Question The Micro-Scenes Discussion thread

And now I am imagining Abby going into a foster home. Or perhaps the same orphanage that took in Sola Flare ...

Schol-R-LEA wrote: And now I am imagining Abby going into a foster home. The same one that took in Sola Flare...

Who??

Sorry, I'd forgotten to put a link in; I was putting it in while you were posting. Here's two to make up for that:

Little Miss Badass at work

Man, I wish I didn't have to deal with the 'rents right now.. Oh, sorry, Sola

DanZilla wrote:

Jarjaross wrote: It's always been my opinion that after sending the jewel away the influence it had over the previous owner faded. Once it was faded enough they didn't want it back and broke contact.

So... you're thinking the jewel itself had the collar commissioned through controlling the previous possessor?

Not quite. you'll note the power only fills her when she is in contact with the gem. I think that the jewel's previous owner wanted a way to wear it so that they would always have the power if they needed it. But after sending it off it stopped affecting their mind (after withdrawal symptoms) and then they didn't want it back (assuming the withdrawal didn't kill them).

Wyverntamer, you left off the "dun dun dun..."

Valentine wrote: Wyverntamer, you left off the "dun dun dun..."

That will come sometime later, when I expand exactly why Circe is so scared of her adopted son. And one-time lover...

Wyverntamer wrote:

Valentine wrote: Wyverntamer, you left off the "dun dun dun..."

That will come sometime later, when I expand exactly why Circe is so scared of her adopted son. And one-time lover...

ah, it's one of Those families.

Wyverntamer wrote: That will come sometime later, when I expand exactly why Circe is so scared of her adopted son. And one-time lover...

Umm. Even with the punctuation, that all sounds very "rural".

Arcanist Lupus wrote:

Wyverntamer wrote:

Valentine wrote: Wyverntamer, you left off the "dun dun dun..."

That will come sometime later, when I expand exactly why Circe is so scared of her adopted son. And one-time lover...

ah, it's one of Those families.

Actually, it isn't, there is a reasonable explanation for that, namely, he is a very unique legacy power/experiment by a GOO

Phoenix Spiritus wrote:

Wyverntamer wrote: That will come sometime later, when I expand exactly why Circe is so scared of her adopted son. And one-time lover...

Umm. Even with the punctuation, that all sounds very "rural".

Umm. What? I don't understand what you mean by this.

Domoviye that is a VERY disturbing power

Wyverntamer wrote:

Phoenix Spiritus wrote:

Wyverntamer wrote: That will come sometime later, when I expand exactly why Circe is so scared of her adopted son. And one-time lover...

Umm. Even with the punctuation, that all sounds very "rural".

Umm. What? I don't understand what you mean by this.

It sounds like Circe and her adopted son were romantically involved. A bit like an inbred family.

mhalpern wrote: Domoviye that is a VERY disturbing power

Very disturbing. You can see why I wanted it out of my head.

Domoviye wrote:

Wyverntamer wrote:

Phoenix Spiritus wrote:

Wyverntamer wrote: That will come sometime later, when I expand exactly why Circe is so scared of her adopted son. And one-time lover...

Umm. Even with the punctuation, that all sounds very "rural".

Umm. What? I don't understand what you mean by this.

It sounds like Circe and her adopted son were romantically involved. A bit like an inbred family.

Ah, no, Adam's power is to manifest willing spirits of the dead outside his body, his family's legacy is that he was an experiment by a GOO, which killed the GOO, almost completely, the GOO was absorbed into the force it created, and also made them able to access the memories from their ancestors and anyone who died of unnatural causes (other than age and age related sickness), one of his ancestors had a relation with Circe.

Schol-R-LEA wrote: "What the Hell just happened?" Bruce said nervously.

"I don't know!" cried Thulia, "One moment we're getting ready for that all-appendages meeting, and the next, it's total Pandemonium!"

@Schol-R-LEA

Okay, you said:

Sasakl Kaori

waremete.wikia.com/wiki/Kaori_Sasaki

Sasaki Ami gets me no hits.

Are they Powered??

So, obviously Lez couple, and recently married, else she'd not be embarrassed/shocked by the question...

Or she'd bi and in one of the stable Triang Relations...

What's she doing talking to Concierge??

Malady wrote: waremete.wikia.com/wiki/Kaori_Sasaki

No, though the Astronomy Club connection is right, which makes me think that the authors of Ushinawareta Mirai o Motomete may have given her that name as a deliberate reference to Azumanga Daioh (the series these characters are from). I'm not familiar with UMOM, though, so I can't say.

You won't get any hits on Sasaki-sempai's first name, or Kaori's last name (and she was better known in the manga and anime by the nickname Kaorin, anyway), since neither were given in the original series. Kaorin was a minor character in the manga (which was a four-panel joke-a-day series most of the time, hence the highly episodic nature of the anime), but got promoted to a minor but still more important role in the animated series. She was mostly there as comic relief, crushing on the awe-inspiring (but actually painfully shy) Sasaki but lacking the courage to tell her.

Sasaki, for her own part, had a reputation for being a roughhousing troublemaker, simply because she was naturally athletic and taller than all the others - male and female - in the class, but in reality she was a gentle, quiet animal lover who collects plushies and wouldn't hurt a fly. Most of the fans agreed that if she ever noticed Kaorin's interest in her, the sheer cuteness of it would win her heart.

I wasn't thinking of them as being mutants or empowered, but it really wouldn't make a difference.

EDIT: @Domo

Hmm. Well, she's gotta go for the Implant route at somepoint, but the problem with that is the need for medical expertise? ... Find a power mimic stone, capture a gadg/dev, or something, and force them to do the implant? And then kill them so it's irreversable?

... She's a girl, so she could implant it in her womb/uterus. IIRC, those are the same thing? And is the only place in a human body that you could stick something and not compromise anything? Well, other than your unborn kids, but if you're gonna stick stones in your uterus for your power, you don't really care about having kids at that point, do you? Unless you want to birth a kid and have then inherit the stone, of course... ... And then body swap like Grandpa Waite for immortality?? Needs to be a daughter though...

EDIT:

Hmm... Titanium, gotta make sure it can't be removed... ... How are her finances ATM? She fired her worker...

Power Armor or Cyborging? So many, many things you can do with titanium...

Malady wrote: EDIT: @Domo

Hmm. Well, she's gotta go for the Implant route at somepoint, but the problem with that is the need for medical expertise? ... Find a power mimic stone, capture a gadg/dev, or something, and force them to do the implant? And then kill them so it's irreversable?

... She's a girl, so she could implant it in her womb/uterus. IIRC, those are the same thing? And is the only place in a human body that you could stick something and not compromise anything? Well, other than your unborn kids, but if you're gonna stick stones in your uterus for your power, you don't really care about having kids at that point, do you? Unless you want to birth a kid and have then inherit the stone, of course... ... And then body swap like Grandpa Waite for immortality?? Needs to be a daughter though...

EDIT:

Hmm... Titanium, gotta make sure it can't be removed... ... How are her finances ATM? She fired her worker...

Power Armor or Cyborging? So many, many things you can do with titanium...

You're idea is disturbing me.
Please continue.

Domoviye wrote: You're idea is disturbing me.
Please continue.

Aaaand ladies and gentlemen, I give you the definitive Domoviye!

Phoenix Spiritus wrote:

Domoviye wrote: You're idea is disturbing me.
Please continue.

Aaaand ladies and gentlemen, I give you the definitive Domoviye!

I actually have malady topped for the situation. Just the thought of having a baby growing around the stone is a little more squicky, while mine is more disturbing.

Domoviye wrote:

Phoenix Spiritus wrote:

Domoviye wrote: You're idea is disturbing me.
Please continue.

Aaaand ladies and gentlemen, I give you the definitive Domoviye!

I actually have malady topped for the situation. Just the thought of having a baby growing around the stone is a little more squicky, while mine is more disturbing.

Well, the stone could replace an organ, most likely the brain, for revivals of the personality in the stone? Or heart, or something, and have baby constantly fighting against the stone for body control or something?

And/Or turns the baby into Catperson. ... Claw out of woman???

Most likely not consistent: Turns the Baby into Living Stone Catperson Statue.

Dom already did the Alien thing with the original Tink.

Valentine wrote: Dom already did the Alien thing with the original Tink.

True. And I should know!

