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Question Laura and the Labs
- DanZilla
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- Malady
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Okay, yeah, no way Financier is not Ayla.
That ending conversation! Brilliant!
I guess the Unnamed AI is gonna appear in the story after this...
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Nice approach with Mazarin. There was a question mark about what his approach towards the Whateley Accords would be. Now we know.
Slightly surprised that it took so long for the patent troll to be caught, as he'd been targeting Whateley students before.
There may be another background narrative of flavour that covers the Order of the Broken Wrench's reactions to this, as there may have been students that would have previously been accepted, that didn't rate as high in their ranks, due to the patent problems.
Also, with the potential of two patent's in Japan, it's a good bet that Laura will be tapped for membership soon.

Add in the Winter break trip for Laura et al, along with the Secret Squirrels trying to operate in Japan, and there's the set-up for some great Christmas tales.

Have we been told what the Gen 2 Yama Dojo are doing right now?

Lots of potential plot hooks and story seeds.

Measure Twice
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Below is a stream of conscious commentary I type up as I read the story. There will be details from the story included in it. If you have not read the story yet and don't wish to have details of it spoiled, read no further.
Laura and the Labs comments
Boy, you can just tell how rough Laura has had it, never seen her like this before. Babysitting for the Bartons and trying to get caught up in the labs, good grief, surprised she isn't half asleep right now. Star Trek jokes, always fun, plus Tia calling them nerds, bet she has some stuff she nerds out over. *eyes bug out* It is a good thing Laura has Morgana to help test her PFG.Tuesday, September 27, 2016 - Dinner
Crystal Hall, Whateley Academy
Bwahaha, Tavi trying to sneak some of Jimmy's pancakes, too cute. Men in Black bit with Jeebs, Tavi is perfect for so much comedic potential. Direct plasma charge, now that would be a potent little weapon. Micro-drones for Kurenai, Hikaru will get no peace once that happens. Tavi can be a bit scary with his ideas, Star War's black interrogation droid, yikes. Ack, my sides, Yoda-Tavi has me cracking up. Tavi with blasters, I would forsee Jimmy getting detention for Tavi blasting bullies too often. Ooo, work on the devisor chocolate continues, yum.
Horace Bishop, nice to see a completely average guy at Whateley, though being a biodevisor sure makes him not average. Whoa, all those steps to making chocolate, never knew it was that complicated to make one of my favorite treats. Did your research and it shows, love learning this kind of stuff.After Dinner
Labs beneath Kane Hall, Whateley Academy
Marking off the trees, smart. Wonder who left them behind though.
It figures Jobe made a legacy like this. That is a lot of chocolate they could make, wish I could buy some."I know," Horace admitted. "There was a very notorious biodevisor - Princess Jobe - whose work didn't make it any easier for biodevisors," he grumbled. "She's the reason that half of the laws exist. Because of all those laws and regulations, I put a 'self-destruct' gene sequence in everything I make. They can't last past three or four reproductive cycles before they're sterile and can't reproduce further. And I track where the samples are, and I develop a specific toxin against that specific plant. You wouldn't believe what kinds of safeguards we have to take - all because of Jobe!"

Mrs. Cody shows up and reminds Laura she needs to get back to Poe before curfew, hhm, I thought students working on projects in the labs had an exception from that rule or have things changed since Gen 1?Late Evening
Labs beneath Kane Hall, Whateley Academy
Good advice, at the pace Laura is currently going she will run herself ragged. Of course Mrs. Cody knows that Laura has a girlfriend, experience is a great teacher."Either pick one project and focus exclusively on that, or schedule a specific amount of time for each project and stick to that schedule rigidly."
Oh good, 'legal' talk can give the average person a headache, they should require a translator for everyone dealing with them."The administration has an office specifically to work with patents. Make an appointment in your free time, and Ah'll go with you. The patent people talk 'legal', and they're hard to understand at times." She smiled at Laura. "It's the least Ah can do after all the babysitting - and trouble - with mah kids."
An enhanced neural neutralizer, and oh course someone stole a vital part, good grief. Always those who take such shortcuts in each generation. Poor Laura in such a state over the theft, I hope Mrs. Cody can help her find the culprit and sort things out. At least Mrs. Cody is able to calm Laura down, at least they can fill out an incident report despite no evidence on the camera records. So many ways someone in the tech track can figure out how to spoof them unless the cameras have been upgraded a lot in recent years.Wednesday, September 28, 2016 - Mid Afternoon
Labs beneath Kane Hall, Whateley Academy
Laura revealing to everyone what happened and why she missed dinner with them, I'm guessing thefts are rare in the labs with how shocked they all are. A mystery, hhm. Wonder if someone has the power to aport parts of items to themselves without needing line-of-sight and leaves no energy trace in the process. Hybrid cacao trees that can grow in non-tropical environments alone would be worth a fortune. That much chocolate! *tries not to drool*Thursday, September 29, 2016 - Breakfast
Crystal Hall, Whateley Academy
It's a wonder some biodevisor hasn't done so already, what with devisor coffee.Morgana stared a couple of seconds, then she cocked an eyebrow. "Do you think your friend could make a bioengineered coffee bush like that?"
Okay, whoever designed this listening device is a genius, including in their placement and making sure its signal wouldn't be picked up unless you know what to listen for. I just hope they don't wipe out the hybrid cacao trees in the process of trying to screw over Laura and Horace.
