said, especially with custom rounds on the table, RoF isn't as important as accuracy and being able to acquire a new target quickly.Anne wrote: I can't wait to see what the grunts think when the girls get out there and are out shooting them for accuracy. They all expect Dead Eye to make all of his shots... But Kayda? Addy? Alicia? Okay if they know where Kayda and Alicia are from then they would know that there is a better than average chance that they are more than a bit familiar with rifles!
None of the rifles I've mentioned in stories (Mosin 91/30, 1903A3, MAS-36, Remington 700) have a detachable magazine. The SMLE Mk 4 and the Swiss K-31 do, but they aren't used the way one does in any modern rifle (AR, AK, FAL, etc, ad nauseum). You load them from a stripper clip or by individual rounds.
Never give up, Never surrender! Captain Peter Quincy Taggert
- mhalpern
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elrodw wrote:
mhalpern wrote:
Well if I am not mistaken, with rifles of that era, while intended to be loaded via stripper clips, they CAN be magazine loaded, you just didn't because magazines are heavy, expensive and the machining at the time wasn't super consistent, that said, especially with custom rounds on the table, RoF isn't as important as accuracy and being able to acquire a new target quickly.Anne wrote: I can't wait to see what the grunts think when the girls get out there and are out shooting them for accuracy. They all expect Dead Eye to make all of his shots... But Kayda? Addy? Alicia? Okay if they know where Kayda and Alicia are from then they would know that there is a better than average chance that they are more than a bit familiar with rifles!
None of the rifles I've mentioned in stories (Mosin 91/30, 1903A3, MAS-36, Remington 700) have a detachable magazine. The SMLE Mk 4 and the Swiss K-31 do, but they aren't used the way one does in any modern rifle (AR, AK, FAL, etc, ad nauseum). You load them from a stripper clip or by individual rounds.
Which was the British rifle that they turned the best samples of into snipers?
Any Bad Ideas I have and microscene OC character stories are freely adoptable.
- elrodw
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mhalpern wrote:
elrodw wrote: None of the rifles I've mentioned in stories (Mosin 91/30, 1903A3, MAS-36, Remington 700) have a detachable magazine. The SMLE Mk 4 and the Swiss K-31 do, but they aren't used the way one does in any modern rifle (AR, AK, FAL, etc, ad nauseum). You load them from a stripper clip or by individual rounds.
Which was the British rifle that they turned the best samples of into snipers?
British - P1914 leftovers from the Great War, and they added scopes to the Enfield (SMLE) Mk 4.
Germany used the K98 with a scope mostly.
Russia put scopes on the Mosin 91/30 (I have one with a scope. It's an uncomfortably high mount for a scope).
US - 1903A3 as a basis rifle with added scope
Swiss - Schmidt-Rubin K-31 with a scope (somewhat side-mounted to clear the ejection port - parallax can be an issue - I have one)
Japanese - scopes on the Type 38 and the Type 99 Arisaka rifles
It has to be noted that all of these scopes were relatively low-powered by today's standards - not over about 4x, so the range is nowhere near what current snipers shoot with modern equipment.
As to the girls and the Grunts, we might find one or two freshmen and an upperclassman ROTC student who look down their noses at the girls, especially Addy, which causes some issues....
Never give up, Never surrender! Captain Peter Quincy Taggert
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Deadeye was Class of 2007, as was Breaker. Both of them graduated. Since Bomber is a psychopath, I expect Mule to be the Grunts team leader now. Or maybe Slapdash, but he tends to get distracted over technical stuff.Anne wrote: I can't wait to see what the grunts think when the girls get out there and are out shooting them for accuracy. They all expect Dead Eye to make all of his shots... But Kayda? Addy? Alicia? Okay if they know where Kayda and Alicia are from then they would know that there is a better than average chance that they are more than a bit familiar with rifles!
Now, the interesting part is that the Grunts, as most of the clubs, should be in "rush" mode, trying to fill their ranks with fresh blood. The three girls are Sophomores or Juniors and showed no previous interest in the Grunts, so they are poor recruiting prospects. But I still wouldn't be surprised if they try. Bunker, in particular, might welcome the idea of more girls in the Grunts, and she's not known for her tact, so she might become rather... annoying with her pitch.
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Out, damnéd Spot! Bad Doggy!
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The story of her sim with the Grunts only appears in the fan-fiction forums, so her membership in the Grunts might be a reasonable assumption but I'm pretty sure it's never explicitly confirmed (in cannon).
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Hebblejebble wrote: Whisper's cannon appearance ends with her assigned to Whitman and wanting to "do the JROTC thing".
The story of her sim with the Grunts only appears in the fan-fiction forums, so her membership in the Grunts might be a reasonable assumption but I'm pretty sure it's never explicitly confirmed (in cannon).
I was fairly sure that "There's No Place Like Poe" was intended to be canon.
Kayda 10: There's No Place Like Poe wrote: As I suspected, the infiltrator was Bunker, which meant we'd been against the Grunts. Besides Mule, Slapdash, Bunker, Bomber, and Lancer, there were two more on the team - both freshmen, and one of them was glaring angrily at Charge, while the other Grunts were shooting him the evil eye. The other one was Whisper, a Sidhe girl who was a mage and a sophomore, but I wasn't familiar with her. If she hung out with Fey, it wasn't while I was around.
Flowers of the Sun wrote: Dora: Research Installation Class AI(DARPA), looks and acts like a bubbly cheerleader, but is one of the oldest AI’s in the US, with Minerva her sister AI the unofficial leader of US AI society. Programmed by Whisper.
Code: DARPA-MIN-0101
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I knew of the "Flowers of the Sun" reference, but considered it irrelevant to discussions of Grunts membership. The "There's No Place Like Poe" reference I totally missed, I gotta re-read that.
Good to know. I was curious to see how the Grunts would integrate magic into there tactics and it seems far more likely I might be able to see that now.
- Schol-R-LEA
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Out, damnéd Spot! Bad Doggy!