... Do you got anything to contribute to the squick pile? 'Cause I seem to have lost my edge... And not wanting to give away anything if I want to be original, I think...

But really, me worrying about idea theft is a bit silly, given how many I have...

Why isn't this obvious to anyone else?

The gem is a cat's eye gem, clearly she is going to rip out her own eye and put the gem in its place.

Her flesh will then heal around it until it she can move it like a normal eye.

Jarjaross wrote: Why isn't this obvious to anyone else?

The gem is a cat's eye gem, clearly she is going to rip out her own eye and put the gem in its place.

Her flesh will then heal around it until it she can move it like a normal eye.

... I think it was so obvious that I thought about it and then discarded the idea in favor of more interesting options?? Unless it was too obvious or something?

Also, ripping out someone's eye is ... Is that harder, or easier than ripping off the gorget or whatever she's gonna make?

Also, also, I was like: "Sam's gonna eventually get Rose to do the Gem Implantation, or Rose is involved somehow, as she's the Techie of the Domoviye 4. ... Perhaps Rose is the next host for Sam's mind, so she can get Tech knowledge with Gem, and then can do the implantation herself, for a given value of 'herself' ... ... Involve the other 2 as hosts or something?"

Malady wrote:

Jarjaross wrote: Why isn't this obvious to anyone else?

The gem is a cat's eye gem, clearly she is going to rip out her own eye and put the gem in its place.

Her flesh will then heal around it until it she can move it like a normal eye.

... I think it was so obvious that I thought about it and then discarded the idea in favor of more interesting options?? Unless it was too obvious or something?

Also, ripping out someone's eye is ... Is that harder, or easier than ripping off the gorget or whatever she's gonna make?

Also, also, I was like: "Sam's gonna eventually get Rose to do the Gem Implantation, or Rose is involved somehow, as she's the Techie of the Domoviye 4. ... Perhaps Rose is the next host for Sam's mind, so she can get Tech knowledge with Gem, and then can do the implantation herself, for a given value of 'herself' ... ... Involve the other 2 as hosts or something?"

OK JarJar, that's about as disturbing as my idea, and as squicky as Malady's uterus, power gem baby thing.
Congratulations you win the thread award.

Malady, that's just confusing, please continue to amuse me.

Domoviye wrote:

Malady wrote: Also, also, I was like: "Sam's gonna eventually get Rose to do the Gem Implantation, or Rose is involved somehow, as she's the Techie of the Domoviye 4. ... Perhaps Rose is the next host for Sam's mind, so she can get Tech knowledge with Gem, and then can do the implantation herself, for a given value of 'herself' ... ... Involve the other 2 as hosts or something?"

Malady, that's just confusing, please continue to amuse me.

Confusion isn't good. ... I mean like having Marni and ... Whatever Miss Powerful's name is, as other hosts for Sam's mind, but that seems random, 'cause it's not like she'll need their powers for the Implantation plot.

... Why are we assuming that the stone needs to stay? Why not have it dissolve into the skin and release on death or something? Other than Whateley Power Gems just don't work like that. ... Which is the only objection, really...

Was going with cat power ideas and got, which I thought was kitties, not puppies:



... Speaking of cats... Bast. ... Wonder how she's related to the Catgirl transform, as she's the goddess of cats...

If you're gonna implant stuff into yourself to keep them from being stolen, Ebidium would prevent Warper grabs... But, it blocks magic... And is super-heavy... So coating the stone in Ebid. and implanting it is just gonna give you, like pressure wounds or something from having a super-heavy object in your body... And in the uterus... Ugh... I can imagine it dropping out in like a fistula, and that's just gross. A fistula is a hole in the body... Don't look it up. Ugh... How's that for squick? ... And trying to one-up on squick is a stupid idea... So let's do something else.... Random WMG... Gonna do a more relevant one next time.

Thinking of other Gem Implants... Doggirl Stone... Perhaps as other eye, if you're gonna stick them in your eyes... Would they even work together or cancel out, or merge, etc... We've still not got enough info on Catgirl Stone's origin to speculate from Reason of Creation to Methods of Operation, and a total inability to speculate about its uniqueness...

... If the stone merges with a body and releases on death... The buyer was a male relative of the previous owner? ... But, that needs that antecedent first...

And turning the user into a stone statue is even more random WMG.

If your going to be calling me Jarjar (I prefer Jar) then you have to imagine everything I just posted in Jarjarbinks' voice.

Domoviye wrote: Malady, that's just confusing, please continue to amuse me.

Concentrating totally, he listened to an earpiece cupped to his ear, before with a sigh he took it out of his ear and rolled it back up, inserting it into the case before him. "Time," he instructed shortly, quickly closing the case and stowing it, before standing and pulling another case out onto the small table before him.

"You're sure?" his partner asked, quickly taking his feet off the same table, sitting up and putting the book he was reading away neatly.

"Yes," the first replied, opening the case and starting to assemble an unusual gun. "He's letting his ... amusement show."

"And that means?"

"Well my son, it means we as his servents need to assist him."

"Ahh, assist him?" The young man asked puzzled, freezing still as he looked up at his father in trepidation.

Snapping together the last of the gun, the older man started examining it carefully from all angles, especially taking the time to confirm the action and the trigger. "As you continue in service," the man explained setting his gun down carefully on the table and reaching up to bring down a smaller box. "You will find that the most important task of a servant is to preserve the respect, dignity and magisty of the masters."

"And that means?" the son asked worriedly.

Carefully examining the box in his hand, paying particular attention to the state of its seal and its use-by date, the older man smiled. Revelled in all his glory was the wolf hiding in sheeps clothing. "It means my son," the revealed wolf gloated snapping the seal on the box and removing a dart and carefully inserting it into his gun. "That you will be providing a distraction, while I shall be making sure that our young master enjoys a full nights sleep."

Striding forth, the trank gun professionally nestled is his arms, the wolf-like elder man set off with glee.

Additional:

Preg!Sam 'cause Adren. + Hedon. + sex was part of memory dump... So she's horny when she goes out??

How does transform actually react to cyborging???

What happens if Lycanthropy.

Jarjaross wrote: If your going to be calling me Jarjar (I prefer Jar) then you have to imagine everything I just posted in Jarjarbinks' voice.

Sorry blame my iPad spell checker.

Drat, I was hoping for more groaning out of the Thulia micro. Or is everyone just immune to that sort of punnishment?

It was happily groan worthy, didn't really know what to say so I just gave a thank you.

Malady wrote: Hmm. Well, she's gotta go for the Implant route at somepoint, but the problem with that is the need for medical expertise?

"Need" is a strong word, and it's not like this is a cautious, sensible person we're talking about.

Malady wrote: ... Find a power mimic stone, capture a gadg/dev, or something, and force them to do the implant? And then kill them so it's irreversable?

Killing them would only hide the knowledge of the implant, not make it irreversible.

Malady wrote: ... She's a girl, so she could implant it in her womb/uterus. IIRC, those are the same thing? And is the only place in a human body that you could stick something and not compromise anything?

There's no need to place it inside an organ. It's just a gem, and humans are squishy.

My assumption is that she intends to make a permanent band or chain around her abdomen so it can't be removed by mundane means without cutting the titanium, breaking her hips, or just cutting her in half. I'm not sure how such a belt would be disturbing though. Maybe if it was a chastity belt, but why would it be? The only reason I can think of to do that would be as an alibi if the belt gets noticed.

She's a jeweler, so maybe it's going to be an extreme piercing or something. Not as secure as a perma-belt, but possibly less obnoxious depending on implementation.

Kettlekorn wrote:

Malady wrote: Hmm. Well, she's gotta go for the Implant route at somepoint, but the problem with that is the need for medical expertise?

"Need" is a strong word, and it's not like this is a cautious, sensible person we're talking about.

True, but self-preservation sort of demands some sort of medical expertise?

Kettlekorn wrote:

Malady wrote: ... Find a power mimic stone, capture a gadg/dev, or something, and force them to do the implant? And then kill them so it's irreversable?

Killing them would only hide the knowledge of the implant, not make it irreversible.

True. ... But secrecy is pretty high on the ways to not get depowered...

Kettlekorn wrote:

Malady wrote: ... She's a girl, so she could implant it in her womb/uterus. IIRC, those are the same thing? And is the only place in a human body that you could stick something and not compromise anything?