No, anyone but the Secret Squirrels and worse yet, a freshman member whose dad is a police detective and thinks spying on people like this is legal. Amy Tinghill is going to be trouble. Oh great, what are these idiots going to pull now?Secret Squirrels Clubhouse, Whateley Academy
Sentinel is the name of one of the agents keeping an eye on Laura and a male subject, hhm. Eep, whoever stole Laura's part is going to regret it. Silverplate is protective of her "test subjects".After Breakfast
Behind Holbrook Arena, Whateley Academy
Boy, 'Shine grew up but hasn't changed much. All those nicknames for Lanie, hehe. 'Shine's help with fermenting the beans, now that would speed up that part of the process significantly. 'Shine has a nanny, lives in a mansion down in Berlin, wonder who he married.After Classes
The Flying Blue Squirrel Pub, The Village, Whateley Academy
Hehe, teasing between 'Shine and Mrs. Cody, love seeing old friends together. So 'Shine married a Southern girl, that narrow down the number of girls it could be some.
Now this is the kind of world-building I love to see, stuff which changes some things and is realistic for the setting. Glad 'Shine figured out how to do some good in the world with his power."Yeah. His devises have helped a lot of third-word economies switch to ethanol-based fuels. The Saudis and Russians hate him because he is single-handedly responsible for driving down petroleum fuel consumption by a sizeable percent. The beauty is, since they're devises, no-one can copy them. The royalties - and he doesn't ask for much - net him more than a million dollars each and every day."
Whoa, Morgana serious and wanting to chat in private, what is up? An idea to catch the creep who stole from Laura if they do it again, wonder if it will work. Using magic to catch a tech-savvy thief, now that is clever. Pizza night, even I couldn't resist that, not with the chefs they have at Whateley.After Classes
Campus Quad, Whateley Academy
Morgana and that devisor coffee, those poor boys don't stand a chance if she asks for something, do they. That regenerative plasma trap is impressive. All the steps needed to design and construct something, anyone who says having a gadgeteer or devisor trait makes things easy is nuts from what we've seen of how much work Laura puts into her projects.Labs beneath Kane Hall, Whateley Academy
Spell slips for each item already made, Morgana sure is a prepared mage. Heh, Laura having to listen to Morgana explain magic, to those not a part of something it can make your head spin having such things explained. Bwahaha, everyone expecting lights and such when magic is performed, some of the best spells are undetectable except to the initiated. Now that is a secure safe. Noooo! Scum robbed her again, whoever is behind this is toast.
Laura has something like a panic attack, Antonia with her, sedative given, I hope whoever did this gets expelled! All this driving Laura into severe depression, now I want to string up the creep behind this on a pole and beat them like a pinata.Poe Cottage, Whateley Academy
Seeing Laura in this state, you just want to do anything you can to help cheer her up. Koichi's father makes alcoholic drinks and knows 'Shine, interesting. No, Laura, you can't leave Whateley, the MMM wouldn't be the same without you, Whateley wouldn't be the same without you, plus the kids you babysit will force their parents to follow you home to beg you to come back. And if the Secret Squirrels heard all that and don't do anything to help they haven't gotten any better over the years.Friday, September 30, 2016 - Breakfast
Crystal Hall, Whateley Academy
Sentinel is ticked off as Tante Hilde now about what has been done to Laura, whoever is behind this better hope security gets to them first at this rate.
Hideo Taniguchi meeting with his two oldest friends, Kiku-san works there, with her age I wonder if she runs the place.Saturday, October 1, 2016 - Evening (across International Date Line)
Small Club, Osaka, Japan
Great service."Miyakaza-san and Yamada-san are already here, in your usual place, and Chihiro is your hostess this evening. They are already three drinks ahead of you, and they have been complaining that you are not here to pay your share!"
Haruki Miyazuki and Kenzo Yamada, wonderful names. *winces* Poor Nanami, if only treatment for her condition with less risk existed. I wonder what Hideo is going to ask his son Koichi about, what could have he recalled which is so important? Oh wait, the properties of the neural neutralizer could help with seizures if I remember correctly.
Quentin St.James, so they were monitoring Laura due to Sentinel hiring them for that exact purpose, forget if that was mentioned before. And now Jimmy knows they might be surveilling Laura, good. Carrie Harper, Mouse; Ed Temple, Mister Blank; Sam Verner, Tiptoe, love all their codenames, nothing hinted at what their powers or abilities are. Hehe, at least Mister Blank knows being case lead can be a pain in the ass.Secret Squirrels Clubhouse, Whateley Academy
I hope it is only a matter of time before Jimmy finds out about Sentinel and her partner on campus.Jimmy gulped - at this point, he knew they were talking about Laura. The question in his mind was not whether they were looking for her stolen items, but who had engaged them to watch Laura, and why. Now, besides interacting with the Squirrels, he had his own detective work to do.
Horace going over their project details, and Laura is too depressed to pay attention, until her temper flairs at the suggestion of working with Ian Chapman, one of the creeps who messed with Cally. Horace has a crush on Lori Sims, adorable, and she does sound cute.Labs beneath Kane Hall, Whateley Academy
Crud, seems I assumed wrongly earlier, the theft situation in the labs hasn't improved.Lots of equipment and projects were stolen in the labs, far more than most would admit. It was a fact of life, and some years it got so bad that gadgeteers never left their projects in the lab if they could help it, but slept with them in their cottage rooms.
Yup, Hideo called Koichi to set up a call between him and Laura in the hopes she can help his friend's daughter. Whoa, doesn't care if he is woken up by his son's call, he cares for his friend and their family.Emerson Cottage, Whateley Academy
More paperwork and more statements for Security, with the mental and emotional state Laura is in, they need to talk to student's counselor's about such things more. And Koichi shows up to talk to her about a private matter, at least Laura didn't have to turn him down if he asked her out on a date, yet.Campus Quad, Whateley Academy
She has a point, almost every time that has happened there are problems. *sigh* Hideo should have said it was a matter of life and death. I hope they call in time for Nanami's sake.Laura cocked one eyebrow. Somehow, any time any of her friends suggested that there would be no problems, there were problems. "I guess so."
Good to have Hikaru there for translation. Laura being humble thanks to Hikaru's tutoring in Japanese etiquette, asking if Laura has ever been to Japan and would like to visit, oh boy, just tell her about Nanami's health and what you heard about her neural neutralizer already.Saturday, October 1, 2016 - Morning
Meeting Room, Poe Cottage, Whateley Academy
Finally, to the heart of the issue at hand, and Laura thinks Hideo is the one having seizures, heh. And the reason Laura needs to go to Japan comes out, neural neutralizer has to be tuned to Nanami's neural patterns and Laura is best suited as the creator of the devise to do so. Missing classes to save someone's life, Mrs. Carson would give the okay on this in an instant. And buying some time with the existing neural neutralizer, I wish technology like this existed already.
And Hikaru smooths over those other worries I had about getting the neural neutralizer to Japan, yay. And Hideo insists Laura bring her mom and little sister with her, that ends the last worry about missing Thanksgiving with her family. Tia is coming on Winter Break with Hikaru as well, with Laura, her mom, and little sister along I predict this isn't going to be a quiet trip.
If she knew the history of students of Whateley and the kinds of adventures they get into on vacations Laura would realize that it is far bigger than a jinx."I look forward to the trip," Laura said, smiling but having an ominous premonition that her words were some kind of jinx.
Hhm, what do you have planned, Hikaru? *sigh* Laura, sometimes friends just like to help friends out however they can and don't expect anything in return, don't think you are taking advantage, Hikaru certainly doesn't seem to."I can assure you, Taniguchi-san can easily afford this, Kami... I can." Hikaru smiled slightly, the smile not reaching her eyes. "So don't worry about it." Laura still was trying to figure out what the odd tone and body language of the Japanese RA was hinting at.
Oh boy, trying to have Bailey track down the missing piece through her power to sense emotions and such, seems like a stretch to think this would work. Even her teachers don't know how she tracked down a missing earring that was part of a pair, great, probably means more powers testing for her.Labs beneath Kane Hall, Whateley Academy
Great, the thief is one of those kinds. Could it be the spirit of a student who died down here years ago?"There's ... something foreign," Bailey reported. "Anger, hatred ... of girls? A sense of intrusion in a special space?"
Well, that blows the spirit theory, sophomore or older in the labs with this kind of attitude, just toxic. Something...that turns off? Huh, could this not be about a device but to the individual, like some form of split personality or Deidrick's?Bailey shook her head. "No. More a sense of ... entitlement?" She wrinkled her nose. "Like ... he's entitled to steal other people's stuff maybe?" She concentrated a few more seconds. "Anger at freshmen having better lab space? A sense of persecution that they're getting help from staff, maybe?"
Laura not interested in working in the labs, this creep must be found and fast. And of course, security shows up right then to do a search of everyone's lab space, backpacks, etc. The whole thing only took half an hour, that is a lot of experience in this, depressing to think about.
More Secret Squirrels surveillance or something else, hhm.Despite their efficiency, the guards didn't spot a tiny bump on a zipper on Laura's backpack. Laura and her friends hadn't spotted it, either.
Security found her powerpack in another student's workbench, wouldn't be surprised if that student was framed by the real culprit. I knew it, someone framed Horace for this to break up their chocolate project, bet one of the new Secret Squirrels isn't above such a thing.Kane Hall, Whateley Academy
Eep, that alibi is air-tight, allergies can be brutal.Horace grimaced. "I'm allergic to blueberries," he explained, starting to blush. "They make me have a really bad rash and ... they really upset my entire digestive tract. I ... I was at Doyle - half-sedated to keep me from going crazy from the itching, and I had an IV to keep me from dehydrating from ... you know."
Hhm, was it a mistake, or did the thief set up the kitchen staff to get Horace out of the way?Horace frowned. "The muffins were supposed to have artificial blueberries," he admitted sheepishly. "I checked - they always make them that way. They're supposed to be made that way. Evidently, someone new on the kitchen staff put in real blueberries by mistake."
Still a mystery and even Mouse thinks Horace was set up, this group of Secret Squirrels are much better than the old one at their job. Good, Bailey's read of Laura's part reveals the truth that Horace was set up. The more they find out, the more complicated this whole mess seems to be. Gah! The old fool the cameras with a still image of the location trick, should have seen it coming. Transparent LED screen, a new twist on a classic. And with all the details of the perp, Ed knows who it is, I hope this creep gets a harsh punishment.Secret Squirrels Clubhouse, Whateley Academy
Whoa, these guys are a breath of fresh air after Gen 1 Secret Squirrels."A very important factor when investigating is to be quite certain before you start lobbing accusations," Ed mildly rebuked Mouse. "False allegations could get us in serious trouble, and they could gravely damage an individual's reputation."