There's no need to place it inside an organ. It's just a gem, and humans are squishy.

My assumption is that she intends to make a permanent band or chain around her abdomen so it can't be removed by mundane means without cutting the titanium, breaking her hips, or just cutting her in half. I'm not sure how such a belt would be disturbing though. Maybe if it was a chastity belt, but why would it be? The only reason I can think of to do that would be as an alibi if the belt gets noticed.

She's a jeweler, so maybe it's going to be an extreme piercing or something. Not as secure as a perma-belt, but possibly less obnoxious depending on implementation.

Well, perhaps I'm overestimating how much she wants to keep the gem on her person... We'll just have to wait!

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EDIT (Didn't read the latest Micro yet...): OH! Right! Since Marni's a thief, I had the idea that Marni would steal the Stone!

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EDIT (Read the micro): ... Hmm... Marni's an EX, IIRC... And EX-es get more teen preg... Marni's preggers now? ... Hmm... Is the big story gonna be Gen2, with the kids of the 4? Like, massive Decoy Protag. thing??

Marni is an energizer only.

Ah, Johnson frying on the cards then.

She's an internal energizer, if she isn't careful she'll crush it instead.

Domoviye wrote: She's an internal energizer, if she isn't careful she'll crush it instead.

I was briefly inspired to write an ER scene around this premise, but then I remember how entertainingly/horrifyingly common those sorts of injuries are in real life ERs, and I decided against it.

Arcanist Lupus wrote:

Domoviye wrote: She's an internal energizer, if she isn't careful she'll crush it instead.

I was briefly inspired to write an ER scene around this premise, but then I remember how entertainingly/horrifyingly common those sorts of injuries are in real life ERs, and I decided against it.

Doesn't she just have speed boost? ... Have we seen any internal ENG with only speed/strength?

And she has to purposely activate her power? Then again, high stress sitch = power incont, perhaps.

Malady wrote:

Arcanist Lupus wrote:

Domoviye wrote: She's an internal energizer, if she isn't careful she'll crush it instead.

I was briefly inspired to write an ER scene around this premise, but then I remember how entertainingly/horrifyingly common those sorts of injuries are in real life ERs, and I decided against it.

Doesn't she just have speed boost? ... Have we seen any internal ENG with only speed/strength?

And she has to purposely activate her power? Then again, high stress sitch = power incont, perhaps.

She gets enhanced speed, strength, agility, reaction time and senses. Remember she ripped the door off of her room by accident and tossed a basketball about a block right into a garbage can. That's countered by only having a small internal battery.
And yes, there are internal ENG who are purely physical, speedsters for one.

The phenomenon of penile damage from vaginal muscle constriction is mentioned in canon (in SLPB), so it is entirely possible.

Dom, I thought you were above writing self-insert fanfiction!

Arcanist Lupus wrote: Dom, I thought you were above writing self-insert fanfiction!

That was awful .

So, the stone is now right below the breastbone? And now Sam's sort of armored? ... I wonder what the enhanced Gem's powers will be like...

Likely that's all normal silver, 'cause else that'd be a lot of Mithril.

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I was wondering why we don't have trope pages for Whateley Fic. ... Does anyone mind if I start some?

Malady wrote: I was wondering why we don't have trope pages for Whateley Fic. ... Does anyone mind if I start some?

You mean one like the one that's been on TVtropes for the past four years , and has been listed under Trope Overdosed for three?

EDIT: Four years, not six as I originally wrote, my bad. It was created on 15 April 2012, according to the page history. My understanding is that the reason it was put under 'Literature' was because they hadn't created the 'Web Original' index yet, and someone (I don't know who) was putting WU stuff under several different sections - mainly the 'Web Comics' and 'Fan Fiction' indices - with little rhyme or reason, and without creating a page for the series itself, which led to a huge backlash against the troper in question.

Oh, and as for the Drinking Game page, mea culpa. OTGH, I don't know who it was that was potholing the names of every WU character to the entry for 'Mary Sue' in every trope page that linked to the series page, but most of those have been fixed, anyway.

Schol-R-LEA wrote:

Malady wrote: I was wondering why we don't have trope pages for Whateley Fic. ... Does anyone mind if I start some?

You mean one like the one that's been on TVtropes for the past four years?

EDIT: Four years, not six as I originally wrote, my bad. It was created on 15 April 2012, according to the page history. My understanding is that the reason it was put under 'Literature' was because they hadn't created the 'Web Original' index yet, and someone (I don't know who) was putting WU stuff under several different sections - mainly the 'Web Comics' and 'Fan Fiction' indices - with little rhyme or reason, and without creating a page for the series itself, which led to a huge backlash against the troper in question.

... I knew I should have clarified... I meant for Whateley Fanfics. Like Tink, and Timeout and so on. We don't even have one for Tansy Running High, and that's like, one of the ones that isn't on this site. It's not even part of my Sig archives. I had to make a personal copy with:

fanfictiondownloader.net/

www.fanfiction.net/s/8722425/1/Tansy-Running-High

I saw you in the History...

Okay, TRH might have been in the old forums? Can't remember... Maybe being hyperbolic...

I dunno... there's a lot of Whateley-bashing on TVtropes already (I mentioned the 'Mary Sue' thing, though I was editing the post when you posted so I don't know if you saw that), adding the tropes for WU fanfic would probably burn whatever good will we still have there.

I mean, if you think it's worth it, sure, but I would post it in the 'Fan Fiction' sections of the trope pages, rather than with the rest of the series. Or did you mean a separate subordinate page for WU fanfic, attached to the main series page?

Schol-R-LEA wrote: I dunno... there's a lot of Whateley-bashing on TVtropes already (I mentioned the 'Mary Sue' thing, though I was editing the post when you posted so I don't know if you saw that), adding the tropes for WU fanfic would probably burn whatever good will we still have there.

Yeah, I heard about the historical bashing.

Well, Headscratchers had been unedited in about a year before I decided to clarify that PhoenixS was working on Hank.

YMMV's a bit infrequent...

Should we move this to its own thread?

Fridge has been dead for almost 2 years...

... Have you seen any evidence for Whateley-bashing recently?

...I'm on a works-making kick due to remembering There's No Such Thing As Notability, and felt like adding things, that are either historical, or relatively popular in some manner. Like Baum's The Master Key , and Tanya Grotter .

... And the Whateley-verse reviews are 4+ years out of date... And they aren't linked from the main article...

... Is Whateley larger than Global Guardians PBEM Universe??

That's a good point; for the most part, it does seem to have died down.

Shouldn't that have been the Blu-Ray version of the show?

Hmmmm, I wonder how many people want Cerulea to autograph their copies of The Smurfs. (As an aside, how many people knew the Smurfs were invented in 1958 and their first "movie" was released in 1965?)

I'll be going now.

Malady wrote: So, the stone is now right below the breastbone? And now Sam's sort of armored? ... I wonder what the enhanced Gem's powers will be like...

Likely that's all normal silver, 'cause else that'd be a lot of Mithril.

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I was wondering why we don't have trope pages for Whateley Fic. ... Does anyone mind if I start some?

The stone is on the left hand side just under the ribs. And she only has brands in the shape of runes.
Also its Mithril. She used up the whole supply and its like a millimeter thick, in five smallish runes.

Bergy, that boy has a great future in survival. And a far greater chance at having a peaceful school life. He's probably the luckiest character with a POV yet.

Schol-R-LEA, ouch. Just ouch.

@Schol-R-LEA - So, presumably that boy's gonna live, right? Get him to Doyle quickly, and heal him up... Note that while the Don got an AssShove, he had EX-4 to help him survive... Meaning ~Regen-2...

And DVDs are SHARP ... Err... Sharp. ... So I'd think that in Canon, they wouldn't be so callous... But, hey, this is crack fic, have sadism if you want, I guess?

If I/we are going to make Works pages for Whateley Fanfics... We need names... I guess the Domoverse is everything that involves Tink and stuff? Like in the Old Forum? And the current 4 line series is Name Pending? Lol.

Malady wrote:
If I/we are going to make Works pages for Whateley Fanfics... We need names... I guess the Domoverse is everything that involves Tink and stuff? Like in the Old Forum? And the current 4 line series is Name Pending? Lol.

Pretty much. I'd focus on the ones in the published fanfic here first. If you need help just ask.