Laura didn't notice Jimmy, Bailey, Morgana, and Tanya entering her lab, Jimmy I could see, Bailey and Tanya even, but not noticing Morgana enter, Laura must be focused on something intensely. Finally, Laura gets that Horace didn't do it, she can be stubborn once she decides something it seems. Sometimes you need your friends to push you into doing what is right, at least Laura apologizes and Horace accepts immediately.Sunday, October 2, 2016 - After Dinner
Labs Beneath Kane Hall, Whateley Academy
And it is Lori Sims who Horace is interviewing to bring onto the project, not someone to replace Laura with, thought that was the case. And she is cute like Horace said, can see why he has a crush on her. Yikes! Lori has a sore spot about being called Trash Panda, even suspects you are going to call her that and almost bites your head off.
Sunday, October 2, 2016 - Late
Financier's Penthouse Apartment
If that isn't Ayla as the Financier and Adalie Vitesse, I don't know who it could be. =-P Investigating Silverplate, might work with the organization but doesn't trust them, same old Ayla.The ringtone on the Financier's phone was an obscure - and generally reviled - rock band. She sighed, then glanced at her partner. "Excuse me, hon," she said. "I have to take this."
"I know," the partner, a very pretty girl with dark hair and a cute Gallic nose, answered patiently. "It's your Bat-phone, and duty calls, no?" She spoke with a charming accent.
'Missing' or stolen items from Whateley, who is this creep, is it the same one which stole from Laura? If so this guy is going to be in a whole lot more trouble than previously expected."It's a small, one-person business, operating mainly as a patent-troll. Interestingly enough, several of the patent issues come from a place you're quite familiar with," Corrine noted.
Stealing other's inventions and selling them to the highest bidder, sickening. And calls up Silverplate, what is your plan, Financier?"There's more," Corrine interrupted. "The troll has a mostly-compete patent application that almost perfectly matches the subject of Silverplate's request. There are photos attached of a model as well, and the application revolves around a working model of the invention."
Peter Campbell, getting a call like this and going to meet the person, this is our creep, isn't it?Behind Holbrook Arena, Whateley Academy
Any part of this true or all delusional on his part?The staff hated him, he knew, because he was brilliant and had very good ideas. Too many times, though, his ideas had been stolen by others, thanks to his explaining things to the staff and them handing the concepts to other, more-favored students.
Quick-acting paralyzing agent, this is going to be...fun. They have one of his lens-display-dots, Mr. Pressman remembers him developing the device, he has a couple dozen more in his lab bench, just how many people has he been spying on? Trying to excuse his thefts that they happen all the time in the labs, ugh. Oh, he is going to remember this lesson very well, these two don't play around. Next time, if he is foolish enough for there to be the next time, I doubt security would have a body to even find.
Floyd Mallory, the appearance of a busy inventor to maintain, so this is the other creep to deal with. Computer not working, two guys in suits show up, panic alarm disabled, these guys are pros. Mr. Tony, I hope this is an act and that someone other than Financier's people haven't gotten to this guy first. Goes for a gun only to have a throwing knife pin his arm, the big guy is good.Monday, October 3, 2016 - Very Early Morning
Private Lab, Boston MA
Vito, the big guy, goes to inspect the cabinet where a certain package arrived last Friday, of course it's locked. Love how Vito just rips the door right off the cabinet. And proof he is accepting stolen goods from Whateley, most recently Laura's prototype, shown right to Floyd, this guy is going down hard.
I hope they can prove each and every patent he has stolen and get all that money back to the Whateley students, along with their patents to their inventions. Knowing "Financier", it will happen."You weren't planning to patent someone else's invention and then sue them for royalties, were you? Like you've done hundreds of times? Like you've done to Whateley students almost two dozen times over the last seven years?" Mr. Tony's comment was less a question than a pointed accusation that fit the facts with uncanny accuracy.
Laura and Sumika Miura using Dr. Barton's office with his permission, Laura's mother is great, lovingly teasing her daughter. A conference call with Hideo to plan the Winter Break trip to Japan, fun. Good luck to be named April or hanami for the month as it is in Japan, interesting. *sigh* Americans place too much importance on money, wish it was on family and friends more often.Schuster Hall, Whateley Academy
Bwahaha, how parents can embarrass their kids so easily without even meaning to."If all Japanese men are that charming, I think I'll enjoy the trip!" she said with a light laugh.
"Mom!"
A call for Dr. Mazarin with a code phrase, must be something very important.Early Morning
Schuster Hall, Whateley Academy
Yikes, this case is a lot more serious than I thought. Delivery by warper with Laura's prototype, now that is rapid delivery."Information was given to me about a couple of parties who were engaged in theft from the school in a way that some do-gooders might consider a violation of the Neutrality Accords," the caller said.
I always wondered about that, nice to have an answer.Normally, a warper penetrating the shield around the Whateley campus would set off alarms and security would respond, but an authorized warper using a coded beacon would not.
Laura brought in, with Robert Turner, Mrs. Cody, and Dr. Barton as well. Laura gets her model back and more, Dr. Mazarin is a good headmaster for Whateley. So glad to see Laura with tears of joy and happiness once again.
Mayra Guzman, oh great, a junior and she is trying to act seductive to manipulate Mazarin and acts innocent of any wrong-doing.Schuster Hall, Whateley Academy
Lost a wager with Mr. Turner over this, this girl doesn't get what the full extent of Neutrality Accords for Whateley means."I suppose," Mayra answered. "But ... if such a theft were to occur, that would be something that you, as a member of the Syndicate, would understand as being 'business as usual'."
"Congratulations, Miss Guzman!" Mazarin said in an unexpectedly pleasant tone. "You're the first to use the 'you're one of us' argument to excuse your actions!" He smiled briefly. "To be honest, I'm a little disappointed at your timing, though, because now I owe the Assistant Headmaster dinner. We had a wager on how long it would take for a student to try that excuse."
This, this is why Mrs. Carson chose him are her successor."I reject that premise. It's been too widely used to justify unconscionable actions, would you not agree?" He smiled again. "While I was loyal to my former employer, I've since retired, and while I keep my oaths and secrets to my former employer to the extent allowed by my current position, my loyalty lies with my current employer and with the students under my charge. I cannot and will not condone any actions that bring harm to my students, regardless of my former profession." Though he had a pleasant expression, his words were hard as steel, cutting and leaving no doubt as to his thoughts on the subject.
A photograph of Floyd dead and his condition in that state, Mayra's reaction said it all.
I think I would rather face down an angry Kodiak than deal with Mazarin if that were to happen."Unlike others, I operate on the basis of verifiable facts, not rumor or speculation," the Headmaster spoke solemnly. "Speculation about one incident is not, to me, actionable. A second incident, however, would not be a coincidence, and I would be obligated to do everything in my power to protect Whateley and my students." He stared evenly at the girl, his hawkish gaze seeming to penetrate to her soul in a bone-chilling fashion. "Do I make myself clear?"
The Masterminds had better be very careful about what jobs they take and what they do from now on. Mazarin giving off calm demeanor yet a fury hidden behind it, that is much scarier than someone who yells and screams. Well done."Good. And Miss Guzman?" She paused again. "At your earliest convenience, please ensure that your compatriots and colleagues understand my position. This warning to you will be considered a final warning to all."
Quentin St. James going to meet Ron Forrester aka Black Hole at the back of Laird Hall. So Ron Forrester aka Black Hole is the male agent keeping on eye on Laura, forget if we learned his codename before. They fed the Secret Squirrel that lie about Laura to get them surveilling her, oh brother. Mustela and him don't even know why Silverplate has them watching out for Laura, agents in the dark as well, this goes deeper than I thought.Near Schuster Hall, Whateley Academy
Yeah, that is an apt description of those bozos. And yikes, they had StahlFaust beat up Pete Campbell, I thought Black Hole's partner was involved in that attack."What, your little Ev Rocks peace-niks and kum-ba-ya chanters?" He shook his head, snorting derisively. "The only thing they're good for is bleating to the media whenever there's a mutant incident that if the rest of the world wasn't so discriminatory, mutants would be peaceful, happy little lackeys. They're a freakin' circus act! They'll never be more than a cute little curiosity the media treats like good little pet mutants!"
Liaison in the Intelligence Corps, all to keep an eye on Laura and their other subject. Great, question of following her to Disney Land, she is going to have some of the Secret Squirrels stalking her in Japan, isn't she.
And there we have it, the old blackmail into joining without being explicit about it."And in case you didn't know, you're already very involved, whether you like it or not."
Oh boy, everybody thinks Laura did that to Pete, these people are a bit paranoid.Crystal Hall, Whateley Academy
Okay, that is even worse, Sentinel was right this was going to snowball if they got involved."And since he's in Doyle, there's a buzz that ...," Bianca wrinkled her nose, "that you have some kind of protection. That messing with you is not good for one's health."
Hey, when you get a good idea, you don't want to lose it."Well," she finally spoke, sounding both resigned and philosophical, "if people are afraid of me, maybe they'll leave my stuff alone and let me go first in line at the test stands! I've got a lot of testing to do. I've still got bugs to work out on the regenerative plasma trap for the PFG, and I'm ready to test the 'torpedo' launcher, and I've got to test the power circuits for my new neural neutralizer, and ...."
Hikaru having to call the Prime Minister of Japan, Shinzo Abe, Hikaru having to explain the whole situation for what she promised without Abe's permission first. Always interested in more gadgeteers and devisors for Japan, who can blame them with the wonders they can design and create.Melville Cottage, Whateley Academy
Her neural neutralizer for the JSDF and Japanese police forces, a truly non-lethal way to subdue someone would be game-changer.<One item occurred to me – if she is willing, I think the offer of a patent on her invention in Japan would be a nice gesture of gratitude. As well, perhaps Taniguchi-san might consider licensing her invention for medical purposes.>
I just hope dinner with Abe and his family doesn't lead to any trouble.Hikaru after a moment, finally summed up the call. "... Shit. Laura's going to kill me."
Kurenai's snicker responded as Hikaru picked up her hair dryer to resume the task. "She'll try. But, if it works, in either application, and is replicable? I think the money would make her very happy."
Hikaru paused before turning on the dryer. "That just might put her into shock."
I was so happy to see Laura working on her inventions, all her plans for them, all the ways she would help Mrs. Barton and her friends, working on the chocolate project with Horace. Then to have her happiness ripped out from her under her by a thief, makes you want to see such a person suffer for making Laura fall to such depths of despair. Getting help from Mrs. Cody and her friends helped, then right when Morgana was helping to set a trap her big project for Mrs. Barton is found stolen. Right then I wanted to see the thief tortured in numerous ways. You really made this thief someone easy to hate before we even knew who they were.