Domoviye wrote:

Malady wrote:
If I/we are going to make Works pages for Whateley Fanfics... We need names... I guess the Domoverse is everything that involves Tink and stuff? Like in the Old Forum? And the current 4 line series is Name Pending? Lol.

Pretty much. I'd focus on the ones in the published fanfic here first. If you need help just ask.

Well, I've started the page... tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Fanfic/Domoverse

I need a way to describe the 'verse as a whole, as all it's got right now is a name, links to your profiles, story links, and Cyberpath for Glitch...

And I need to remember to Crosslink back from Tropes pages...

You could have a Creator page under your real name and promote your book there... Just a thought. ... ... How far did the notice on Published writers get, anyway? Would the Cabal (TINCC) get more notice for their writings via pages there?? But, hey, it's not like writing's their job... Perhaps you might want to put your book there, Domo?

Self: Why are you so focused on advertising, anyway?? Weird.

whateleyacademy.net/index.php/published

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Trying to find a trope for that envious bigot of Light in the Dark ... And, there's the Blind Test trope, right? The handwavy thing... Where are you... You don't exist. Joy. ... And no SugarRush trope either?

No Periods, Period... I think is averted somewhere... ... Tink doesn't have periods... I think... That raises (many) questions...

Domo, that got progressively more disturbing, the bracelets and anklets were bad enough...

mhalpern wrote: Domo, that got progressively more disturbing, the bracelets and anklets were bad enough...

I said it was disturbing before I posted it.
And hey who the heck is going to consider digging under the runes for the stone? They'll steal the jewelry first at worst breaking her hands and feet which can heal. Letting her live to fight another day and keep the stone.

Domoviye wrote:

mhalpern wrote: Domo, that got progressively more disturbing, the bracelets and anklets were bad enough...

I said it was disturbing before I posted it.
And hey who the heck is going to consider digging under the runes for the stone? They'll steal the jewelry first at worst breaking her hands and feet which can heal. Letting her live to fight another day and keep the stone.

Well not a lot can get that titanium off, it might be easier to amputate. Over time her skin might grow over the titanium because it's cutting into her skin

mhalpern wrote:

Domoviye wrote:

mhalpern wrote: Domo, that got progressively more disturbing, the bracelets and anklets were bad enough...

I said it was disturbing before I posted it.
And hey who the heck is going to consider digging under the runes for the stone? They'll steal the jewelry first at worst breaking her hands and feet which can heal. Letting her live to fight another day and keep the stone.

Well not a lot can get that titanium off, it might be easier to amputate. Over time her skin might grow over the titanium because it's cutting into her skin

It only cut her skin going over the ankle bone and grated against the knuckles. Once past those protrusions they fit quite well. So unless she suddenly bulks up, there's no problem with the titanium and the skin.
Also unless they use very high powered rifles, taking her down will be hard. The power required will make ripping the titanium off of her either by breaking the metal or simply pulling them of by breaking some bones easier then cutting her. She's a mystical cat lady, she's pretty tough.

Marni's really getting into the idea of being a thief! Good for her! Don't dwell on the past! Focus on the present!

Okay, she's KO'd, fallout from an attack that wasn't focused on her? Or was it focused on her? Hmm...

If she's also gonna be kidnapped, I'm sensing a pattern of protags being kidnapped, that I also expect to be subverted at some point...

She is doing well on the street. She's got the talent and stubbornness to survive.
As for what happened to her, you'll have to wait for the main story.

Domoviye wrote: you'll have to wait for the main story.

So all the lines have ended?

Malady wrote:

Domoviye wrote: you'll have to wait for the main story.

So all the lines have ended?

Samantha has one more scene. But then its done.
Theres a bit of a hold up on the main story, I'll have it posted as soon as possible.

Haven't been commenting in here a lot lately, need to fix that. But Cryptic, you took a strange idea and rolled with it perfectly with that last micro-scene.

Dreamer wrote: Haven't been commenting in here a lot lately, need to fix that. But Cryptic, you took a strange idea and rolled with it perfectly with that last micro-scene.

Thanks. Got a little more planned for those characters. Just need to hammer out a few things before I post the next bit.

Space story! Wooo!

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Hmm... Only bound 3/4 limbs... Is the fight over??

Malady wrote: Space story! Wooo!

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Hmm... Only bound 3/4 limbs... Is the fight over??

Yup, figured we needed another.

As for is the fight over... Eh not really. Guy's either a power stone user or a Dyna host. Haven't quiet decided.

I found the MLP-style names particularly funny. "Afterglow Sparkle"... is that an innuendo?

Sir Lee wrote: I found the MLP-style names particularly funny. "Afterglow Sparkle"... is that an innuendo?

But don't you SEE? That's the whole deadly insidious, underhanded EVIL of it! These vile, ruthless, vicious desperadoes are cute, cuddly candy-colored eqquiforms! When they realize the effect that their appearances have on the local bipeds, the Earth is DOOMED!

Bek D Corbin wrote:

Sir Lee wrote: I found the MLP-style names particularly funny. "Afterglow Sparkle"... is that an innuendo?

But don't you SEE? That's the whole deadly insidious, underhanded EVIL of it! These vile, ruthless, vicious desperadoes are cute, cuddly candy-colored eqquiforms! When they realize the effect that their appearances have on the local bipeds, the Earth is DOOMED!

@Sir Lee; I honestly took a thesaurus, looked up the MLP characters names and got the ones I used. I didn't use the full name I came up with for Pikie Pie's doppelganger; Superfluous Digit Three Point One Four Five.

@Bek; God I hope not. I also hope Wondercute never runs into them.

Cryptic wrote: Pinkie Pie's doppelganger; Superfluous Digit Three Point One Four Five.

Thank you, I needed a good laugh/groan right now. Now you just need to have two law officers from their world - I'm thinking 'Concord' and 'Crepuscular Gleam' - to show up to save the day.

Schol-R-LEA wrote:

Cryptic wrote: Pinkie Pie's doppelganger; Superfluous Digit Three Point One Four Five.

Thank you, I needed a good laugh/groan right now. Now you just need to have two law officers from their world - I'm thinking 'Concord' and 'Approaching-Night Gleam' - to show up to save the day.

I am pleased I could be of service.

Where did Kodiak promise TLWs Alpha membership?

In "Even Murphy's Law has Its Loopholes", part 3 . He inadvertently made a Sorcerer's Contract with Palantir, agreeing to make all three of them Alphas the next year (not expecting to have to uphold the promise, as was supposed to have graduated by then) in exchange for help finding Ms. Grimes' office in the Mystic Arts department.

Isn't there a thing that says that Sorcerer's Contracts make themselves able to be fulfilled, when Nacht confronts Marzena or whatever her name is.

Ah. Yes. Here whateleyacademy.net/index.php/original-t...lent-nacht-chapter-5 :

But once it's sealed, the very Threads of Fate itself will work to enforce the wording of the pact, in the most effective way possible.

Schol-R-LEA wrote: In "Even Murphy's Law has Its Loopholes", part 3 . He inadvertently made a Sorcerer's Contract with Palantir, agreeing to make all three of them Alphas the next year (not expecting to have to uphold the promise, as was supposed to have graduated by then) in exchange for help finding Ms. Grimes' office in the Mystic Arts department.

If you reread what Wyatt said, you will realize that it is highly unlikely to happen.

Murphy's Rules wrote: “Irene,” he said finally in his most reasonable tone. “I’m afraid the rules of the club don’t let me allow in Freshmen, let alone Sub-Freshmen. But, I tell you what. For you three, I’ll make an exception. Come to the Rush Party when you’re all Freshmen and come see me and I’ll pin you in myself. How’s that?”

Emphasis mine.

The problem is that they all won't be Freshman, one is in 7th grade, and the others are in 8th.

Valentine wrote:

Schol-R-LEA wrote: In "Even Murphy's Law has Its Loopholes", part 3 . He inadvertently made a Sorcerer's Contract with Palantir, agreeing to make all three of them Alphas the next year (not expecting to have to uphold the promise, as was supposed to have graduated by then) in exchange for help finding Ms. Grimes' office in the Mystic Arts department.

If you reread what Wyatt said, you will realize that it is highly unlikely to happen.

Murphy's Rules wrote: “Irene,” he said finally in his most reasonable tone. “I’m afraid the rules of the club don’t let me allow in Freshmen, let alone Sub-Freshmen. But, I tell you what. For you three, I’ll make an exception. Come to the Rush Party when you’re all Freshmen and come see me and I’ll pin you in myself. How’s that?”

Emphasis mine.

The problem is that they all won't be Freshman, one is in 7th grade, and the others are in 8th.

Hmm... How much nudging can those Threads of Fate apply?? Hmm... ... Can a Sorcerer's Contract be annulled by a dearth of magical power? Or by fighting the Bastard or something? So Kodiak doesn't have to stay a 3rd year? Or he issues orders for the TLW to be added to the Alphas for the next year, and his Contract is fulfilled that way?

Oh, wait. You mean that the Contract is invalid. Oh.

Malady wrote:

Valentine wrote:

Schol-R-LEA wrote: In "Even Murphy's Law has Its Loopholes", part 3 . He inadvertently made a Sorcerer's Contract with Palantir, agreeing to make all three of them Alphas the next year (not expecting to have to uphold the promise, as was supposed to have graduated by then) in exchange for help finding Ms. Grimes' office in the Mystic Arts department.

If you reread what Wyatt said, you will realize that it is highly unlikely to happen.

Murphy's Rules wrote: “Irene,” he said finally in his most reasonable tone. “I’m afraid the rules of the club don’t let me allow in Freshmen, let alone Sub-Freshmen. But, I tell you what. For you three, I’ll make an exception. Come to the Rush Party when you’re all Freshmen and come see me and I’ll pin you in myself. How’s that?”

Emphasis mine.

The problem is that they all won't be Freshman, one is in 7th grade, and the others are in 8th.

Hmm... How much nudging can those Threads of Fate apply?? Hmm... ... Can a Sorcerer's Contract be annulled by a dearth of magical power? Or by fighting the Bastard or something? So Kodiak doesn't have to stay a 3rd year? Or he issues orders for the TLW to be added to the Alphas for the next year, and his Contract is fulfilled that way?

Oh, wait. You mean that the Contract is invalid. Oh.

Yep the contract is only valid if all three are Freshmen for the Rush Party. So unless two are held back, or the other promoted early, all three won't be Freshmen for the party.

RE: Cryptic's story, on KnowYourMeme I just came across a reference to the "Fallout: Equestria" fanfic series. The mind reels.

And Cody shouldn't be there either because he should've graduated. But all of a sudden he has repeat the year through no fault of his own. And you have trouble believing that somehow they have enough credits to skip a year?

You think that's air you're breathing?

E. E. Nalley wrote: And Cody shouldn't be there either because he should've graduated. But all of a sudden he has repeat the year through no fault of his own. And you have trouble believing that somehow they have enough credits to skip a year?

I'm having a hard time believing that the TLW have the required knowledge to skip a year...

Uhh... Nevermind? Abracadabra has the creds to take Winter Term's "Special Topics in Mathematics: Thaumaturgy, Numerology and Mystic Algebra" So that means she... something... We don't know the reqs for that course...

And they're at Whateley, instead of being tutored by some city mages for some reason. Self: Well, why do you think that is? Hmm? Perhaps they're actually pretty smart?

E. E. Nalley wrote: And Cody shouldn't be there either because he should've graduated. But all of a sudden he has repeat the year through no fault of his own. And you have trouble believing that somehow they have enough credits to skip a year?

You think that's air you're breathing?

Mostly I am saying it isn't set in stone. Cody has outs, if he can use them.

If you want to use the credits to skip years, Jade should be a junior, since she is getting both Jinn's and Jade's classes on her transcripts. And I think Ayla graduated the semester before she started. Billie and Nikki both "lost" grades Funny the STAR League Jr. kids didn't.

Whateley seems to be against the let people skip grades. Apparently there is one student that is working on his PhD, yet still has not gotten his High School Diploma (prior to 2007 graduation).

Valentine wrote:

E. E. Nalley wrote: And Cody shouldn't be there either because he should've graduated. But all of a sudden he has repeat the year through no fault of his own. And you have trouble believing that somehow they have enough credits to skip a year?

You think that's air you're breathing?

Mostly I am saying it isn't set in stone. Cody has outs, if he can use them.

If you want to use the credits to skip years, Jade should be a junior, since she is getting both Jinn's and Jade's classes on her transcripts. And I think Ayla graduated the semester before she started. Billie and Nikki both "lost" grades Funny the STAR League Jr. kids didn't.

Whateley seems to be against the let people skip grades. Apparently there is one student that is working on his PhD, yet still has not gotten his High School Diploma (prior to 2007 graduation).

Whateley's goal IS a bit different from your normal school... in a normal school the goal is to successfully graduate the students... and they might learn something along the way. (Yes, I'm over-simplifying) Whateley's goal is to educate the Mutant student in safely using their powers and surviving in society. To that end grade-placement is a bit fluid.

That might involve starting them over at Freshman, Holding them over past Senior, repeating grades, Shifting their grades elsewise if appropriate, Locking them in a box until the screaming stops... etc.

Hah! That was great, Elrod. Are you sure that you can't work that into canon somehow?

Seems we have a summer lull all-around the site - overall traffic is down, so comments are sparse. People need to enjoy their time off, vacations, drunken orgies, or whatever else they do to unwind during the summer. When y'all get back, I know y'all will read and enjoy (or not) - and comment. Seems hard to keep all y'all from commenting When you're here, that is.

"Remember, fellow students: Only YOU can prevent your untimely demise at my paws for messing with my duds."

elrodw wrote: People need to enjoy their time off, vacations, drunken orgies, or whatever else they do to unwind during the summer.

Scrounged together more money than I should have and upgraded my computer, which means it's now powerful enough to handle Fallout 4. So that has eaten a possibly unhealthy amount of my time over the last couple weeks. It's probably a good thing I don't really have a data plan, or I might also be trying out Pokemon Go right now...

Kettlekorn wrote: It's probably a good thing I don't really have a data plan, or I might also be trying out Pokemon Go right now...

Funny thing you should mention that. My son's Eagle Project is a Pokemon Go site, with info about it on the screen.

But - I don't see the point of getting outside to wander around looking at your cell phone and running into people, falling off curbs, stepping in doggie-doo, etc, etc. Of course, I'm an old fart who had to go outside and actually, you know, PLAY - because we didn't have any fancy electronic toys!

elrodw wrote: running into people, falling off curbs, stepping in doggie-doo, etc, etc.

And that is different from playing outside how, exactly?

Kettlekorn wrote:

elrodw wrote: running into people, falling off curbs, stepping in doggie-doo, etc, etc.

And that is different from playing outside how, exactly?

When you're not looking at a 6" screen, you've got a CHANCE of missing people and doggie doo

elrodw wrote:

Kettlekorn wrote:

elrodw wrote: running into people, falling off curbs, stepping in doggie-doo, etc, etc.

And that is different from playing outside how, exactly?

When you're not looking at a 6" screen, you've got a CHANCE of missing people and doggie doo

Cliffs.

Wow - the micro-scenes and discussion threads are so dead right now!

I knew my superpower was threadkill, but I didn't think it was THAT strong!

Well, I can't use Gateway as a portal gun, so that idea's out... ... There's so many Scenes that could be expanded... But, most likely the writers got their own ideas and stuff their they're working on.

Domoviye's got that big story... A Tink reboot-continuation-thing... And whatever else he's got going on... And he might be sick again or something...

"Threadkill" sounds so computery to me, like computational threads... And I finished Transistor months ago... ... Could rethink that Transistor Insert... Giant Techno-swords isn't impossible in Whateley...

All the ideas running through my head right now are things that may be written about by TINCC authors. A story of Jade and Ayla prior to going to France. Other stuff set in the summer or early in the school year.

Valentine wrote: All the ideas running through my head right now are things that may be written about by TINCC authors. A story of Jade and Ayla prior to going to France. Other stuff set in the summer or early in the school year.

like Ayla snogging Addy ...

elrodw wrote:

Valentine wrote: All the ideas running through my head right now are things that may be written about by TINCC authors. A story of Jade and Ayla prior to going to France. Other stuff set in the summer or early in the school year.

like Ayla snogging Addy ...

You're using British slang to describe events between an American boy and a French girl?