Her friends watching over Laura, helping out, shows how many friends and people who care about her Laura has at Whateley, the thought of her leaving broke my heart. Financier's agents discovering the man behind it all, the students at Whateley breaking the Neutrality Accords like this, glad to see this whole monstrous operation broken so thoroughly. Mayra Guzman [please say she is no relation to Gabriella Guzman], Peter Campbell, I can't believe there are still students this arrogant and stupid to think they can break the Accords like this and have no repercussions. I love what Mazarin did with Mayra, no display of anger, no yelling, just calm, and explaining things to her.
And I'm so glad that despite Laura being depressed over the thefts she proves what a good person she is, willing to go to Japan and miss being with her family to help out Nanami. Seriously, she is the kindest and generous girl, I'm surprised more people weren't ready to hunt down the thief and string him up with all the friends she has made. Now I can't wait for the trip to Japan during Winter Break, with all those Whateley students together you know something is going to happen.

Thank You for story comments appreciated and help me know me they are being read and liked.

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Any Bad Ideas I have and microscene OC character stories are freely adoptable.
- Greatdingo
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I especially like how various threads interweave with each other, making for a fuller and more complete story.
Also, I'm always happy to see 'Shine again, easily one of my favourite gen1 year2 characters.
There are a few nitpicks about editing, but nothing that at all interferes with the flow of the story in any significant manner.
Yeah, very well done, have a five star review and two thumbs up!
- mhalpern
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Any Bad Ideas I have and microscene OC character stories are freely adoptable.
- mhalpern
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Any Bad Ideas I have and microscene OC character stories are freely adoptable.
- cprime
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When it was first revealed that Laura's stuff was stolen, my instinct had been to point the finger at Jamie Howe, possibly in a Diedricks episode. I will second Mister D's comments about the demonstration of the Headmaster's dedication to The Accords.
About mid-way through the story, I had the passing thought that someone needed to give the smurf a hug, stat. Glad to see that things worked out, even if things just got a whole lot more complicated with Jimmy and the Squirrels. Laura has a big heart, and I can only hope she doesn't get burned badly by it.
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The two are actually my favorites to write for that reason.
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Malady wrote: Okay, yeah, no way Financier is not Ayla.
Care to bet on that?

Dreamer wrote: Mayra Guzman [please say she is no relation to Gabriella Guzman], Peter Campbell, I can't believe there are still students this arrogant and stupid to think they can break the Accords like this and have no repercussions. I love what Mazarin did with Mayra, no display of anger, no yelling, just calm, and explaining things to her.
'Guzman' is the 36th most popular surname in a country 129 million people. The odds aren't very good.
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elrodw wrote: Laura is like Shine - not sneaky, devious, or demanding. A genuinely nice character. And not high-powered.
The two are actually my favorites to write for that reason.
One of these days somebody is going to make the mistake of giving Laura a pair of tight leather pants, or a white miniskirt and white heels...
And learn that even Laura can be terrifying when pushed too far

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null0trooper wrote:
Malady wrote: Okay, yeah, no way Financier is not Ayla.
Care to bet on that?
Dreamer wrote: Mayra Guzman [please say she is no relation to Gabriella Guzman], Peter Campbell, I can't believe there are still students this arrogant and stupid to think they can break the Accords like this and have no repercussions. I love what Mazarin did with Mayra, no display of anger, no yelling, just calm, and explaining things to her.
'Guzman' is the 36th most popular surname in a country 129 million people. The odds aren't very good.
Reasons why Financier is likely Ayla:
Whateley Alum
very expensive tastes in coffee
Appears female whilst SO recently had a baby (there are other ways of course, and other characters that are similarly equipped.)
Age implies Gen 1 student,
financial skills
uses obscure literary references
and uses quite thorough investigative resources
now if it wasn't for #3 and we didn't already know where these characters were, that list may include Jadis and Tansy, but both of them are accounted for, but 3 combined with the rest, narrows it down
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mhalpern wrote:
null0trooper wrote:
Malady wrote: Okay, yeah, no way Financier is not Ayla.
Care to bet on that?
Dreamer wrote: Mayra Guzman [please say she is no relation to Gabriella Guzman], Peter Campbell, I can't believe there are still students this arrogant and stupid to think they can break the Accords like this and have no repercussions. I love what Mazarin did with Mayra, no display of anger, no yelling, just calm, and explaining things to her.
'Guzman' is the 36th most popular surname in a country 129 million people. The odds aren't very good.
Reasons why Financier is likely Ayla:
Whateley Alum
very expensive tastes in coffee
Appears female whilst SO recently had a baby (there are other ways of course, and other characters that are similarly equipped.)
Age implies Gen 1 student,
financial skills
uses obscure literary references
and uses quite thorough investigative resources
now if it wasn't for #3 and we didn't already know where these characters were, that list may include Jadis and Tansy, but both of them are accounted for, but 3 combined with the rest, narrows it down
You forgot:
- SO is likely another alum and a former Beret Mafia type (hint - accent and Gallic nose).