Valentine wrote:

elrodw wrote:

Valentine wrote: All the ideas running through my head right now are things that may be written about by TINCC authors. A story of Jade and Ayla prior to going to France. Other stuff set in the summer or early in the school year.

like Ayla snogging Addy ...

You're using British slang to describe events between an American boy and a French girl?

... after having a gourmet Chinese meal. It IS an international school, after all

In my case it was cause of the heat and crap going on in my life that kept me from writing. Very hard to concentrate when sweat is dripping on your glasses and key board.

Huh. Alcohol-powered powers. Interesting. And not a Regen, so no tolerance either.

Malady wrote: Huh. Alcohol-powered powers. Interesting. And not a Regen, so no tolerance either.

Maybe some regen, but yeah, he's a short lived super hero.

Ah, he just needs to find some alternate fuel. Like powering a car on ethanol instead of gas. Maybe he could power himself with hydrogen?
...on second thought, maybe not a good idea...

"Oh, the humanity!"

@Cryptic - Samantha made me think "RecursiveFanfic of Domoviye's Samantha?" 'Cause Mithril, molten Mithril, and "I don't like my ugly body" ...

Oh. No. It's someone else... Oh! Dr. Macabre's Monster Witch girl!

Typos exist... But I want to read through the whole thing...

from the burner where he had melted the metal to the edge of the working she sat naked at the center of.

Awkward phrasing? StrangeSyntaxSpeaker like Yoda?

Devilmaster!

Mac's for a case of his micro brew ale

Dresden Reference! YAY!

Awkward phrasing mostly, and a bit of revision error. Originally I had planned for it to b a male wizard doing the ritual to himself, then had Icy bop me on the noggin.

Cryptic wrote: Awkward phrasing mostly, and a bit of revision error. Originally I had planned for it to b a male wizard doing the ritual to himself, then had Icy bop me on the noggin.

*nods*

Added typo list to previous post.

scrape out the inside of her skull

Eww.

Samantha's parents... Didn't parent well...

Malady wrote:

scrape out the inside of her skull

Eww.

Samantha's parents... Didn't parent well...

Very Ewww. This is a very twisted version of the ritual Kayda used on Lanie. Not quite sure what I'm gonna do to her just yet...

And no her parents did not raise her well.

Girl In A Box! What a Twist!



WMG: Alien Ponies inspire MLP:FiM.

Malady wrote: What a Twist!

[spoiler:Twist!]

WMG: Alien Ponies inspire MLP:FiM.

Indeed they are MLP:FiM inspired. I think though I need to do some tweaking on them if I use them for real in a story. I had wanted to make the Alicorn equivalent stand out more and thus changed up the horn design, and now I'm rethinking it.

-shifty eyes as an idea occurs to me- Oh... Discord could be fun to bring in...

And yes, I was going for the Firefly River reveal at the end.

Cryptic wrote:

Malady wrote: WMG: Alien Ponies inspire MLP:FiM.

Indeed they are MLP:FiM inspired. I think though I need to do some tweaking on them if I use them for real in a story. I had wanted to make the Alicorn equivalent stand out more and thus changed up the horn design, and now I'm rethinking it.

No, I mean that I presumed that as of your snip, FiM hadn't been made yet, and the Alien Ponies incident inspires the creation of FiM. Unless it was said that FiM has been made by that time...?

Malady wrote:

Cryptic wrote:

Malady wrote: WMG: Alien Ponies inspire MLP:FiM.

Indeed they are MLP:FiM inspired. I think though I need to do some tweaking on them if I use them for real in a story. I had wanted to make the Alicorn equivalent stand out more and thus changed up the horn design, and now I'm rethinking it.

No, I mean that I presumed that as of your snip, FiM hadn't been made yet, and the Alien Ponies incident inspires the creation of FiM. Unless it was said that FiM has been made by that time...?

Oh, oh! No, these snippets are set after FiM has been released. I think I dropped a blink and you miss it reference in the second entry. But then again I am old enough to have watched since Gen 1 Ponies.

In case anyone had the bad luck to get through life this far without encountering Right Said Fred, here is the song being referenced in this scene. You're welcome.

Kettlekorn wrote: In case anyone had the bad luck to get through life this far without encountering Right Said Fred, here is the song being referenced in this scene. You're welcome.

That was great, good thing it wasn't this song. That would probably send the wrong message, although the bullies might flee faster.

Kettle, that was HILARIOUS!!!

Not sure what MageOhki will say, but I definitely approve!

Thank you!

More Icy fun. Wrote it to take my mind off the heat I've been putting up with the last few days.

As for the Kara ficlet... I took the idea of the old B-movie the Nude Bomb and gave it a Whateley twist Kind of thinking it's a sim run not a real event though.

Cryptic wrote: More Icy fun. Wrote it to take my mind off the heat I've been putting up with the last few days.

Hmm... is that clawed ice woman spirit, the Yuki-Onna from Polk Kitsune's Shade 2: Rebirth? Or is it just similar? Icy claws being a typical use of ice powers and so on?

Malady wrote:

Cryptic wrote: More Icy fun. Wrote it to take my mind off the heat I've been putting up with the last few days.

Hmm... is that clawed ice woman spirit, the Yuki-Onna from Polk Kitsune's Shade 2: Rebirth? Or is it just similar? Icy claws being a typical use of ice powers and so on?

Just something similar. i wasn't really thinking of any one ice spirit, though I was thinking of Nacht's Christmas tales about the origins or Santa, the Wild Hunt and Norse winters while writing her.

Devilmaster underestimated his subject, successful bonded to not one but two spirits and survived despite what he thought. Though how much of her old mind and personality survived is anyone's guess right now.

And fun 2nd micro-scene, figures some pervert would get the idea to make a gas to dissolve clothing at Whateley sooner or later.

Dreamer wrote: Devilmaster underestimated his subject, successful bonded to not one but two spirits and survived despite what he thought. Though how much of her old mind and personality survived is anyone's guess right now.

How much is left is exactly why I haven't posted the next part yet.

Dreamer wrote: And fun 2nd micro-scene, figures some pervert would get the idea to make a gas to dissolve clothing at Whateley sooner or later.

I'm thinking Peeper's some how behind the gas... or is at least set up to take the blame.

Schol-R-LEA:

Hmm... So enhancing the Avatar Spirit affecting the host idea to Miyet? Interesting application! ... Although, I'd think it's unsupportable by Canon? Unless Bast wants to be annoying or something?

Like Aqurena's sex drive altered by her squirrel spirit in a Spring,_and_a_Young_Squirrel's_Fancy...

And that's a pun on Spring,_and_a_Young_Girl's_Fancy...

Or could be the effect of new biology...

Before anyone asks, I'm not sure yet why neither Marcie nor Malaya came in earlier for the Poe orientation. The most obvious answer would be that they didn't out themselves in their applications, and may not even realize their own orientations yet, but that would be boring... and if anyone else wants to take a stab at it, go ahead.

Ethan, OTOH, figured things out earlier in this world, so he's already settled into Poe, as have Carla and Billie. Ruth is a Junior, but has the new Freshman RA room in Poe.

I'm not sure about Mike, because I suspect that answering "I fucked your Mom and your Dad" on that part of the application would probably not be taken seriously.

Maybe Mary ended up in Poe due to a clerical error? That would be amusing, but I expect it wouldn't last very long.

I'm thinking Sal would be a PK brick, while Marcie is either a manifestor or a warper-speedster (though presumably Robin is a speedster, so maybe just the former for Marcie; but Robin would probably be a Senior, so I dunno).

Oh how to have Kara annoy Mrs. Hartford?

Ok, Icy is demanding i give her a "Let it go" like sequence, even though that movie had not been released in the WU yet at the time of her transformation.

Cryptic wrote: Oh how to have Kara annoy Mrs. Hartford?

Ok, Icy is demanding i give her a "Let it go" like sequence, even though that movie had not been released in the WU yet at the time of her transformation.

AU by forcing the movie to appear earlier due to advanced tech boosting the tech so they can make the movie earlier or something? In OTL, IIRC, they had to wait until their tech could do snow graphics, but in Whateley-verse, the tech appears sooner and stuff?

Else pick a different song? Or just do it as a reader-joke... Or give her a bit of small Precog to see the song in the future... Or AU by having the Frozen song be inspired by Icy? Instead of the other way around?

She was poking me more towards the "create ice dress, ice fortress and nasty ice servant" rather then the song.

Cryptic wrote: She was poking me more towards the "create ice dress, ice fortress and nasty ice servant" rather then the song.

Well, then you don't need to have her get the idea from the movie... Ice Dress and Ice Castle make sense if constant ice makes it easier to use her powers, so surrounding herself in ice is a reasonable option, Ice Castle also makes a defensible structure. and then Ice Golem Magic is just something she discovers or something...??

Servant Magic / Familiar Magic is rare, so that's harder to justify? Give her an offshoot of the Snow Spirit as a servant? ... Ice Demon Child?? Nah...

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@ MLP-Aliens person: Pinkie Promises are like Sorcerer's Contracts... Sorta? ... Wonder what could be done with that...

Yeah, there's no need for it to be inspired by the movie. I can guaran-fucking-tee you that even if I hadn't seen Frozen, building an ice castle would be one of the first things I'd do upon gaining ice powers. Winter was always my favorite season as a kid because it was the only season I could build snow forts (the sledding and Christmas didn't hurt things either). Actual ice palaces have been built in real life as well, long before Frozen.

That said, I'm a much bigger fan of the parody Let 'em Burn than I am of Let It Go, despite hating heat:

@Schol-R-LEA - Who's Joe Rosenthal?

He's another Walkyverse/ Dumbiverse character. He was originally Danny's roommate in Roomies, and was the first one shown being abducted by the Purple Aliens. He was later forced to join SEMME, with some absurd cover story about going to Africa with Joyce.

In Dumbing of Age (which resets all the characters from the Walkyverse series as college students, including those from Shortpacked!, with no superpowers or aliens), he's Danny's roommate again, and was the one who warned Danny that Dorothy was about to break up with him.

I admit, i read Dumbing of age and yet i hadn't made the connection between the two.
Exemplar, warper and sock manifestor ?

I hadn't considered the manifestor angle before, though I would think that if anything, he'd manifest condoms.

The devisor angle is more related to IW!Joe, who studied engineering and became a starship designer. And built UltraCar, back before UltraCar became Carla and got a job at Shortpacked Toys.

Nice. I'm only familiar with him from the crossover episode on Dexter's Lab, but Blue Falcon has been my mental image for Falcon, Steel Falcon, Superhawk, and Skyhawk.

@Esar: Well, that was intriguingly strange. A MtF shifter, that activates with a Devisor trait. I guess "he" now looks like his mom? And the other form is similar to his dad?

Using « » as what would normally be italics or quotation marks is a new one...

So is the having a space before end-punctuating with a '?'... But could be program messups or something?

And here I thought "personal time" would be a date with Rosie Palms... Interesting twist!

There's a few typos, but easily ignorable.

Kettlekorn wrote: Nice. I'm only familiar with him from the crossover episode on Dexter's Lab, but Blue Falcon has been my mental image for Falcon, Steel Falcon, Superhawk, and Skyhawk.

Found a copy of Scooby Doo Mask of the Blue Falcon as well as Mystery Incorporated on my library shelf.

I wanted to bring in Dyno Mutt, but his cybernetic enhancements didn't translate very well into the WU.

Thanks Malady, i have fixed everything ... i think. I confess : i am french, so in fact « » are "our" quotation marks. I admit, i didn't even know that those were not the same in english and in french (thanks wikipedia). (Also when we are writing dialogues we rather use - in succession for each character rather than quoting marks at each reply, but i tried to adapt).

Blake is not a shifter, at least he is not one currently in my mind (He could be but it adds a twist to several events). I don't know whether or not his power could fit into the canon, i think it does but i am not sure :


He is not really a MtF (Depending on how you mean it). I intended him to be closer to a stylized representation of a crossdresser. He is still male most of the time, he considers himself as such but from time to time he needs to express his feminine side. He enjoys his female form mainly because she is in fact closer to his original body than his new male body, also people are less wary of him as Anna than as Blake. He has/will have period of denial in one way or the other but maybe at the end of the school year he will be able to understand that Anna and Blake are the same person and that he can and needs to be both.

And yes his two "forms" are influenced by the representation he has of his "mother" and his "father". Final point : the two "forms" share the same powerset, but with different ratings.

Esar wrote: I confess : i am french, so in fact « » are "our" quotation marks. I admit, i didn't even know that those were not the same in english and in french (thanks wikipedia). (Also when we are writing dialogues we rather use - in succession for each character rather than quoting marks at each reply, but i tried to adapt).

I thought it was something like that... I guess I read about it before and forgot the specifics.

Esar wrote: Blake is not a shifter, at least he is not one currently in my mind (He could be but it adds a twist to several events). I don't know whether or not his power could fit into the canon, i think it does but i am not sure :

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He is basicly a warper, and he has access to what i could describe as a pocket dimension in which is stored another body with a different BIT. When he "shifts form" he in fact transfers the bodies from one dimension to the other, and they both share the same consciousness

Why does it make a difference?

- Contrary to shifter with set forms (at least some that i know of, such as Demona, i don't know if it's a common trait or not), time "flows" for each bodies and the injuries remain. Let's say for example that the female body, that we will call Anna for now, has one of her arm amputated after an accident. When Blake "shifts" to his "Blake form", he has both arms. If he "shifts" bach to Anna, the arm is still missing. (no i don't plan the amputation, i plan much worse for blake, at least psychologically but with a less permanent condition)
- The bodies need to recharche themselves in the "pocket dimension", the Blake form can maintain itself longer than the Anna form. That's one of the reason he "needs" to be Anna from time to time, even if he doesn't understand it for now)

He is not really a MtF (Depending on how you mean it). I intended him to be closer to a stylized representation of a crossdresser. He is still male most of the time, he considers himself as such but from time to time he needs to express his feminine side. He enjoys his female form mainly because she is in fact closer to his original body than his new male body, also people are less wary of him as Anna than as Blake. He has/will have period of denial in one way or the other but maybe at the end of the school year he will be able to understand that Anna and Blake are the same person and that he can and needs to be both.

And yes his two "forms" are influenced by the representation he has of his "mother" and his "father". Final point : the two "forms" share the same powerset, but with different ratings.

Well, that's an interesting power. 2 bodies, 1 mind. ... What's his sexuality like? Het in both forms? Or what? He was of the male sex, pre-manifestation, right?

By MtF, I meant physical transformation, like Exemplar MtF, not transgender mentally, pre/post-op stuff.

Why's he not in Poe? I guess he didn't fill out the boxes needed. And wanted to keep things hidden. The Administration's gonna have to sort this out... Handle it like the Reach situation?

If Anna gets pregnant... Well, I guess it wouldn't be a huge problem, just get fed enough and stuff like a normal pregnant woman. Unless the Pocket Dimension does Weird Things...

Malady wrote: Well, that's an interesting power. 2 bodies, 1 mind. ... What's his sexuality like? Het in both forms? Or what? He was of the male sex, pre-manifestation, right?

He was a male before his manifestation. His sexuality is not set in stone yet, i would say bisexual but much more attracted to women than men. (I have some ideas for a romantic interest even if right now she is more an archetype fulfilling a function than a real character ...)

Malady wrote: Why's he not in Poe? I guess he didn't fill out the boxes needed. And wanted to keep things hidden. The Administration's gonna have to sort this out... Handle it like the Reach situation?

For the time being, he is trying to hide it (The power testing at home was not really extensive, and he had already satisfied his urge before going so the deviser test didn't push him to react too much). He is particulary afraid of how his father would react to this part of his manifestation. But he can't keep the charade forever. At home it could work because he was able to go out as Anna without much problem. So he had "Anna time" regularly. At Whateley ? Not so much. So, hypothetically speaking, he could get more and more depressed and angry at himself, he could get into physical altercations with others and then would require counseling. At this point Dr Bellows could discover after several seances the kind of problem blake has and advise him and the administration to move him to poe.

Of course i would add a twist (but i don't know whether or not the administration would comply, it might be too much of a stretch of the suspension of disbelief):

I have mapped out the Key points of the school year regarding Blake/Anna character development. I don't think i will ever write a full fledge storyline (even if right now the year is separated in several parts, each one with its specific goal) but i might post other Vignettes. I began with this one because it could convey the main aspects of the character, tease important part of the storyline and sort of stand on its own ...