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Of course, all of these hints could be the authors intentionally trying to trick us into thinking Financier is Ayla so we let our guards down and don't see it coming when they kill him off in the Gen-1 timeline. Then after letting us wonder for a while if he somehow cheated death, they'll reveal that Financier is David. Only after we've accepted that will they reveal that Ayla faked his death so he could run off and join Brass Monkey.
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elrodw wrote:
mhalpern wrote:
null0trooper wrote:
Malady wrote: Okay, yeah, no way Financier is not Ayla.
Care to bet on that?
Dreamer wrote: Mayra Guzman [please say she is no relation to Gabriella Guzman], Peter Campbell, I can't believe there are still students this arrogant and stupid to think they can break the Accords like this and have no repercussions. I love what Mazarin did with Mayra, no display of anger, no yelling, just calm, and explaining things to her.
'Guzman' is the 36th most popular surname in a country 129 million people. The odds aren't very good.
Reasons why Financier is likely Ayla:
Whateley Alum
very expensive tastes in coffee
Appears female whilst SO recently had a baby (there are other ways of course, and other characters that are similarly equipped.)
Age implies Gen 1 student,
financial skills
uses obscure literary references
and uses quite thorough investigative resources
now if it wasn't for #3 and we didn't already know where these characters were, that list may include Jadis and Tansy, but both of them are accounted for, but 3 combined with the rest, narrows it down
You forgot:
- SO is likely another alum and a former Beret Mafia type (hint - accent and Gallic nose).
I still think there's a chance the Financier is Fubar in some sort of reverse scuba suit, and also he's experimenting with gender roles.
In other news, I may have misunderstood something. The part where Tanaguchi the Elder is meeting his friends at the club. It's almost described as if he's meeting people above him in station? But doesn't he own the company?
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Greatdingo wrote:
elrodw wrote:
mhalpern wrote:
null0trooper wrote:
Malady wrote: Okay, yeah, no way Financier is not Ayla.
Care to bet on that?
Dreamer wrote: Mayra Guzman [please say she is no relation to Gabriella Guzman], Peter Campbell, I can't believe there are still students this arrogant and stupid to think they can break the Accords like this and have no repercussions. I love what Mazarin did with Mayra, no display of anger, no yelling, just calm, and explaining things to her.
'Guzman' is the 36th most popular surname in a country 129 million people. The odds aren't very good.
Reasons why Financier is likely Ayla:
Whateley Alum
very expensive tastes in coffee
Appears female whilst SO recently had a baby (there are other ways of course, and other characters that are similarly equipped.)
Age implies Gen 1 student,
financial skills
uses obscure literary references
and uses quite thorough investigative resources
now if it wasn't for #3 and we didn't already know where these characters were, that list may include Jadis and Tansy, but both of them are accounted for, but 3 combined with the rest, narrows it down
You forgot:
- SO is likely another alum and a former Beret Mafia type (hint - accent and Gallic nose).
I still think there's a chance the Financier is Fubar in some sort of reverse scuba suit, and also he's experimenting with gender roles.
In other news, I may have misunderstood something. The part where Tanaguchi the Elder is meeting his friends at the club. It's almost described as if he's meeting people above him in station? But doesn't he own the company?
If it was Foob experimenting with gender roles there'd be a skirt, and he wouldn't need a suit, he can project for miles,
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Greatdingo wrote: I still think there's a chance the Financier is Fubar in some sort of reverse scuba suit, and also he's experimenting with gender roles.
In other news, I may have misunderstood something. The part where Tanaguchi the Elder is meeting his friends at the club. It's almost described as if he's meeting people above him in station? But doesn't he own the company?
Taniguchi the Elder (I like that phrase!) is meeting friends, not superiors. He owns his company; the friends he's meeting socially are his friends from college, and they work for other businesses. I probably have to get into that a bit more when Laura takes her Mark II Neural Neutralizer to Japan. But yeah, not superiors. Friends. (BTW, I got an okie-dokie from Wasamon that the cultural description was adequate.)
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elrodw wrote:
Greatdingo wrote: I still think there's a chance the Financier is Fubar in some sort of reverse scuba suit, and also he's experimenting with gender roles.
In other news, I may have misunderstood something. The part where Tanaguchi the Elder is meeting his friends at the club. It's almost described as if he's meeting people above him in station? But doesn't he own the company?
Taniguchi the Elder (I like that phrase!) is meeting friends, not superiors. He owns his company; the friends he's meeting socially are his friends from college, and they work for other businesses. I probably have to get into that a bit more when Laura takes her Mark II Neural Neutralizer to Japan. But yeah, not superiors. Friends. (BTW, I got an okie-dokie from Wasamon that the cultural description was adequate.)
Okay, cool, it was just the talk about how you'd socialize with your superiors in order to move up that threw me.
Also, Fubar for "Reverse Scuba-suit" wearing Financier!
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She also hasnt been shown to be good with money, you know beyond being a cyberpath, and while her "twin" Paige (Cyberkitty) is at Whateley, she isn'tAnne wrote: Financier is Petra (I think that is her name...?) Or is it her code name? She is the one in the insanity series in gen 1... There is a reasonably good chance she could be hermaphroditic...