Parent Day should be an interesting Vignette without being too heavy (even if it means skipping pretty much the first 2 parts of the "story", but the way i imagine it currently, it wouldn't spoil what happened in the previous months except that Blake is in Poe)

Another installment of my Icy vignette. Which really needs a title, so suggestions are welcome.

Not 100% happy with Amber, I was channeling to much Harley Quinn into her. I think I need to go more Joker...

Also, 60% tempted to make Mister Cool and Amber a threesome as a spoof on how in the comics Harley has Poison Ivy on the side. I just don't wanna go the obvious plant woman path.

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So New horse breed of Ani-men. You really don't wanna know what bit of news I got the idea from.

Cryptic wrote: Also, 60% tempted to make Mister Cool and Amber a threesome as a spoof on how in the comics Harley has Poison Ivy on the side. I just don't wanna go the obvious plant woman path.

Rudolf.

Cryptic wrote: So New horse breed of Ani-men. You really don't wanna know what bit of news I got the idea from.

What, it WASN'T a play on MLP?

Minor point: as written, your text implies that Equus ferus caballus is the specific designation of the miniature horse. In fact, Equus ferus caballus is any domesticated horse no matter the size, from ponies to Clydesdales.

Sir Lee wrote:

Cryptic wrote: So New horse breed of Ani-men. You really don't wanna know what bit of news I got the idea from.

What, it WASN'T a play on MLP?

Minor point: as written, your text implies that Equus ferus caballus is the specific designation of the miniature horse. In fact, Equus ferus caballus is any domesticated horse no matter the size, from ponies to Clydesdales.

No, no MLP this time. No, this was spawned by a local police report.

And Ah -bleep-. That's what I get for trusting Wikipedia.

So... felt like my Icy snippets where turning into a real story, so I'm gonna start posting them in the Fabrication Lab. Link is here: whateleyacademy.net/index.php/forum/fabr...et-the-storm-rage-on

And the Discussion thread is here: whateleyacademy.net/index.php/forum/proj...m-rage-on-discussion

Been a few edits to the parts I posted in the micro scene thread as well as a few new scenes.

Okay so I'm doing a lot of things I hate right now. Negatively commenting, targeted commenting, and complaining about a pet peeve on an open forum but I feel it is warranted so here goes.

@Esar: I love the microscenes you have been writing but the latest one has a bunch of the dialouge run together in the same paragraph. It can be a huge inconvenience to readers. Generally when a new person starts speaking it warrants a new paragraph as a way of showing further distinction. It can be really confusing when a writer keeps a small conversation all in the same paragraph.

@Jarjaross : Dont feel bad about making valid and constructive criticism. I post those vignettes expecting and hoping for feedbacks on both the content and the form. You are right, i understand that i should apply more care to the format of my dialogues. The way the last vignette has been written can and does make it harder for the reader to follow the flow of the conversation. I will keep this in mind, those can be awkward enough as they are without having to deal with bad formatting on top of that.

Edit: It should be at least somewhat better now.

Well, at least Chris Blake is getting help...

Mr. Walter being gay seems a bit too convenient? There's no foreshadowing and stuff? But, that's minor, and it's the start of the story.

I guess the sorta-suicide attempt is either a Noodle Incident, or will be covered in a flashback...

Mr. Walter just revealing Poe like that is a bit strange, considering that there's the Poe secret? Unless Chris Blake has been cleared to know the secret or something...

To clarify :

- Blake is the main character, Chris is Blake's father, John Walter is more or less "just" a family friend.
- Chris/Iron maiden has no idea about Poe's secret, only that John is gay. (Poe's resident can out themselves if they wish to do so.)
- That's one of the problem with me writing the vignettes in no chronological order whatsoever. Basicly this Parent Day would be after the third part of the story. So here i am teasing events that have happened but that i have not written yet. It also means that i haven't really "earned" the reveal about John.

Typo:

"He sticked with me" should be "He stuck with me"

@Kettlekorn - ... Is that a sentient grain harvester or something?

No, it's totally mundane. Just a person driving around on a tractor moving round bales.

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... Okay, this calls a rosary, Buddist prayer bead set... Weird?

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Apologies for being EXTREMELY late to the conversation.

Yes, I did base the original microscene off of the Dive into the Heart from KH. The original had an A/N at the top that said to have a certain video playing while reading the scene.

As for using the wrong term for the Prayer Beads, I will admit that I did wrong. However, the videogame Okami uses the term "Rosary" for the bead-chain weapons and I thought that Rosary was a generic term for prayer beads.

Something that I'm not sure that I got across originally was that the scene happens the night before the Gun Show.

As for how Alex would have used the Beads or the Bells against the imps and cherubs, the beads would either be used as a whip or thrown individually, while the bells would be used as a blunt weapon.

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Malady wrote:
... Well, no one's complaining... So I might expand on the scene? Nah. Don't got the time. Anyone can co-opt it, perhaps give it to another Tao Servant, but give them the Beads or the Bell.

That's not exactly right. The choice of three items isn't about ones affinity to the items themselves, but what they represent. One items represents Attack, another Defense and the third Magic. The first is how the characters stats will favor, while the second is which one they not have as fast a growth in. From the choices Alex made, his offensive skills would grow faster, but he would have a harder time learning and defending himself from the magical arts. Chou seems to have a bit of a weakness to mystical attacks.

As for what I thought would have happened if Alex chose the Beads or the Bells at the Gun Show, for Bells, he becomes the Anti-Necromancer, who slays the unslayable, walks the unwalkable paths and forces the flesh to rot. For the Beads, I was going to go with becoming the Radiant Servant of Amaterasu-no-Okami. All three paths would have lead to him/her meeting Molly, because there has to be SOME benefits to breaking normality (Not that I consider Molly to be a reward for serving. I tried to imply in my original microscene that if one is a Servant of the Balance, their "soul-mate" for lack of a better term is easier to find. I don't like using the term soul-mate though. I prefer the idea that strong relationships, both positive and negative can endure in some way into reincarnations, but it is not binding that the relationships will go the same way. Your Beloved in one life could become your Nemesis in the next and vise-versa. The path between Alex and Molly meeting might take longer to happen, but it WILL happen)

(I am aware that I used the wrong name and pronouns for Chou in the above post. However, since there was no assurance that had Alex taken the Beads or the Bells that Alex would become female. I mean no offense for that.)

Hmmm... I think the first point, obviously, is which form she should take. Ice-bat-demons, Ice-bird-demon or Ice-tiger-demon? Personally, I don't see either of the three animals as being particularly related to the ice theme. In particular, while a snow owl or a Siberian tiger might evoke the necessary cold association, bats... don't. But white birds traditionally bring angelic associations, not demonic. So... by elimination, I think I would go with the Siberian tiger. But there are other animals with stronger associations with cold: wolf and bear, to start with. And both have done their share of "evil" associations.

Second... all three descriptions need some proofing:
v.1: "...feathers of fur..." (????)
v.2: "where made of..." (should be "were")
v.3: "...as her incisors elongating." (should be "elongated"). Also, another instance of "where" used instead of "were".

Also, the comma in the first sentence after beauty is extraneous.

I like version 2. My first thought was harpy, not angel.

Related to Cryptic's Ponies story, and my own little riff on that, have an epileptic tree: The next scene will involve Tennyo, who will tell them to wait for the experts to arrive. A few minutes later, Sara will show up, followed by Josie Gilman with Dr Amazing in tow (Tennyo had to call the others, and explain the situation to Messing before he agreed to go, hence the delay). They all agree that the Ponies aren't from Earth; Tennyo and Josie even say they know who they are, or at least who their species is.

@Sir Lee; The first two where my answers to "What would a demon from the coldest place in Hell look like?" The first is a more traditional look, while the second is semi based on how a Zephyr/wind elemental are described in myth, just with a frosty twist as one of the spirits in her is a rather nasty winter storm spirit.

The ice tiger... I blame that one on a drop in ,my blood- caffeine levels. And cause I like cat girls.

@Domo that is some interesting GSD, are you going to do more with that character?

No idea.

Does anyone else continously read 'Meagan' as 'Me again'?

Jarjaross wrote: Does anyone else continously read 'Meagan' as 'Me again'?

I do now.

Domoviye wrote:

Jarjaross wrote: Does anyone else continously read 'Meagan' as 'Me again'?

I do now.

Yay, I'm spreading my dislexia!