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You have me there, though I was thinking of Paige, but couldn't recall her name at all. She is good with money, or at least found a way to essentially charge everyone .01 cents per transaction deposited to her account.... Paige Donner was at least being looked at by the Golden Kids... If Ayla were to have taken her under her wing, with her cyberpathic abilities... Nah she couldn't be Financier, she wouldn't have need for anyone else to help her to track down a criminal like the two-bit piece of work that was suing Whateley students for patent infringement...mhalpern wrote:
She also hasnt been shown to be good with money, you know beyond being a cyberpath, and while her "twin" Paige (Cyberkitty) is at Whateley, she isn'tAnne wrote: Financier is Petra (I think that is her name...?) Or is it her code name? She is the one in the insanity series in gen 1... There is a reasonably good chance she could be hermaphroditic...
The evidence keeps mounting that the most likely candidate to be Financier is Ayla... Of course all that evidence could be a red herring intended to lead the audience to an incorrect conclusion!
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No matter who it is, they've gone down a rather dark path if it is one of the Gen 1 POV characters. I expect there is quite a story in that.
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Based on what I've written so far about Financier, The Directorate, and so on, I'm intrigued by your thinking. I'm genuinely interested in what led you to that conclusion.Schol-R-LEA wrote: No matter who it is, they've gone down a rather dark path if it is one of the Gen 1 POV characters. I expect there is quite a story in that.
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Schol-R-LEA wrote: My own thoughts about who aside from Ayla might be Financier are David Goodkind (or whatever name she ends up using) or Fina Valocco.
No matter who it is, they've gone down a rather dark path if it is one of the Gen 1 POV characters. I expect there is quite a story in that.
Not dark i dont think, the Financier is pragmatic, but Ayla has always been pragmatic, as for making an example of the patent thief, that's a matter of protecting the Neutrality, and could be separate from the directorate
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I think that they are judging by the number of shady characters that financier seems to be involved with such as the one who forced Laura's mutation.elrodw wrote:
Based on what I've written so far about Financier, The Directorate, and so on, I'm intrigued by your thinking. I'm genuinely interested in what led you to that conclusion.Schol-R-LEA wrote: No matter who it is, they've gone down a rather dark path if it is one of the Gen 1 POV characters. I expect there is quite a story in that.
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mhalpern wrote:
null0trooper wrote:
Malady wrote: Okay, yeah, no way Financier is not Ayla.
Reasons why Financier is likely Ayla:
Whateley Alum
very expensive tastes in coffee
Appears female whilst SO recently had a baby (there are other ways of course, and other characters that are similarly equipped.)
Age implies Gen 1 student,
financial skills
uses obscure literary references
and uses quite thorough investigative resources
now if it wasn't for #3 and we didn't already know where these characters were, that list may include Jadis and Tansy, but both of them are accounted for, but 3 combined with the rest, narrows it down
You forgot the most compelling argument.
'The ringtone was of an obscure, but generally reviled, rock band'
I also have been wondering why the name change (and how Ayla swung that after we have been told so often that it is almost impossible to get your official code name on the MID changed.
Given that the Goodkinds have all but disappeared when they were richer than most developing nations and more influential than all but a handful of countries, I can imagine there being a good reason for dropping that name.
Why the change in code name though... For a while I wondered if Phase did essentially the same that Hekate did. Shedding his identity to break the link to a certain vengeful demon. But then I figured that this would not work because then all the other connections between Ayla and this Financier should not exist either.
I guess this discussion belongs on the Financier character discussion though.
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You forgot the most compelling argument.
'The ringtone was of an obscure, but generally reviled, rock band'
I see her more of a Nickelback fan than Hanson or Spin Doctors.
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Erianaiel wrote: [
I also have been wondering why the name change (and how Ayla swung that after we have been told so often that it is almost impossible to get your official code name on the MID changed.
Given that the Goodkinds have all but disappeared when they were richer than most developing nations and more influential than all but a handful of countries, I can imagine there being a good reason for dropping that name.
Why the change in code name though... For a while I wondered if Phase did essentially the same that Hekate did. Shedding his identity to break the link to a certain vengeful demon. But then I figured that this would not work because then all the other connections between Ayla and this Financier should not exist either.
I guess this discussion belongs on the Financier character discussion though.
It's mentioned a few times that it isn't impossible for Whateley students to get their codename changed for a variety of reasons, until they graduate, then it gets much more difficult, however the reason is probably a bit less foreboding than that, simply because Ayla chose to go with the name that reflected most of his activities, alternatively Phase could still be on the MID, with either Financier or Phase as an official alias
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Look at the supervillain's from Bek's stories.
Some of them have multiple alias's, or persona's ( if you want to use the Stanislavsky-an description...

It's a possibility that Ayla may be Financier, but that's just one of his persona's, of which he has several for use in appropriate occasions.
Another idea: As Bek's SV's tend to use this approach, and, as they all went to Whateley, is it possible that what we are seeing is a set of technique's that are taught in a second year Winter Term class?
As the audience, we just haven't seen that class take place yet...

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1. Ayla used that time-tested tool to grease bureaucratic machines: money. Not necessarily in anything as crass as bribes -- money buys very expensive lawyers, you know.
2. It's not Ayla, and the canon authors have been having fun dangling red herrings in front of our noses.
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Sir Lee wrote: Two other ideas:
2. It's not Ayla, and the canon authors have been having fun dangling red herrings in front of our noses.
We would NEVER even consider doing something like that! Would we?

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elrodw wrote:
Sir Lee wrote: Two other ideas:
2. It's not Ayla, and the canon authors have been having fun dangling red herrings in front of our noses.
We would NEVER even consider doing something like that! Would we?
There's red herrings and there's left field if we aren't past the red herring point, we are very close
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